爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cải thiện sự tự nhiên và mạch lạc: tránh các tiếng ậm ừ (umm, uh), rút ngắn câu, bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể hơn (ví dụ loại sách, ví dụ về kỹ năng sống bạn học được). Sử dụng liên từ để kết nối ý (for example, because, which helps). Giữ tối đa 3-4 câu.

範例: Yes, my main hobby is reading books because they teach me practical life skills and broaden my knowledge. For example, I read self-help and personal finance books, which help me manage my time and budget better. I usually read for 30–60 minutes before bed.

建議: Giảm lặp từ và tránh tiếng ngập ngừng: trả lời trực tiếp, nêu ví dụ cụ thể từ quá khứ (tên sách hoặc thể loại) và mô tả một lợi ích cụ thể bạn nhận được. Sử dụng câu nối để khiến câu mạch lạc hơn (for instance, which helped me...). Giữ câu ngắn gọn và rõ ràng.

範例: Yes, I loved reading as a child, especially adventure and science books, which sparked my curiosity. For instance, reading science stories encouraged me to do simple experiments at home and improved my problem-solving skills.

建議: Chỉnh ngữ pháp và thứ tự từ: dùng thì hiện hoàn thành phù hợp (I have had) và cấu trúc tự nhiên hơn. Tránh lặp và nêu rõ một hoặc hai lợi ích cụ thể, kèm ví dụ ngắn. Dùng liên từ để liên kết ý (so, therefore, which helped me...).

範例: Yes, I have had a hobby of reading since childhood, and it has always interested me. It taught me critical thinking and helped me understand social situations better, for example when I read stories about friendships and decision-making.

建議: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và rõ ràng: dùng cấu trúc đối lập rõ ràng (Not exactly; although/we do share...). Liệt kê các hoạt động ngắn gọn và cụ thể hơn, nói thêm tần suất hoặc cảm xúc để phong phú câu trả lời. Dùng liên từ (however, for example, we often...).

範例: Not exactly; although our main hobbies differ, we often share activities together. For example, we cook meals together every weekend and sometimes play football in the park, which helps us bond and relax.

× Yes, I have, my hobby is reading books because reading books brings me many benefits.

✓ Yes, I do. My hobby is reading books because it brings me many benefits.

The student used 'I have' in response to 'Do you have any hobbies?' In English, the correct short answer uses the auxiliary 'do' for present simple questions: 'Yes, I do.' Also, repeating 'reading books' is redundant; use singular verb 'brings' with the singular activity as subject. Suggestion: answer with 'Yes, I do.' and use a clear main clause: 'My hobby is reading books because it brings me many benefits.'

× Umm, I can learn about life skills and I can know more knowledge, uh, about some problem that I'm curious.

✓ I can learn life skills and gain more knowledge about problems I am curious about.

The phrase 'know more knowledge' is incorrect; use 'gain knowledge' or 'learn'. 'Some problem that I'm curious' lacks correct noun form and preposition placement. Use plural 'problems' if general, and the correct order 'curious about'. Also prefer 'I am' instead of contraction 'I'm' in formal responses. Suggestion: use verbs 'learn' and 'gain' and place 'about' after 'curious'.

× My hobby when I was a child was umm, reading books because it really useful for me, it can help me a lot in uh, my life and umm, it brings me a lot of knowledge.

✓ My hobby when I was a child was reading books because it was really useful for me; it helped me a lot in my life and gave me a lot of knowledge.

When talking about childhood, use past tense: 'was really useful', 'helped me', 'gave me' instead of present or modal forms. Also remove filler words and combine clauses correctly. Suggestion: keep past tense consistently when referring to past habits or effects.

× Yes I have, my hobby I have had since to hold was reading book because it brings me many benefits like I can know about some problems I'm curious and I can learn about life skills.

✓ Yes, I have. My hobby that I have had since childhood is reading books because it brings me many benefits, such as learning about problems I am curious about and acquiring life skills.

Original has structure and word choice errors: 'since to hold' is incorrect, should be 'since childhood' or 'since I was a child'. Use 'reading books' plural. 'I can know about' is wrong; use 'learning about' or 'finding out about'. Maintain present perfect 'have had' but clarify the time expression. Suggestion: use 'since childhood' and verbs 'learning'/'acquiring' for clarity.

× Not exactly, but my family members always share some interest with together and we always enjoy the same activity, for example cook meal, play football games or talk to each other to share about.

✓ Not exactly. My family members share some interests, and we often enjoy the same activities, for example cooking meals, playing football or talking to each other to share things.

Errors: 'share some interest with together' is ungrammatical—use 'share some interests' or 'have some interests in common'. Use plural 'interests' and plural 'activities'. Verbs should be in -ing form after 'enjoy': 'cooking', 'playing'. 'Talk to each other to share about' is incorrect; use 'talk to each other to share things' or 'share our experiences'. Suggestion: use 'share some interests', plural nouns, and gerunds after 'enjoy'.