爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (tenses, articles, plurals), and avoid repetition. Use linking words briefly to add specific details (when, where, how often, benefits). Keep to under 5 sentences.

範例: Yes, I enjoy jogging. I go for a run most weekends and on my days off because I want to stay healthy and maintain an active lifestyle. Running also boosts my strength and energy, and I usually run for about 30–40 minutes in a nearby park.

建議: Give a direct topic sentence, correct grammar (subject pronouns, past tense), and make the anecdote concise and clear. Use linking words (for example, and so) to structure the story and include a specific detail such as frequency or a typical game to make it vivid.

範例: Yes, when I was a child my cousins and I loved racing each other for fun. For example, we'd sprint to the house after school, and the winner got the first bite of our snack while the loser had to wash the dishes. Those competitions happened almost every afternoon and were a fun family tradition.

建議: Respond with a clear main sentence and correct tense and vocabulary (e.g. 'ran in races' not 'doing a marathon'). Explain briefly how the hobby continued and include a specific example (events, frequency). Keep it concise and avoid awkward phrasing.

範例: Yes, I have enjoyed running since childhood. At school we took part in regular sports events and cross-country races, which encouraged me to train and compete a few times each year. That early experience is why I still run regularly today.

建議: Answer directly and use clear comparisons and correct grammar (verb forms, articles). Use linking words (however, whereas) to contrast your hobby with family members' activities and provide a short specific detail about each person's hobby.

範例: Not really; my family members had different interests. For example, my brother preferred playing PlayStation at home, whereas my sister often went to the mall to shop or see movies. In contrast, I was the most active and enjoyed outdoor activities like running.

× Yes of course I like jogging.

✓ Yes, of course I like jogging.

Missing comma after 'Yes' and 'of course' is an interrupter; add commas for correct punctuation. This is punctuation rather than grammar list item, but fits present tense context. Improve by using commas to separate discourse markers.

× I'm doing this physical activity every weekends and day offs.

✓ I do this physical activity every weekend and on days off.

Errors: 'I'm doing' (present continuous) is incorrect for habitual action; use simple present 'I do'. 'Every weekends' should be singular 'every weekend'. 'day offs' is incorrect; use 'days off' and include preposition 'on' with 'days off'. Suggest using simple present for habits and correct plural forms and prepositions.

× It's because I want to keep myself healthy and have a active lifestyle.

✓ It's because I want to keep myself healthy and have an active lifestyle.

Article error before adjective: 'a active' should be 'an active' because 'active' begins with a vowel sound. Also structure 'keep myself healthy and have an active lifestyle' is fine. Use 'an' before vowel sounds.

× I usually do it because it makes me more stronger after act running.

✓ I usually do it because it makes me stronger after running.

'More stronger' is redundant; use 'stronger' only. 'Act running' is ungrammatical; correct phrase is 'running'. Remove unnecessary words to avoid double comparatives.

× I remember when I was young, me and my cousins like Ronnie and we usually compete with each other that whoever comes first then he he can take the first bite in our snack and whoever comes last then he will go and clean the dishes.

✓ I remember when I was young, my cousins like Ronnie and I usually competed with each other: whoever came first could take the first bite of our snack, and whoever came last had to wash the dishes.

Pronoun order and case: use 'my cousins and I' (subjective case and conventional order). Tense shift: describing past events, so use past simple 'competed', 'came', 'could', 'had to'. Remove duplicate filler 'he he'. Use 'wash the dishes' or 'wash' rather than 'clean the dishes' for natural phrasing. Use 'of' for 'first bite of our snack'.

× Oh yes, my childhood years I spent a lot of time doing a marathon and it's because our school back then has on sports that encourages students like me to run.

✓ Oh yes, in my childhood years I spent a lot of time running marathons, and it's because our school back then had sports that encouraged students like me to run.

Tense and verb form errors: 'doing a marathon' is better as 'running marathons' (plural if habitual). 'Has on sports' is incorrect; use past 'had sports' because referring to past. 'Encourages' should be past 'encouraged' to match past context. Also add 'in' before 'my childhood years' for natural phrasing.

× I guess not.

✓ I guess not.

This sentence is acceptable in present tense as a response; no grammatical correction needed.

× I remember when we were young my brother used to play PlayStation inside our home and my sister usually go to the mall with her friends shopping or watching movies and I'm just the one who is active back then.

✓ I remember that when we were young my brother used to play PlayStation at home, my sister usually went to the mall with her friends to shop or watch movies, and I was the only one who was active back then.

Tense consistency: past habits should be expressed in past ('used to play', 'usually went'). 'Go' should be 'went'. 'Inside our home' is more natural as 'at home'. 'Shopping or watching movies' needs infinitive marker 'to' after 'went... to shop or watch'. 'I'm just the one who is active back then' mixes present and past; change to past 'I was the only one who was active back then' and use 'only one' for clarity.