爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more direct and coherent: start with a clear topic sentence, then give specific details (how often, where, and why). Use correct verbs and natural expressions, and avoid irrelevant phrases. Keep it within 3–4 concise sentences and use linking words like 'so' or 'because' to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I have a few hobbies, and my main hobby is swimming. I usually go swimming at the local pool every weekend for about one to two hours because it helps me relax and stay fit. I normally swim alone so I can focus on my technique and unwind.

建議: Answer directly with a clear past-tense sentence and give specific examples and durations. Avoid confusing phrases and incorrect verb tenses. Use linking words like 'for example' and 'usually' correctly and limit to a few sentences.

範例: Yes, I did. When I was a child I often played video games with my friends on a PlayStation. For example, we played fighting and adventure games and usually spent about an hour playing together after school.

建議: Provide a clear topic sentence and then two specific reasons why you kept the hobby, using accurate phrases and linking words. Avoid filler words ('uh') and correct collocations ('relieve stress', 'learn English'). Keep it concise and coherent.

範例: Yes, I have. I have played video games since childhood because they help me relieve stress and relax. In addition, playing games in English has helped me improve my vocabulary and listening skills.

建議: Start with a clear statement about sharing the hobby, then give specific activities and reasons. Use natural phrases like 'my mom and I share an interest in food' and avoid repetition. Use linking words ('so', 'because', 'for example') appropriately and keep it to 2–3 sentences.

範例: Yes, my mother and I share an interest in food and cooking. We often go out on weekends to try new restaurants and different cuisines because we enjoy discovering new dishes and spending time together.

× For sure, I do have some hobbies about particularly similar.

✓ For sure, I do have some hobbies that are similar.

The original sentence uses the preposition 'about' incorrectly and has awkward word order. Use a relative clause 'that are similar' to describe the hobbies. Also remove 'particularly' or place it correctly if needed (e.g., 'particularly similar to each other').

× I usually go to swimming every weekend and I assume all by myself.

✓ I usually go swimming every weekend and I go by myself.

Use the verb phrase 'go swimming' without the preposition 'to'. 'Assume' is incorrect here; use 'go' or 'do' to indicate performing the activity. 'By myself' is the correct phrase for being alone.

× Just to refresh after you visit the analysis for one up to two hours.

✓ I go for one or two hours just to refresh.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and unclear vocabulary ('visit the analysis'). Reorder the sentence to place duration ('for one or two hours') after the verb and use a clear purpose phrase 'just to refresh'.

× Yeah, when I worked, when I was a child, I played video games with my friends.

✓ Yeah, when I was a child, I played video games with my friends.

'When I worked' is unnecessary and confusing in this context. Use the past tense 'played' correctly with the time expression 'when I was a child'. Remove the incorrect clause.

× I play PlayStation, uh, with a lot of games, for example, fighting generous adventure, and we were playing for one hour.

✓ I played PlayStation, with many games, for example fighting, adventure games, and we used to play for about an hour.

Maintain past tense 'played' to match 'when I was a child'. 'A lot of games' is better as 'many games'. The game types were unclear: separate 'fighting' and 'adventure games'. Use 'used to play' to indicate habitual past action and 'about an hour' for duration.

× Yeah, my hobby since childhood is playing, uh, video games.

✓ Yes, my hobby since childhood has been playing video games.

Use 'has been' to indicate an activity continuing from childhood to present. 'Is playing' sounds temporary; 'playing video games' is a gerund phrase, so a perfect form is more appropriate to show continuity.

× I play, I play video games because, uh, I can relieve for my stress and in the in addition, I can add more knowledge about the English.

✓ I play video games because they help relieve my stress and, in addition, I can learn more English.

'Relieve for my stress' is incorrect; use 'relieve my stress' or 'help relieve my stress'. 'Add more knowledge about the English' is awkward; use 'learn more English' or 'improve my English'. Remove repeated 'I play'.

× I can learn English from playing games.

✓ I can learn English by playing games.

Use the preposition 'by' to express the means or method ('by playing games'). 'From' can be used but 'by' is more natural here.

× Yeah, I have the same hobby with my mom, which is culinary.

✓ Yes, I have the same hobby as my mom, which is cooking.

Use 'the same ... as' to compare people ('same hobby as my mom'). 'Culinary' is an adjective; use the noun 'cooking' to name a hobby.

× So we always eat out on weekends to try out new restaurants, new kind of foods.

✓ So we always eat out on weekends to try new restaurants and new kinds of food.

Use 'try new restaurants' (no 'out') and pluralize 'kinds' when referring to multiple types. 'Food' is uncountable, so use 'kinds of food.'

× So we can be very happy after that and we can try.

✓ We enjoy it and feel happy afterward, and we get to try new things.

The original sentence is vague and awkward. Clarify the meaning: express enjoyment and happiness and specify that you try new foods or experiences. Use appropriate conjunctions and verbs to make the idea clear.