爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise, grammatical, and directly answer the question with a topic sentence. Use correct verb forms, reduce repetition, and add a brief specific detail about the hobby using linking words. Aim for 2–4 sentences, clear vocabulary, and correct tense and articles.

範例: Yes, I do. At the moment I am learning to play golf and I practice once or twice a week because I enjoy the challenge and precision it requires. I want to improve my swing and lower my score so I can play more competitively in the future.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence stating the hobby, use correct past tense, avoid filler words, and explain briefly why you couldn't continue with a logical reason. Provide one specific example and use linking words to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I used to enjoy martial arts as a child. However, my parents did not allow me to continue because they thought it was too rough for girls, so I had to switch to activities like dance instead.

建議: Begin with a direct topic sentence stating the long-term hobby (pet ownership). Use correct tense and possessive forms, avoid unclear phrases, and give specific supporting details (how you care for the dog, routine or feelings). Keep it within 2–4 sentences and use linking words to improve coherence.

範例: Yes, I have loved dogs since I was a child. I asked my parents for a dog when I was young but they said I was too young, so now as an adult I adopted a dog who is almost two years old; I walk him every morning and enjoy training him because it gives me companionship and responsibility.

建議: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence (yes/no and which hobby). Use correct word choice (walking), grammar, and concise supporting details (when and why you walk). Avoid fillers and repetition, and include linking words for coherence.

範例: Yes, my father and I both enjoy walking. We usually walk together in the evenings to unwind after work and stay fit, and I also walk my dog every morning which helps me start the day energized.

× Oh, honestly speaking I have a loss of hobbies in my head that I would love to do but I currently working on golf which I fight and really interesting sport that I wanna to be good at.

✓ Oh, honestly, I have a lot of hobbies in my head that I would love to try, but I'm currently working on golf, which I find a really interesting sport and want to get better at.

Multiple sentence structure issues: 'a loss of hobbies' is incorrect — use 'a lot of hobbies' or 'many hobbies'; 'I currently working' lacks auxiliary verb 'am'; 'which I fight' is a spelling/word choice error; 'wanna to be good at' combines informal 'wanna' and unnecessary 'to'. Suggest using clear clauses, correct auxiliaries, and standard vocabulary: 'I have a lot of hobbies... I'm currently working on golf, which I find really interesting and want to get better at.'

× It's a really interesting sport that I have ever.

✓ It's the most interesting sport I have ever tried.

Fragment and incorrect phrase 'that I have ever'—missing verb and context. Use a superlative with a past participle: 'the most interesting sport I have ever tried' or 'one of the most interesting sports I have ever played.' This completes the thought and matches tense.

× Well, when I wanna try, I love to do material art, which I'm not allowed to do it because umm, I want a girl.

✓ Well, when I was young, I loved to do martial arts, which I wasn't allowed to do because, um, I was a girl.

Multiple errors: 'wanna' informal and wrong meaning; 'try' should be 'young'; 'material art' is misspelling of 'martial arts'; 'I'm not allowed to do it' should be past tense 'I wasn't allowed to do it' because this refers to childhood. Also 'I want a girl' is incorrect—use 'I was a girl.' Adjust verb forms and vocabulary to past tense for past events.

× Uh, my my, my parent was so strict about it they worried that I might hug myself and umm, just because I'm a girl so I need to do something more gentle.

✓ My parents were so strict about it; they worried that I might hurt myself, and because I was a girl they thought I should do something gentler.

Pronoun and agreement errors: 'my my, my parent' should be 'my parents' (plural). 'Was' should be 'were' to match plural. 'Hug myself' is incorrect choice—likely 'hurt myself.' Tense should be past ('was a girl'). Use comparative 'gentler' rather than 'more gentle.' Also separate clauses for clarity.

× Yes Gwen I want a joy I used to ask my parents if I could have a dog but I was too young to look after a dog so now I'm an adult.

✓ Yes, when I was young, I used to ask my parents if I could have a dog, but I was too young to look after one, and now that I'm an adult I have one.

Confusing and mixed phrases: 'Gwen I want a joy' is unclear—likely 'when I was young'. Use 'used to' correctly for past habit, avoid repeating 'dog' unnecessarily by using 'one'. Make sequence clear: asked as a child, too young then now an adult.

× I recently own a dog and he almost turning 2 years now.

✓ I recently got a dog and he is almost two years old now.

Incorrect verb form: 'I recently own' should be past 'I recently got' or 'I recently adopted'; 'he almost turning' lacks auxiliary—use 'he is almost two years old.' Use 'two' not numeric per spoken style, and include 'old' after age.

× I love taking care of him I really enjoy working with him and his common comment and he give me the sense of.

✓ I love taking care of him; I really enjoy spending time with him and his company, and he gives me a sense of purpose.

Run-on and unclear phrases: 'working with him and his common comment' is incorrect—likely 'spending time with him and his company.' Verb agreement: 'he give' should be 'he gives'. Complete the final thought: 'gives me a sense of purpose.' Use punctuation and clear collocations.

× Well umm I think my dad and I, we share the same hobbies with The Walking.

✓ Well, I think my dad and I share the same hobby: walking.

Pronoun redundancy: 'my dad and I, we' is repetitive—choose one subject structure. 'Hobbies with The Walking' is incorrect—use 'hobby: walking' or 'hobbies, like walking.' Keep noun forms consistent.

× We love working umm because it's one of umm the way to unwind after a long day at work and also keeping a stay in fit and healthy.

✓ We love walking because it's one of the ways to unwind after a long day at work and it also helps us stay fit and healthy.

Wrong verb 'working' should be 'walking' based on context. Use plural 'ways'. Use infinitive or verb phrase 'helps us stay fit and healthy' rather than 'keeping a stay in fit and healthy.' Maintain subject-verb agreement.

× Umm I usually walk my dog in the both morning and up.

✓ I usually walk my dog in the morning and in the evening.

Preposition and phrase errors: 'in the both morning and up' is incorrect. Use 'in the morning and in the evening' or 'both in the morning and at night.' Ensure correct time expressions and prepositions.