爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp hơn và rút gọn câu để tự nhiên và hiệu quả (không quá 5 câu). Hãy dùng câu chủ đề ngắn, rồi mở rộng với một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể, sử dụng liên từ phù hợp như "because" hoặc "so". Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp nhỏ (ví dụ: "some suggestion" → "some suggestions") và tránh lặp ý (hai lần nói "I love").

範例: I enjoy cooking because I often prepare meals for my family and friends, and seeing them smile makes me happy. For example, I cook a weekend dinner every Sunday, and their compliments motivate me to try new recipes so I can improve my skills.

建議: Trả lời nên dùng thì quá khứ nhất quán và sửa cấu trúc câu cho tự nhiên (ví dụ: "my previous hobby was drawing", "I started drawing when I was five"). Tránh lỗi từ vựng hoặc lặp từ như "variety spectrum" (dùng "wide range of colors") và sửa lỗi chính tả/ ngữ pháp nhỏ (loại bỏ "it it"). Giữ tối đa 4 câu, thêm ví dụ cụ thể về loại tranh bạn thích vẽ.

範例: As a child, my hobby was drawing; I started when I was five. I especially liked using a wide range of colors to paint landscapes and cartoons, and looking back at my old drawings always makes me proud.

建議: Cần nói rõ mối liên hệ giữa quá khứ và hiện tại bằng câu chủ đề ngắn (ví dụ: "I used to draw, but now I prefer cooking"). Tránh câu dài phức tạp và chỉnh ngữ pháp ("impress someone" → "impressing someone", "was" → "is", "in to" → "into"). Hãy đưa thêm một chi tiết cụ thể về lý do chuyển sang nấu ăn và dùng liên từ để mạch lạc.

範例: I used to enjoy drawing, but now I prefer cooking because I find it more personal. For example, cooking allows me to create meals for my family, and seeing their enjoyment makes me feel I’m expressing my care for them.

建議: Sử dụng cấu trúc câu đúng ngữ pháp và nhất quán (ví dụ: "Definitely not"; "my father fancies traveling"). Tránh lỗi chia động từ và số ("I loves" → "I love", "each member ... has"). Làm rõ mạch ý bằng câu chủ đề, sau đó liệt kê ngắn gọn và kết luận bằng một câu nêu quan điểm. Giữ tối đa 4 câu.

範例: No, we don’t share the same hobbies. My mother enjoys shopping, my father likes traveling, and my brother plays video games, while I love drawing. I think it’s natural for family members to have different interests because everyone has their own personality.

× Sometimes it's some suggestion to improve my cooking skills.

✓ Sometimes there are some suggestions to improve my cooking skills.

Use plural with 'suggestion' because 'some' implies more than one; also 'there are' is required for plural nouns after 'there'. Suggestion: change to 'there are some suggestions' or 'sometimes I get some suggestions'.

× Yes, my previous hobby is drawing.

✓ Yes, my previous hobby was drawing.

When referring to a past habit or state use past tense 'was' instead of present 'is'. Suggestion: use 'was' for hobbies you no longer have.

× I started drawing since I was five years old.

✓ I started drawing when I was five years old.

Use 'started' with a specific past time and 'when' instead of 'since'. 'Since' requires present perfect (have/has started). Suggestion: say 'I started drawing when I was five' or 'I have been drawing since I was five.'

× I love drawing because I can put variety spectrum of colors on the art and when I look back at my artwork, I feel proud and delighted it it made my day.

✓ I love drawing because I can use a wide range of colors in my art, and when I look back at my artwork, I feel proud and delighted; it makes my day.

Problems: incorrect phrase 'put variety spectrum of colors' and repetition 'it it' and wrong tense 'made' should be 'makes' to express habitual present effect. Suggestion: use 'use a wide range of colors' and 'it makes my day'.

× Obviously my previous hobby is drawing, but now I prefer cooking over drawing because I realized that cooking is not just about modern technique, impress someone with how delectable the food was or just simply tasting.

✓ Obviously my previous hobby was drawing, but now I prefer cooking over drawing because I realized that cooking is not just about modern techniques, impressing someone with how delectable the food is, or simply tasting.

Multiple tense and form issues: 'previous hobby' should be past 'was'; 'technique' should be plural 'techniques' or 'the technique' and parallel gerund forms required: use 'impressing' (verb + -ing) and present 'is' for general truth. Suggestion: maintain parallel structure and present tense for general statements.

× It's about the love you put in to the food you cook for someone.

✓ It's about the love you put into the food you cook for someone.

Preposition 'into' is written as one word here; 'in to' is incorrect. Suggestion: use 'put into' meaning 'invest in'.

× My mother loves shopping, my father fancy traveling and my brother is a big fan of playing games.

✓ My mother loves shopping, my father fancies traveling, and my brother is a big fan of playing games.

Subject-verb agreement: 'father' is third person singular, so verb should be 'fancies' not 'fancy'. Suggestion: ensure verbs agree with singular subjects.

× Furthermore, I loves drawing.

✓ Furthermore, I love drawing.

'I' takes verb 'love' without -s. 'Loves' is for third person singular. Suggestion: use correct verb form for 'I'.

× Each member in my family have a different taste of hobbies, but I found that difference is not weird, it's about various characteristic.

✓ Each member in my family has a different taste in hobbies, but I find that the difference is not strange; it's about various characteristics.

'Each member' is singular so use 'has' not 'have'. Use 'taste in hobbies' not 'taste of hobbies'. Use 'find' present tense to match general statement. Use 'strange' instead of 'weird' if more natural, and 'characteristics' plural.