爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời cần ngắn gọn, rõ ràng hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Hãy bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề trực tiếp (ví dụ: “Yes, I enjoy several hobbies, especially playing sports.”), sau đó nêu một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể về tần suất và lợi ích. Tránh dùng cấu trúc lặp và sửa các lỗi như “best favorite”, “not also ... but also” thành “not only ... but also”. Giữ tối đa 3–4 câu để tự nhiên và hiệu quả.

範例: Yes, I enjoy several hobbies, especially playing sports. I usually play badminton with my friends twice a week, which helps me stay fit and also brings us closer. Playing regularly keeps me active and reduces stress.

建議: Cần cải thiện ngữ pháp cơ bản, phát âm (từ 'trial' có lẽ là 'child') và cấu trúc câu. Bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng (ví dụ: “Yes, as a child I enjoyed…”) rồi mô tả một hoặc hai trò chơi cụ thể và lý do bạn thích chúng. Tránh lỗi thì (was/were, has/have) và số ít/số nhiều, và giữ độ dài câu ngắn gọn để tự nhiên.

範例: Yes, as a child I loved playing traditional games with my friends, such as hopscotch and pretend war. Those games were fun because we used our imagination and played for hours, but I don’t play them anymore because my interests have changed.

建議: Câu trả lời cần mạch lạc và ngữ pháp chính xác. Nên dùng thì quá khứ để nói về thời thơ ấu và thì hiện tại cho hiện tại: “I have loved playing sports since childhood.” Nên sửa các cấu trúc lỗi như “playing sports friends” và “not also ... but also”. Nêu rõ tần suất hoặc ví dụ cụ thể (loại thể thao, với ai) để câu trả lời thuyết phục hơn.

範例: Yes, I have loved playing sports since I was a child. I often played football with my friends, and I still play regularly because it keeps me healthy and helps me build strong friendships.

建議: Cần trả lời trực tiếp và rõ ràng: có hay không, và giải thích ngắn gọn. Sửa ngữ pháp (I’m the only person who is keen on..., my brother spends...) và loại bỏ tiếng ồn (umm, uh). Nêu một ví dụ cụ thể để chứng tỏ sự khác biệt và giữ 2–3 câu tự nhiên.

範例: No, I’m the only person in my family who enjoys playing sports. For instance, I play football with my friends on weekends, while my brother prefers spending his free time browsing the internet and watching videos.

× However, playing sports and games is one of my best favorite hobbies.

✓ However, playing sports and games are some of my favorite hobbies.

'Best favorite' is redundant; use 'favorite'. Subject 'playing sports and games' is plural, so use plural verb 'are'. Use 'some of my favorite hobbies' for natural phrasing.

× Well, when I have free time, I usually spend time playing badminton with my friends, which is not also help me to stay active, but also to strengthen the relationship with my friends.

✓ Well, when I have free time, I usually play badminton with my friends, which not only helps me stay active but also strengthens my relationships with them.

Use 'not only... but also' structure correctly. 'Helps' and 'strengthens' require third person singular 's' because the relative pronoun 'which' refers to the activity (singular). Use 'play badminton' or 'play badminton with my friends' rather than 'spend time playing' for conciseness. 'Relationship' pluralized and 'with them' avoids repetition.

× Well when I was trial I extremely keen on playing traditional games with my friend such as high and sick or thought of war which is very interesting when I was a kid.

✓ Well, when I was a child I was extremely keen on playing traditional games with my friends such as 'high and sick' or 'thought of war', which were very interesting to me.

'Trial' is incorrect; use 'child'. Past tense needed: 'was extremely keen' and 'were very interesting'. Use plural 'friends' to match context. Add commas and quotes for game names and 'to me' for clarity.

× But up to now so many things has changed and my hobbies is not an exception so I no longer like to do it.

✓ But up to now so many things have changed and my hobbies are no exception, so I no longer like them.

Use plural verb 'have changed' to agree with 'things'. 'Hobbies' is plural, so 'are' and 'them' should be used. 'No exception' is correct phrase; add commas for readability.

× Well, absolutely yes. When I was a child I also really love playing sport with my friend when I have free time and up to now I still really love it because I realized that's playing sports friends is not also a way to keep fit but also to bond wisdom more closely, which is very important in today world.

✓ Well, absolutely. When I was a child I really loved playing sports with my friends when I had free time, and even now I still really enjoy it because I realized that playing sports is not only a way to keep fit but also to build closer friendships, which is very important in today's world.

Maintain past tense for childhood 'loved' and past reference 'had free time'. Use 'still enjoy' present for current habit. Correct 'not only... but also' order and grammar. 'Build closer friendships' is natural English; use 'today's world' with possessive apostrophe (written without apostrophe in JSON string as requested).

× Well, actually if I'm the only person in my family who keen on playing sport because umm, the the others uh, uh, love umm, browsing the Internet or following fuzz and trend.

✓ Well, actually I am the only person in my family who is keen on playing sports because the others prefer browsing the Internet or following fads and trends.

Use 'I am' not 'if I'm'. Include 'who is keen' for correct clause. Use plural 'sports'. 'The others' is fine; replace filler words and use 'prefer' for clarity. 'Fuzz and trend' is incorrect; 'fads and trends' is appropriate.

× For example, when I have free time, I usually spend time playing football with my friends, umm, but my brother just spend time browsing the Internet and immersing himself in video.

✓ For example, when I have free time I usually play football with my friends, but my brother just spends his time browsing the Internet and immersing himself in videos.

Use present simple 'spends' to agree with 'my brother' (third person singular). 'Play football' is more natural than 'spend time playing football'. 'Videos' plural is natural and add 'his time' for clarity.