爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers, correct vocabulary (subtitle, not subtle), and use one or two specific details with linking words. Limit to 3–4 sentences.

範例: I enjoy watching YouTube videos and English-language movies in my free time. I usually watch films with English subtitles because that helps me improve vocabulary and listening skills. For example, watching dramas helps me learn everyday expressions while being entertained.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence and correct grammar (childhood, dressing up, felt like a princess). Use linking words to add one specific detail about why you liked it or an example, and keep it brief.

範例: Yes. As a child, I loved dressing up because it made me feel like a princess. For example, I often wore fancy costumes for pretend tea parties, which boosted my confidence and imagination.

建議: Clarify and organize: state the hobby clearly (knitting and making bracelets), use correct verb forms, and give one specific example of what you make. Use linking words for coherence and keep to 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I have enjoyed making things since childhood, especially knitting and making bracelets. When I was young I knitted small scarves, and I still make bracelets from beads and thread. This hobby relaxes me and lets me create personalized gifts for friends.

建議: Start directly and avoid repetition. State whether you share hobbies and give a specific detail about how you play together (what games, when). Use linking words like ‘also’ or ‘in fact’ once and keep it short.

範例: Yes, we share video gaming as a family hobby. For example, we often play cooperative adventure games on weekends, which gives us a fun way to relax and bond together.

× Yes I do, I usually spend my time with watching some YouTube or watching some movies in English with a subtle in English and uh, it makes me can improve my English skills at the same time with entertainment.

✓ Yes, I do. I usually spend my time watching YouTube or movies in English with English subtitles; it helps me improve my English skills while being entertained.

Incorrect use of 'spend ... with watching' should be 'spend my time watching' (verb + -ing). 'YouTube' does not need 'some.' 'a subtle in English' is incorrect; use 'English subtitles.' 'it makes me can improve' is ungrammatical; use 'it helps me improve.' Use punctuation to separate clauses. Suggestion: Use 'spend time' + gerund, remove unnecessary words, and use 'helps me' + base verb.

× So I think it is very good to me watching movies in free time as a hobby.

✓ So I think watching movies in my free time is a very good hobby for me.

Awkward word order and incorrect preposition use. 'very good to me watching movies in free time as a hobby' should be restructured: subject 'watching movies in my free time' + predicate 'is a very good hobby for me.' Suggestion: Put the gerund phrase as the subject and use 'in my free time' and 'for me.'

× Yes I did, I usually spend my free time when I was a childhood with a dressing and it makes me can feel like an Princess and every time I enjoy the moment when I'm dressing wearing some dress.

✓ Yes, I did. I usually spent my free time dressing up when I was a child; it made me feel like a princess and I always enjoyed those moments when I wore dresses.

Tense inconsistency: the question asks about childhood, so past tense is required ('spent', 'made', 'enjoyed', 'wore'). 'when I was a childhood' is incorrect; use 'when I was a child.' 'a dressing' and 'dressing wearing some dress' are incorrect phrases; use 'dressing up' and 'wore dresses.' 'makes me can feel' is ungrammatical. Suggestion: Use past tense consistently and natural collocations like 'dressing up' and 'feel like a princess.'

× So I think when I was a child I enjoyed my hobbies as a dressing.

✓ So I think when I was a child I enjoyed dressing up as a hobby.

Awkward phrase 'enjoyed my hobbies as a dressing.' Use 'enjoyed dressing up as a hobby.' Maintain past tense 'enjoyed.' Suggestion: Use 'dressing up' and call it 'a hobby.'

× I think it is decorating something.

✓ I think it is decorating things.

'Decorating something' is grammatically possible but sounds unnatural; 'decorating things' or 'decorating' alone is better. The context implies a general hobby, so use the gerund 'decorating' or plural 'things.' Suggestion: Use 'decorating' or 'decorating things' for natural expression.

× For example, I knitting when I was a child.

✓ For example, I knitted when I was a child.

Incorrect verb form: after 'I' in past context use past tense 'knitted' rather than present 'knitting.' Suggestion: Use past tense 'knitted' or 'used to knit.'

× I also like to uh, making some bracelet using a some sericon material and now I'm very like to knitting, so I think it is creating something.

✓ I also liked making bracelets using some sericone materials, and now I really like knitting, so I think it's about creating things.

Multiple issues: maintain tense ('liked' if referring to childhood) or mix clearly. 'making some bracelet' -> 'making bracelets.' 'a some sericon material' -> 'some sericone materials.' 'I'm very like to knitting' -> 'I really like knitting.' Use consistent nouns/plurals and natural adverb 'really.' Suggestion: Use correct plural forms for countable nouns and correct collocations: 'like making bracelets' and 'like knitting.'

× And also I'm also like to playing video games, so my family usually also like to play video games.

✓ Also, I like playing video games, and my family usually likes to play video games too.

Subject-verb agreement and verb form: 'I'm also like to playing' is incorrect; use 'I like playing.' For 'my family' use third-person singular verb 'likes.' Suggestion: Use 'like' + gerund for preferences and ensure subject-verb agreement with collective nouns.

× So I think it is video games all our mutual hobbies.

✓ So I think video games are our mutual hobby.

Awkward word order and article use. 'it is video games all our mutual hobbies' should be 'video games are our mutual hobby' or 'video games are a hobby we all share.' Use plural verb 'are' with plural noun 'video games.' Suggestion: Reorder sentence to 'video games are our mutual hobby' or 'a hobby we all share.'