爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammatical errors and irrelevant phrases. Keep replies concise (max 5 sentences). Start with a clear topic sentence stating your hobbies, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words (for example, “for example” or “also”). Avoid invented phrases and incorrect word choices.

範例: I have several hobbies. For example, I enjoy gardening, where I grow vegetables and flowers in my small backyard. I also read regularly — I usually read novels and news articles to relax and stay informed. In addition, I collect stamps from different countries as a quiet, focused pastime.

建議: Your response addresses the question but is repetitive and contains unclear phrases. Give a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific examples with linking words such as “however” or “for example.” Use clearer vocabulary (e.g., “interests” instead of “movie”) and avoid repetition.

範例: I didn’t have a single specific hobby as a child, but I enjoyed various activities. For example, I often played simple games and helped with cooking, which I found fun. However, my main interest was reading books, especially stories and picture books, because they helped me learn new words and use my imagination.

建議: The answer is confusing and mixes hobbies (writing vs reading). Give a clear topic sentence naming the hobby you’ve kept since childhood, then support it with specific examples and reasons using linking words like “because” or “since.” Use simpler, accurate expressions (e.g., “I’ve enjoyed writing since childhood” and explain what you write).

範例: Yes — I have enjoyed writing since I was a child. For example, I used to write short stories and poems about school and family events, and I still keep a journal today. I enjoy it because writing helps me express my ideas and improves my English vocabulary.

建議: This answer is clear and relevant but a bit basic. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then give brief comparisons and a linking word like “however” to show contrast. Add one specific detail about how your hobby differs or how you sometimes share activities to make the answer richer.

範例: No, my hobbies are different from my family’s. For example, my father enjoys watching TV and my sister plays games on her phone, whereas I prefer reading novels and newspapers. However, we sometimes cook together on weekends when my mother is preparing meals.

× Office calls away that people used to pass their laser time and they get pleasure by it.

✓ People often spend their leisure time on hobbies and derive pleasure from them.

The original sentence has unclear phrasing and incorrect words (e.g. 'Office calls away', 'laser time'). This is a sentence structure and vocabulary problem. Replace with a clear, conventional expression: 'spend their leisure time' and 'derive pleasure from'. Use plural 'hobbies' to match 'people'. Suggestion: Use simple, common collocations (spend leisure time, derive pleasure) and keep subject-verb structure clear.

× I have many hobbies like I have a garden and I too many words in my garden.

✓ I have many hobbies: I have a garden and I plant many flowers in it.

Original contains singular/plural and word choice errors. 'I too many words' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'I grow many plants/flowers'. Correct to 'I plant many flowers in it.' Ensure noun-verb agreement and appropriate countable nouns. Suggestion: Choose correct nouns (plants/flowers) and use proper verbs (plant, grow).

× I also read books regularly and newspapers and also stamp collecting is also my hobby.

✓ I also read books and newspapers regularly, and stamp collecting is another hobby of mine.

Sentence has repetitive 'also' and awkward order. Rearranged for clarity and parallelism: list reading books and newspapers, then state stamp collecting as another hobby. Use 'another hobby of mine' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: Avoid repeating 'also' and keep parallel structure in lists.

× I actually didn't have any hobbies specifically when I was a child.

✓ I didn't have any specific hobbies when I was a child.

Original is understandable but word order is awkward ('any hobbies specifically'). Move 'specifically' after 'any' or use 'specific hobbies'. Tense 'didn't have' is correct for past. Suggestion: Use natural adjective placement: 'specific hobbies'.

× I did many things, like I played many games like cooking and other stuff.

✓ I did many things, such as playing games, cooking, and other activities.

Original repeats 'like' and mixes verb forms. Use 'such as' and gerunds for parallelism: 'playing games, cooking'. Avoid informal 'stuff'. Suggestion: Use parallel gerund forms when listing activities.

× But I think that my real movie when as a child was reading books.

✓ But I think that my real love as a child was reading books.

'Movie' is a wrong word here; context suggests 'love' or 'passion'. 'When as a child' is incorrect; use 'as a child'. Correct sentence: 'my real love as a child was reading books.' Suggestion: Choose accurate vocabulary and use 'as a child' for time phrases.

× I have a way that I have had since childhood and that is writing works.

✓ I have a hobby that I have had since childhood, and that is writing.

Original 'a way that I have had' is awkward; 'writing works' is unnatural—use 'writing'. Use present perfect 'have had since childhood' correctly to indicate continuity. Suggestion: Use 'a hobby I have had since childhood' and simple noun 'writing'.

× I think that reading books gives me most pleasure and it is a novelist habit of a man and it doesn't only open the outlook of the world but also gives us pleasure and gain and we can gain knowledge.

✓ I think reading books gives me the most pleasure; it is a habit of a reader and not only broadens one's outlook on the world but also brings pleasure and knowledge.

Original has awkward and incorrect adjectives/nouns ('novelist habit of a man'), wrong word order, and repetition. Use 'the most pleasure' and 'broadens one's outlook' for natural phrasing. Replace 'gain' with 'knowledge'. Suggestion: Use concise phrases and idiomatic expressions: 'broadens one's outlook', 'brings pleasure and knowledge'.

× I think no because my family members have other hobbies like my dad likes to watch TV and my sister likes to play games in mobile and I actually prefer reading and my mom likes cooking.

✓ I don't think so, because my family members have different hobbies: my dad likes to watch TV, my sister likes to play games on her mobile, I prefer reading, and my mom enjoys cooking.

Original uses 'I think no' which is unnatural; use 'I don't think so'. 'Play games in mobile' is incorrect preposition and pronoun use—use 'on her mobile'. Also add commas for clarity and parallel structure. Pronoun consistency improved. Suggestion: Use 'I don't think so' for negative opinion, 'on my/ her mobile' for device, and list hobbies in parallel form.