爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more fluent and concise: give a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and fillers, and add one specific detail using a linking word. Also correct small grammar issues (e.g., “a hobby” not “have hobby”; “my coach teaches me”).

範例: I enjoy playing tennis. I have a large court in front of my house, so I practise there most evenings. In addition, I take weekly lessons from a coach to improve my technique.

建議: Structure your answer: start with a clear topic sentence, then give specific supporting details with correct grammar and fewer hesitations. Use linking words (for example, “when I was seven” and “as a result”). Clarify unclear parts (e.g., competition result).

範例: Yes. As a child I enjoyed playing the piano. When I was seven I entered local competitions and once won first prize, which gave me confidence to perform on stage regularly.

建議: Respond directly and succinctly: state the hobby, then add one or two specific comparisons showing improvement, using linking words like “and” or “so”. Remove repetitions and filler words.

範例: Yes, I have continued playing the piano since childhood. Over the years I have improved a lot, and now I can play more advanced pieces than I could when I was young.

建議: Avoid inappropriate or socially sensitive statements and be honest but diplomatic. Start with a clear response about shared hobbies (if any), provide a positive family activity, and correct grammar. If drinking is occasional, say so and give a neutral family activity instead.

範例: Not really. My family and I usually enjoy cooking and eating meals together, which is something we all like to do at weekends. Occasionally we have a drink at celebrations, but our main shared hobby is preparing food and trying new recipes.

× Yes, I did have a hobbies, which was, umm, playing piano.

✓ Yes, I did have a hobby, which was playing the piano.

The noun 'hobbies' should be singular 'hobby' because the verb phrase 'did have a' refers to a single hobby in this context. Also include the article 'the' before 'piano' when referring to playing an instrument in general. Suggestion: use 'a hobby' for one item and 'the piano' when talking about the instrument.

× I was a first grade on the Concord and I got, uh, lots of uh, uh, stage I go to, I go up to the stage and I always.

✓ I was first place in the competition and I received many awards; I always went up on stage.

The original sentence mixes wrong noun forms and tenses. 'A first grade on the Concord' is incorrect; use 'first place in the competition'. 'Got lots of stage' is ungrammatical; use 'received many awards' or 'won many prizes'. Also correct tense for repeated past action is the simple past 'I always went up on stage.' Suggestion: restructure to clear, past-tense statements and use correct nouns ('competition', 'awards').

× Yes, I, I when I was a child, I, I love to play, uh, playing the piano since now I love to play piano right now.

✓ When I was a child, I loved to play the piano, and I still love to play it now.

Mixed present and past tense: 'When I was a child' requires past tense 'loved'. 'Love' should be 'loved' for past habit. Also 'since now' is incorrect; use 'still' or 'now' to indicate continuation. Use pronoun 'it' to refer to 'the piano'. Suggestion: maintain consistent tense when comparing past and present: past for childhood, present for current state.

× So I have a hobby that it, which is playing piano and I got much better when compared to when I was young and until now.

✓ So I have a hobby, which is playing the piano, and I have gotten much better compared to when I was young.

Remove redundant 'it' and ensure correct noun phrase 'the piano'. Use present perfect 'have gotten' to show change from past to present. 'Until now' is unnecessary with present perfect; omit it. Suggestion: use present perfect for improvement over time and remove redundant words.

× Yes, I have a hobby which is drinking alcohol. My whole family loves to drink alcohol and I always drink alcohol every day and which is my hobby and which is my my old family members hobby.

✓ Yes, I enjoy drinking alcohol. My whole family also likes it, and I drink every day; it is considered a family pastime.

The original repeats 'which' and 'my' and uses awkward phrasing 'old family members hobby'. Use pronoun 'it' to refer to 'drinking alcohol' and avoid repetition. 'Old family members hobby' is unclear; use 'family pastime' or 'a hobby shared by my family.' Suggestion: simplify and use pronouns to avoid repetition and choose clearer nouns for family-shared activities.

× So my my family hobby is uh drinking alcohol with family members.

✓ So my family's hobby is drinking alcohol together.

Use the possessive form 'my family's' instead of 'my my family'. 'With family members' is redundant; 'together' is more natural. Suggestion: use possessive nouns and concise phrases for collective activities.