爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 句子冗长且有重复词（如“I like”多次出现、“makes makes”），語法和搭配不夠自然。應該開門見山先作主題句，然後用1–2個簡短句子補充細節，並使用連接詞使表達更流暢。同時注意動詞搭配（例如 say “make me feel more confident” 而不是 “makes me to express”）。

範例: Yes, I have several hobbies. I enjoy playing badminton, golf and tennis, and I also like singing and dancing. These activities help me express myself and make me feel more confident.

建議: 時態使用不準確（應用過去式描述兒時），口語填充詞（uh）較多，並有部分冗餘（重複表達喜歡表演）。建議用過去時說明主要事實，並用一到兩句具體細節支持，如描述參加的活動或感受，避免超過五句。

範例: Yes, I did. I used to spend a lot of time dancing as a child because it felt like a perfect fit for me. I enjoyed performing on stage and seeing my parents look proud made me very happy.

建議: 句子語法不準確（“since I was a childhood” 應為 “since childhood” 或 “since I was a child”），且表達重複與啰嗦。應先用主題句直接回答，再用一兩句說明原因（如何開始、受誰啟發），並使用清晰的連接詞。

範例: Yes, I've had a hobby since childhood — dancing. I was inspired when I saw dancers performing in a shopping mall, and that motivated me to start taking lessons.

建議: 答案含有不必要或錯誤的信息（“know her hubby” 不合適且不相關），並有重複詞與填充詞。應直接回答並簡明解釋差異，避免提及不相關或不準確的細節。注意用詞（hobby而非 hubby）。

範例: No, my hobbies are different from my family's. I'm the only one who enjoys dancing, while other family members prefer different activities, and my little sister is too young to have hobbies yet.

× I like to play badminton, I like to play golf, tennis and I like to sing, I like to dance and these hobbies make makes me to express myself and be more confident about myself.

✓ I like to play badminton, golf and tennis. I also like to sing and dance, and these hobbies help me express myself and make me more confident.

句子存在动词重复（make makes）和不定式使用错误（make me to express 应为 make me express 或 help me express）。另外并列项目的表达冗长且标点不当，需用并列词组简化。建议去掉多余的动词重复，使用 help 或 make + 宾语 + 动词原形，合并并列爱好并用逗号或 and 连接，使句子更简洁自然。

× I do have a hobby. When I was a child, uh, it was dancing because I felt dancing was the perfect match to me. I love dancing on this stage. I love to express myself, seeing me on stage shining and looking at my parents to be proud of myself.

✓ I did have a hobby. When I was a child, it was dancing because I felt dancing was a perfect fit for me. I loved dancing on stage. I loved expressing myself, seeing myself shine on stage and making my parents proud.

句子时态混用（现在时与过去背景不一致）：问的是过去，应使用过去时（did have, loved）。短语“perfect match to me”不地道，改为 a perfect fit for me。代词和非谓语形式错误：seeing me on stage shining → seeing myself shine on stage；looking at my parents to be proud of myself 结构不正确，应表达为 making my parents proud。建议统一使用过去时，使用自然搭配（a perfect fit, see oneself shine, make someone proud）。

× I do have a hobby since I was a childhood, it was umm, dancing because I saw people on stage dancing in the mall, so I got interested in inspired by them. So I like dancing as well.

✓ I have had a hobby since I was a child: it was dancing, because I saw people dancing on stage in the mall and was inspired by them. So I like dancing too.

错误包括冠词和名词搭配（a childhood 应为 a child 或 simply child），时态与时态结构（since 引导的时间点常与完成时连用，改为 have had 或改写为过去时）。“got interested in inspired by them”是重复与搭配错误，应选用 was inspired by them 或 became interested in them。最后用 too 更自然。建议使用正确短语 a child，或用完成时表达自…以来（have had），并避免重复表达。

× No, I do not have the same hobbies as my family members because umm I am the only one who likes dancing in my family. I do have a sister but she's only three years old so she does does not know her hubby yet.

✓ No, I do not have the same hobbies as my family members because I am the only one in my family who likes dancing. I do have a sister, but she's only three years old, so she does not have a hobby yet.

句子有重复（does does）和词语使用错误（hubby 指丈夫，不适用于三岁孩子，应为 hobby）。句子顺序也稍显笨拙，改为 who likes dancing 放在 family 后更自然。建议删除重复词，使用正确词汇 hobby，并保持句子流畅清晰。