爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Reduce repetition, correct grammar and streamline ideas. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid duplicate words (“hobbies hobbies”), fix verb forms and awkward phrasing (e.g., “helps me relax after a busy day and to work” → “helps me relax after a busy day and recharge for work”). Keep answers within 3–4 sentences and use one or two specific details (when, who, how) linked with words like “for example” or “because.”

範例: I have several hobbies, including reading, playing basketball and listening to music. For example, I play basketball with my friends every weekend because it helps me relax and stay fit. In addition, listening to music helps me unwind after a busy day and sometimes I discover new bands.

建議: Correct tense and verb forms and add brief linking language. Use past simple consistently for childhood activities (“I liked drawing and painting” not “I like”). Give one specific detail such as frequency or a notable memory and link ideas with connectors like “also” or “in addition.”

範例: Yes, I did. I liked drawing and painting because it allowed me to use my imagination, and I took part in small art competitions at school. I also played football with my friends after school most days, which was exciting and helped me make close friends.

建議: Remove repetition and use smoother phrasing. Use a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting specifics (when classes started, how often you draw, an example of a gift). Avoid repeating words (“I still I still”).

範例: Yes, I have enjoyed drawing since childhood. My parents enrolled me in art classes when I was seven, and I still draw a few times a week to relax; sometimes I give my best pieces to friends as birthday presents.

建議: Fix grammar and reduce redundancy. Use a concise topic sentence, correct word order and pronouns (“we all enjoy”), and avoid repeated or unclear phrases. Add one specific example of a recent family activity and link cause and effect with words like “because” or “so.”

範例: Yes, many of my hobbies overlap with my family’s. For example, we often cook a new recipe together on Sundays and go hiking on Saturday mornings, which helps us bond and creates lasting memories.

× I have several hobbies such as reading, playing sport and listening to music.

✓ I have several hobbies such as reading, playing sports and listening to music.

The word 'sport' in this context should be plural 'sports' because it refers to activities in general. Use the plural form when talking about types of activities. Suggestion: say 'playing sports' or specify a particular sport like 'playing basketball.'

× I find that having hobbies hobbies helps me relax after a busy day and to work, and it also gives me then the chance to meet new people and learn.

✓ I find that having hobbies helps me relax after a busy day and at work, and it also gives me the chance to meet new people and learn.

Multiple issues: duplicated word 'hobbies hobbies' is a typographical error; the phrase 'and to work' is incorrect after 'helps me' because parallel gerund forms are needed ('helps me relax... and work' or better 'relax... and at work'); 'gives me then the chance' has incorrect adverb placement—'then' is unnecessary and awkward. Use parallel structure with gerunds and natural adverb placement. Suggestion: use 'helps me relax after a busy day and at work' and remove 'then.'

× Yes, I had some hobbies when I was child.

✓ Yes, I had some hobbies when I was a child.

Missing article 'a' before 'child' makes the phrase ungrammatical. When referring to being a child, use 'a child.' Suggestion: always include articles in common expressions like 'when I was a child.'

× I like drawing and paint because it's so fun and I could use my imagination.

✓ I liked drawing and painting because it was so fun and I could use my imagination.

Tense consistency error: the question asks about childhood hobbies (past), so verbs should be in the past tense. 'Like' should be 'liked'; 'paint' should be the gerund 'painting' to match 'drawing'; 'it's' should be 'it was.' Keep tense consistent and use parallel gerunds for listing activities.

× I also played football with my friends after school, which was exciting.

✓ I also played football with my friends after school, which was exciting.

This sentence is actually correct grammatically; no change needed. It is included here only to acknowledge that subject-verb agreement is fine. Suggestion: none.

× Yes, I have liked drawing since I was a child.

✓ Yes, I have liked drawing since I was a child.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable: present perfect 'have liked' is possible but uncommon with 'since' for a long-standing preference—more natural is 'I've liked' (contraction) or 'I have enjoyed drawing since I was a child.' No correction required for grammar per the provided list. Suggestion: use 'I have enjoyed drawing since I was a child' for naturalness.

× My parents sent me to art classes when I was young and I still I still draw pictures in my free time.

✓ My parents sent me to art classes when I was young, and I still draw pictures in my free time.

The sentence contains a duplicated phrase 'I still I still' (typographical error) and lacks a comma before the conjunction joining two independent clauses. Remove the duplicate and add a comma for clarity. Suggestion: '...when I was young, and I still draw pictures...'.

× Drawing helps me relax and sometimes I give my drawings to my friends as gifts.

✓ Drawing helps me relax, and sometimes I give my drawings to my friends as gifts.

This sentence is grammatically correct but needs a comma before 'and' joining two independent clauses for better punctuation. No adjective/adverb error; included to provide minor punctuation improvement. Suggestion: add a comma for clarity.

× Yes, I do share my many hobbies with my family members.

✓ Yes, I share many of my hobbies with my family members.

Word order and pronoun placement are awkward. 'Do share my many hobbies' is not wrong but 'share many of my hobbies' is more natural. Move 'many' to modify 'hobbies' and place the possessive 'my' with the noun. Suggestion: 'I share many of my hobbies with my family.'

× For instance, we are we all enjoy watching movies and cooking together, and we often go hiking or play board games on weekends.

✓ For instance, we all enjoy watching movies and cooking together, and we often go hiking or play board games on weekends.

The phrase contains an extra 'we are' which creates a subject-verb agreement and structure error. Remove the redundant 'we are' to make the subject and verb agree and the sentence flow naturally. Suggestion: 'For instance, we all enjoy...'.

× Have similar hobbies really helps us bond and makes it easier to play in family activities.

✓ Having similar hobbies really helps us bond and makes it easier to take part in family activities.

'Have similar hobbies' is incorrect gerund/infinitive structure here; use the gerund 'Having' as the subject. Also 'helps us bond and makes' requires parallel structure. 'Play in family activities' is unnatural; use 'take part in family activities' or 'participate in family activities.' Suggestion: 'Having similar hobbies really helps us bond and makes it easier to take part in family activities.'