爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and direct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid irrelevant or confusing references (e.g., “surgery” and “deadline” here are unclear). Use correct tense and simpler linking words like 'because' or 'so' to improve coherence.

範例: I enjoy hiking and playing badminton with my friends. These activities help me relax after a busy week because they get me outdoors and allow me to socialize, so I can forget about work or exams for a while.

建議: Finish your sentences and maintain tense consistency. Give a clear topic sentence and one specific detail about the hobby and why you stopped. Use linking words such as 'but' and 'so' correctly to show cause and effect.

範例: When I was a child I enjoyed drawing and practised it for hours each week. However, when I started high school I had less free time and energy, so I gradually stopped drawing to focus on studying.

建議: Avoid unclear or informal phrases (e.g., 'my steward was crazy'). Give a short, direct answer, then explain briefly with specific reasons. Keep sentences complete and grammatically correct.

範例: No, I haven't maintained a childhood hobby. When I began high school I had a heavy workload and extracurricular commitments, so I couldn't continue activities like drawing.

建議: Organize your answer with a clear contrast phrase and more precise vocabulary. Start with a direct response, then compare your hobbies to your parents’ and give one reason for your preference. Use plural/singular correctly (e.g., 'quiet hobbies').

範例: Not really. My parents prefer quiet hobbies such as listening to music or watching TV, whereas I like more active pursuits. After a long day of studying I prefer going to the gym because it helps me relieve stress and stay fit.

× 'I like going hiking or playing badminton with my friends because it made me feel relaxed and while I do such things, I don't want to worry about the surgery or the deadline which made me feel comfortable.'

✓ 'I like going hiking or playing badminton with my friends because it makes me feel relaxed, and when I do these things, I don't want to worry about exams or deadlines, which makes me feel comfortable.'

'made' is past tense while the speaker describes a habitual present feeling; use present tense 'makes'. Replace 'while I do such things' with 'when I do these things' for natural adverbial clause. Use 'exams or deadlines' instead of 'the surgery or the deadline' unless surgery is intended; keep verbs consistent in present tense.'

× 'When I was a child I preferred drawing and I spent a lot of time practicing it, but once my high school started, I don't have enough time and energy to keep up with it, so I've.'

✓ 'When I was a child I preferred drawing and spent a lot of time practicing it, but once high school started, I didn't have enough time and energy to keep it up, so I stopped.'

'don't have' is present tense while the sentence refers to past time after 'once my high school started'; change to past 'didn't have'. 'I've.' is an incomplete fragment; clarify as 'I stopped.' Also remove the unnecessary second 'I' for fluency.'

× 'Honestly no I haven't kept a hobby since my childhood because when it came to my high school my steward was crazy and I don't I didn't have any time to develop my hobby like drawing or something so.'

✓ 'Honestly, no. I haven't kept a hobby since my childhood because when I started high school my schedule was crazy and I didn't have any time to develop hobbies like drawing.'

'when it came to my high school' is awkward; use 'when I started high school'. 'my steward was crazy' is unclear — likely 'my schedule was crazy'. The sentence mixes present perfect 'haven't kept' with past explanation; that is acceptable because the present perfect refers to continuation to now. Remove duplicated 'I don't I didn't' and the trailing 'so'. Make phrasing concise.'

× 'No not really, my parents are more into quiet hobby like listening to music or watching TV, but I want to do more active hobby after my whole day study so I prefer going to the gym.'

✓ 'No, not really. My parents prefer quieter hobbies like listening to music or watching TV, but I want to do more active hobbies after a whole day of studying, so I prefer going to the gym.'

'quiet hobby' is incorrect adjective form; use plural 'quieter hobbies' to match plural parents and items. 'whole day study' should be 'a whole day of studying' for correct noun phrase. Change 'more active hobby' to plural 'more active hobbies' for agreement. Add commas and periods for clarity.'