爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition (e.g., "to to") and incorrect collocations ("listening music" → "listening to music"). Use linking words if adding reasons.

範例: Yes, I have several hobbies. I enjoy playing football with my friends and painting; painting is my favorite because it helps me relax and express my ideas in my free time.

建議: Use past tense for childhood and avoid informal or insulting words like "dumb." Give one clear example and a brief reason. Keep it coherent with linking words.

範例: Yes, when I was a child I used to play football with my friends outside, and I also played simple video games on my mother's phone because they were fun and kept me entertained.

建議: Answer directly and use correct tense and vocabulary. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No), then describe the hobby and how long you've done it. Avoid unrelated phrases like addressing the examiner. Use linking words for clarity.

範例: Yes, I have played football since childhood. I used to play with friends every afternoon, and I still play regularly because it keeps me fit and helps me socialize.

建議: Give a direct, concise answer and correct grammar. Say whether your hobbies match family members and then add one specific comparison. Avoid filler words and repeating negatives. Mention the friend briefly if relevant.

範例: No, my hobbies are different from my family's because none of them enjoy football or painting. However, one of my friends, Shafa, shares both hobbies—he also likes painting and playing football.

× Yes, I have many hobbies like playing football with my friends, painting, sketching, listening music and my favorite hobby is painting because I love to to do painting in my free time.

✓ Yes, I have many hobbies like playing football with my friends, painting, sketching, listening to music, and my favorite hobby is painting because I love to paint in my free time.

Mistakes: missing preposition 'to' after 'listening' (incorrect use of verb + -ing construction with verb + preposition) and awkward phrase 'to do painting' instead of the verb 'paint'. Suggestion: use 'listening to music' for correct collocation and use the base verb 'paint' after 'love to' or the gerund 'painting' after 'love' (for example, 'I love painting').

× Yes, I have hobbies of playing football with my friends outside and other hobbies to play video game on my mother's phone which was very dumb.

✓ Yes, I had hobbies of playing football with my friends outside and other hobbies such as playing video games on my mother's phone, which I thought was very simple.

The question asked about childhood (past), so use past tense 'had' instead of 'have'. Also change 'to play video game' to 'playing video games' (correct gerund and plural). Avoid pejorative 'dumb' — use 'simple' or 'basic'. Suggestion: match verb tense to context and use correct gerund/plural forms.

× Yes, I hope you are playing football with the friends outside at the afternoon.

✓ Yes, I used to play football with friends outside in the afternoons.

Student's reply is about a hobby since childhood; 'hope you are playing' is incorrect and confusing. Use 'used to' for habitual actions in the past. Also use 'in the afternoon' or 'in the afternoons' (correct preposition and article). Suggestion: use 'used to' for past habitual actions and 'in the afternoon(s)' for time expressions.

× No, I, I don't have the same ability like my family members because no, in my family, no one like to play football, no one like painting.

✓ No, I don't have the same hobbies as my family members because in my family no one likes to play football or to paint.

Problems: incorrect pronoun/reference 'ability' should be 'hobbies' to match meaning; repeated 'no' is redundant; verb agreement: 'no one likes' (third person singular). Also use parallel structure 'likes to play football or to paint' or 'likes playing football or painting'. Suggestion: use precise nouns, avoid repetition, and ensure subject-verb agreement with 'no one'.

× But uh, I, my hobbies are uh, same with my friend, uh, named Shafa Shamash Choudhury. He love to do painting and also love to play football.

✓ But my hobbies are the same as my friend Shafa Shamash Choudhury. He loves painting and also loves to play football.

Errors: unnecessary fillers removed and word order simplified. Subject-verb agreement: for third person singular 'He loves' not 'He love'. Use 'painting' or 'to paint' consistently ('loves painting' is natural). Also use 'the same as' for comparison. Suggestion: simplify sentences, remove fillers, and ensure verbs agree with third person singular subjects.