爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence naming your main hobbies, then add one or two brief supporting details using linking words. Remove fillers (umm, uh) and avoid repeating words. Use correct verb forms and simple, precise phrases.

範例: I enjoy painting and reading. Painting helps me relax and explore my creativity, while reading allows me to learn about different cultures and ideas.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence then follow with specific reasons using linking words. Avoid unsure phrases like "may be" and unfinished sentences. Use correct grammar (past tense) and concise expressions.

範例: Yes. As a child I loved painting because it made me feel relaxed and happy. Moreover, it was a good way to express my feelings and improve my drawing skills.

建議: Use correct grammar and simpler sentences: state the hobby in present perfect or present continuous if still true, then give clear reasons. Replace incorrect forms (I'll has, I'll sign since tilted) and use linking words like "because" or "so" correctly. Mention specific examples of how the hobby helped you.

範例: Yes, I have painted since childhood because it helped me become more creative and patient. For example, spending hours on one painting taught me attention to detail and persistence.

建議: Answer directly and give a brief supporting detail. Use complete sentences and correct word order. Explain who in your family shares the hobby and give a short example of doing it together, using linking words like "so" or "for example."

範例: Yes, my father shares my interest in painting and drawing because he taught me when I was young. For example, we used to paint together on weekends, which helped me learn basic techniques.

× My hobby is painting and umm, I like it's, I like reading a book, umm.

✓ My hobbies are painting and reading books.

The original sentence misuses the pronoun 'it's' and mixes singular/plural. Use plural 'hobbies' for multiple activities and parallel structure 'painting and reading books'. Avoid filler words like 'umm'. Suggestion: list activities in parallel and use correct noun number.

× When I was a child, I really enjoyed driving, driving and painting.

✓ When I was a child, I really enjoyed drawing and painting.

Repeating 'driving' is likely an error; context suggests 'drawing'. Use past tense 'enjoyed' correctly. Ensure verbs represent intended activities. Suggestion: choose correct activity words and avoid repetition.

× When I was a child, my hobby was painting because it may be feel relaxed and happy and it was a great way to express my emotions and painting was.

✓ When I was a child, my hobby was painting because it made me feel relaxed and happy, and it was a great way to express my emotions.

Incorrect modal 'may be feel' and incomplete phrase 'and painting was.' Replace with simple past 'made me feel' to match 'was'. Combine clauses clearly and remove redundancy. Suggestion: use 'made me feel' for past emotional states and finish sentences fully.

× I'll has a painting as a hobby I'll sign since tilted because I think this hobby helped me become more creative and patience.

✓ I've had painting as a hobby since childhood because I think this hobby has helped me become more creative and patient.

'I'll has' is incorrect for present perfect; use 'I've had' to indicate a hobby continuing since childhood. 'I'll sign since tilted' is unintelligible and corrected to 'since childhood'. Use present perfect 'has helped' for effects continuing to present and adjective 'patient' instead of noun 'patience'. Suggestion: use present perfect for actions starting in the past and continuing now and use adjectives after 'become'.

× My father because he taught how it is driving, drawing and painting it and we work worked together when as a child.

✓ My father taught me how to draw, paint, and drive, and we worked together when I was a child.

Sentence fragments and pronoun misuse: include the subject 'My father' in a complete sentence. Use 'taught me how to draw, paint, and drive' for correct verb patterns and infinitives. 'We work worked together when as a child' should be past tense 'we worked together when I was a child.' Suggestion: form full sentences with clear subjects and correct verb tense and infinitive forms.