爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be careful with minor language errors and repetitive phrasing. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words like 'my music' (say 'listening to music'), and correct small collocations ('match-three games'). Add one more specific detail about why those hobbies relax you using a linking word.

範例: I enjoy casual mobile games and listening to music because they help me unwind after long days of studying. For example, I play match-three games for about 20 minutes after finishing my homework to give my brain a short break, and I listen to classical pieces while reviewing notes because the calm tempo helps me concentrate.

建議: Use past tense consistently and correct vocabulary mistakes. Begin with a clear past-tense topic sentence (e.g., 'I enjoyed painting and playing the piano'), avoid articles misuse ('the painting' -> 'painting'), and replace unclear words ('species') with 'pieces' or 'songs'. Add one linking phrase to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I enjoyed painting and playing the piano when I was a child. My parents enrolled me in classes, so I took painting lessons every weekend and learned simple piano pieces like 'Twinkle Twinkle Little Star'.

建議: Correct grammar and unclear phrases, and be more concise. Use past tense where needed and fix the unclear clause ('decided to children's songs' is incorrect). Add a linking word and give one specific example of a childhood song and a current favourite composer or piece.

範例: Yes, I've loved listening to music since childhood because it always lifts my mood. For example, I used to sing simple children's songs like 'Twinkle Twinkle' and now I often listen to Bach or Mozart when I want to relax.

建議: Watch subject-verb agreement and add a linking word to show cause and effect. Make the first sentence a clear topic sentence, then briefly explain how sharing hobbies improves your relationship with a specific example.

範例: Yes, my sister and I both enjoy listening to music and watching movies, which brings us closer. For instance, when I visit home on weekends we always watch a movie together and play our favourite songs while cooking, which creates a warm, relaxed atmosphere.

× Yeah, my hobbies include playing casual mobile games and listening to my music.

✓ Yeah, my hobbies include playing casual mobile games and listening to music.

Use of the definite article 'my' before 'music' is unnecessary; 'listening to music' is the natural collocation. This is an article/preposition collocation issue but fits best under verb + -ing because the gerund phrase 'listening to music' is the correct form. Suggestion: remove 'my' to make the phrase idiomatic.

× For instance, I usually play on match three games for 20 minutes after finishing my homework, and I listen to classical music while reviewing notes.

✓ For instance, I usually play match-three games for 20 minutes after finishing my homework, and I listen to classical music while reviewing my notes.

The verb phrase should be 'play match-three games' without the preposition 'on'. Also 'reviewing notes' is acceptable but 'reviewing my notes' is clearer to show possession. The issue concerns the correct use of verb + -ing constructions and collocations. Suggestion: drop 'on' and add 'my' before 'notes' for clarity.

× Yes, I enjoy the painting and playing the piano.

✓ Yes, I enjoyed painting and playing the piano when I was a child.

Using 'the painting' is incorrect; 'painting' as a hobby is a gerund without 'the'. Also tense should match the time frame 'when I was a child' so past tense 'enjoyed' is appropriate. The error falls under incorrect use of articles/adjectives and tense. Suggestion: remove 'the' and use past tense to match context.

× I took painting lessons every weekend in primary school and I learned to play simple species like Twinkle Twinkle Little *.

✓ I took painting lessons every weekend in primary school and I learned to play simple pieces like Twinkle Twinkle Little Star.

The word 'species' is incorrect; the intended word is 'pieces' (musical pieces). This is a word choice error related to nouns following verb patterns. Suggestion: replace 'species' with 'pieces' and supply the full song title 'Twinkle Twinkle Little Star'.

× Yes, I enjoy the painting and playing the piano. When I was little, my parents signed me up for classes and I gradually developed a real interest in them.

✓ Yes, I enjoyed painting and playing the piano. When I was little, my parents signed me up for classes and I gradually developed a real interest in them.

The sentence mixes present tense 'enjoy' with past-tense context 'When I was little'. Change 'enjoy' to past tense 'enjoyed' to keep tense consistent. This is a past tense issue. Suggestion: ensure verb tense matches the time frame described.

× When I was young, I decided to children's songs and now I enjoy classical music, but my love for music hasn't changed.

✓ When I was young, I decided to sing children's songs and now I enjoy classical music, but my love for music hasn't changed.

The verb phrase 'decided to children's songs' is ungrammatical. The correct structure is 'decided to sing children's songs'. This is a verb + -ing/infinitive usage error. Suggestion: use the infinitive 'to sing' followed by the object 'children's songs'.

× Sharing these interests make our relationship closer.

✓ Sharing these interests makes our relationship closer.

The subject 'Sharing these interests' is a singular gerund phrase and requires the singular verb 'makes' not 'make'. This is a subject-verb agreement error. Suggestion: use 'makes' to agree with the singular subject.

× Every weekend when I go home, we watch a movie together and play our favorite songs while cooking.

✓ Every weekend when I go home, we watch a movie together and play our favorite songs while we cook.

While 'cooking' alone is understandable, adding the subject pronoun 'we' before 'cook' makes the sentence clearer and avoids a dangling -ing clause. This is an incorrect use of a reduced clause/pronoun omission. Suggestion: include 'we' before 'cook' to clarify the subject of the action.