爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the answer more natural and concise: start with a topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting reasons using linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., "relieve stress", "clear my mind", avoid unnecessary words). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes — I have two main hobbies: playing football and going to the gym. Playing football helps me relieve stress because I can focus on the game and socialise with friends. The gym keeps me physically fit, and running on the treadmill clears my mind after a long day.

建議: Be more concise and fix grammar (e.g., "the main one was football"). Use linking words and specific details (age, how often, memorable moment) to enrich the response without repeating ideas.

範例: Yes — the main hobby I had as a child was football. I played several times a week with neighbourhood friends, which helped me make friends and learn teamwork. I especially remember scoring my first goal at age nine, which made me love the sport even more.

建議: Improve grammar and coherence: use a clear topic sentence, correct tense ("I have played football since I was four"), and link supporting points logically. Avoid filler sounds and unclear phrases; give one or two specific examples of how it helped you develop skills.

範例: Yes, I have played football since I was about four years old and it is still my favourite hobby. Playing regularly helped me develop technical skills and teamwork, and watching professional matches taught me tactics and positioning. As a result, my passing and decision-making improved significantly.

建議: Make sentences grammatically correct and clearer: state agreement first, give examples with linking words, and contrast with personal hobbies using clear vocabulary ("photography"). Avoid filler words and correct verb forms.

範例: Mostly yes — I share hobbies with my family, such as watching series and cooking together on weekends, which brings us closer and creates memories. However, I also have a personal hobby: photography, which I do alone to reflect and grow creatively.

× Playing football helps me to remove the stress of the work and gym helps me to keep my body fit and close my mind especially when I am in on the treadmill.

✓ Playing football helps me remove the stress of work, and going to the gym helps me keep my body fit and clear my mind, especially when I am on the treadmill.

Use of 'to' after 'helps me' is unnecessary; after 'help' either the base form or to-infinitive is possible, but omit 'to' for conciseness. 'the work' is wrong article use for general 'work' (Article errors) so 'work' is correct. 'going to the gym' uses the gerund to parallel 'playing football'. 'close my mind' is incorrect collocation; 'clear my mind' is the correct expression. Remove extra 'in' before 'on the treadmill'. Overall, maintain parallel gerund phrases and correct collocations.

× Yes, I had several hobbies as as a child, but the most one is the football.

✓ Yes, I had several hobbies as a child, but the main one was football.

Redundant 'as as' is an error (sentence structure). 'the most one' is ungrammatical; use 'the main one' or 'my favorite'. Also tense consistency: speaking about childhood uses past tense, so 'was' not 'is'. Remove article 'the' before 'football' when speaking in general: 'football' is a general activity.

× So football is my favorite hobby when I was young.

✓ So football was my favorite hobby when I was young.

Tense inconsistency: 'when I was young' refers to the past, so the verb should be past tense 'was' not present 'is'.

× Yes, I've played the football since I was about four years and it remains my favorite hobby.

✓ Yes, I've played football since I was about four years old, and it has remained my favorite hobby.

With 'since' and a starting point, use present perfect continuous or present perfect simple with 'since' plus a point; 'I've played' is acceptable but 'since I was about four years' needs 'old' after 'years' and no article before 'football' when speaking generally. 'remains' is present but fine; better to use 'has remained' for continuity from past to present.

× Practically as a child helped me to make new friends, new football skills, watching more football games.

✓ Practically, as a child I was able to make new friends, develop new football skills, and watch more football games.

Original sentence lacks a clear subject and verb structure. 'Practically as a child helped me' is ungrammatical. Add subject 'I' and make verbs parallel: 'make', 'develop', 'watch'. Use 'develop' for skills rather than noun phrase 'new football skills' alone. Include commas for clarity.

× That teaches me to, uh, improve my skills.

✓ That taught me to improve my skills.

Context refers to past experiences, so past tense 'taught' is appropriate (past tense issue). Also avoid filler 'uh' in written correction. 'teach' in past matches earlier clauses.

× Mainly, yes, I share some hobbies with my family like watching series and films and even cooking together, which often do it on the weekends because it brings us closer and make memories.

✓ Mainly, yes, I share some hobbies with my family, like watching series and films and even cooking together, which we often do on the weekends because it brings us closer and makes memories.

Missing subject 'we' for 'do it' and subject-verb agreement: 'make' should be 'makes' to agree with singular noun 'it' or better 'makes memories' agreeing with singular activity; better to use plural subject 'we' and 'do' so 'we often do' and 'it' is unnecessary. Also add comma for clarity. 'series' can be used without article.

× However, I also have personal to act such as, uh, photographing that I purse alone to do have some time to reflection and personal growth.

✓ However, I also have personal activities such as photographing that I pursue alone to have some time for reflection and personal growth.

Multiple issues: 'personal to act' is incorrect phrase; use 'personal activities'. 'photographing' is fine as a gerund. 'purse' is misspelling of 'pursue'. 'to do have' is ungrammatical; use 'to have'. Need preposition 'for' before 'reflection'. Correct pronoun/word choices and word order to form a grammatical infinitive purpose clause.