爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng hơn, ngữ pháp và trật tự từ còn sai (ví dụ “I listen my listening to music is our hobbies”). Hãy mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề ngắn gọn, sau đó đưa 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể và sử dụng liên từ phù hợp để mạch lạc. Tránh lặp từ và giới hạn độ dài tối đa 5 câu. Ví dụ chỉnh sửa nên dùng thì hiện tại đơn cho thói quen: “I enjoy listening to music. It helps me relax and refresh my mood. In my free time, I usually listen to pop, hip hop and rap.”

範例: I enjoy listening to music because it helps me relax. In my free time I usually listen to pop, hip hop and rap, and sometimes I explore new artists on streaming apps.

建議: Câu trả lời thiếu rõ ràng và nhiều lỗi cú pháp, từ không phù hợp (ví dụ “I have the pennies, the house and sun” không rõ nghĩa). Hãy bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề đơn giản trong quá khứ, giải thích lý do và nêu một ví dụ cụ thể về hoạt động bạn làm khi còn nhỏ. Dùng linking words như “because” hoặc “for example” để liên kết ý. Giữ 2–3 câu đủ ý.

範例: When I was a child, I enjoyed painting because I loved bright colours. For example, I often painted houses, suns and flowers on paper using watercolours.

建議: Câu trả lời rất khó hiểu, nhiều cụm từ không đúng (ví dụ “jewellery thing that you have”, “coloring my were my favorite part time”). Cần trả lời trực tiếp: khẳng định có hay không, giải thích cụ thể hobby đó là gì, tại sao bạn giữ nó đến bây giờ và một lợi ích cụ thể. Sử dụng thì hiện tại hoàn thành nếu muốn nhấn mạnh sự kéo dài (“I have enjoyed … since childhood”).

範例: Yes, I have enjoyed making jewellery since I was a child. I learned to thread beads and design bracelets, and this hobby still helps me relax and express my creativity.

建議: Câu trả lời lặp lại và thiếu chi tiết. Hãy trả lời trực tiếp, nêu rõ khác biệt và lý do, hoặc một ví dụ so sánh với sở thích của thành viên gia đình. Dùng liên từ như “but” hoặc “because” để giải thích ngắn gọn. Giữ 2–3 câu súc tích.

範例: No, my hobby is different from my family's because they prefer outdoor sports while I like creative activities such as making jewellery. However, we all support each other's interests.

× Yes I listen my listening to music is our hobbies.

✓ Yes, I listen to music; listening to music is my hobby.

The sentence uses incorrect pronouns and possessives ('my listening' and 'our hobbies') and missing preposition 'to'. Use 'listen to music' and singular 'hobby' for one person. Suggest: use 'listening to music is my hobby' or 'I listen to music.'

× I feel relaxed and refreshing my feelings.

✓ I feel relaxed and refreshed.

The word 'refreshing' is an active participle and doesn't correctly describe the speaker's state. Use the adjective 'refreshed' to describe how you feel. Also avoid 'my feelings' which is redundant here. Suggest: 'I feel relaxed and refreshed.'

× For example, I listen pop, hip hop and rap during my free time.

✓ For example, I listen to pop, hip hop, and rap during my free time.

The verb 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' when followed by a music genre or object. Also add commas between items in a list. Suggest: 'I listen to pop, hip hop, and rap.'

× My hobby is a try is uh paint because I like colors and paint.

✓ My hobby is painting because I like colors and painting.

The phrase 'a try is uh paint' is ungrammatical. Use the gerund 'painting' to name the hobby. Repeat 'painting' or use 'it' to avoid repetition. Suggest: 'My hobby is painting because I like colors.'

× I have the pennies, the house and sun.

✓ I paint pennies, houses, and the sun.

Original sentence lacks clear verb and uses wrong articles. Likely the student meant objects they paint. Use plural nouns consistently and include commas. Suggest: 'I paint pennies, houses, and the sun.' If not, clarify intended meaning.

× Yes, I have a jewellery thing that you have because it's coloring my were my favorite part time.

✓ Yes, I have some jewelry that I made because coloring it was my favorite pastime.

Sentence mixes second-person 'you' and incorrect verb forms. 'Jewellery thing' is vague; 'some jewelry that I made' is clearer. Use past tense 'was' for 'favorite pastime' if referring to childhood. 'Coloring' should take an object. Suggest: 'I have some jewelry that I made because coloring it was my favorite pastime.'

× I might it's help me relax and replace my feeling.

✓ It helps me relax and improves my mood.

'Might it's help' is incorrect modal/contracted structure. Use simple present 'it helps' to state general truth. 'Replace my feeling' is unnatural; 'improves my mood' is idiomatic. Suggest: 'It helps me relax and improves my mood.'

× No, my hobby is My hobby is not same with my family.

✓ No, my hobby is not the same as my family's.

Sentence repeats phrase and uses incorrect comparison 'same with'. Use 'the same as' and possessive 'my family's' to indicate family members. Suggest: 'My hobby is not the same as my family's.'

× But I think my hobby is very very beautiful and great.

✓ But I think my hobby is very beautiful and great.

Repeating 'very' twice is informal and unnecessary. The adjectives 'beautiful' and 'great' are acceptable, but consider choosing one or using 'really' once for emphasis. Suggest: 'I think my hobby is really beautiful.'