爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Correct grammar (remove gerund errors), be concise, and organize ideas with a topic sentence followed by brief specifics. Use linking words and avoid redundancy. Mention hobbies in parallel structure and give one short detail about each.

範例: I have several hobbies. I enjoy playing water polo because it keeps me fit, and I also love watching movies to relax. Additionally, I often go out for drinks with friends to socialize on weekends.

建議: Good content and personal detail; fix minor repetition and use smoother transitions. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add a brief reason or memory using a linking word.

範例: Yes. As a child, I played baseball with my friends in the park after school, and I was really passionate about it because I loved the teamwork and competition.

建議: Improve grammar and clarity: correct tense and singular/plural agreement, use one clear topic sentence, then give a specific example and reason. Use linking words for flow.

範例: Yes. I have loved watching movies since I was a child, especially the Harry Potter series, because I enjoy the magical stories and characters.

建議: Be concise and avoid filler words (uh). Use correct subject-verb agreement and parallel structure when listing. Give one clear example of similarity and a brief explanation.

範例: Yes. My family are all sports fans; we both watch and play various sports. For example, my father enjoys watching and playing baseball, so we often go to games together.

× I like to playing water polo and also watching movies is my favorite hobbies and I really like to drinking with my friends.

✓ I like playing water polo, and watching movies is my favorite hobby, and I really like drinking with my friends.

The verb pattern 'like' should be followed by the base form + -ing (gerund) or 'to' + base form, not 'to playing'. Use 'playing' after 'like'. 'Watching movies is my favorite hobbies' mixes singular 'favorite' with plural 'hobbies' and uses plural where singular 'hobby' is needed. Also use parallel structure and commas to separate ideas. 'like to drinking' is incorrect: use 'like drinking' or 'like to drink'. Suggested improvement: use consistent verb forms (either gerund or infinitive), match noun number (hobby/hobbies), and keep parallel structure.

× Yes, as a child my hobby was playing baseball with my friends in the park after school. I I was obsessed with baseball at that time.

✓ Yes, as a child my hobby was playing baseball with my friends in the park after school. I was obsessed with baseball at that time.

The repetition 'I I' is a typing/repetition error; remove the duplicate. The tense 'was obsessed' correctly uses past tense to describe a childhood state. Ensure no duplicated words remain. Suggested improvement: proofread to remove accidental repetitions.

× Yes, watching movies is my favorite hobbies since I was a little especially I like Harry Potter since I was a child and I'm big fan of it.

✓ Yes, watching movies has been my favorite hobby since I was little. I especially like Harry Potter since I was a child, and I'm a big fan of it.

'Watching movies is my favorite hobbies' has number mismatch: 'hobbies' should be singular 'hobby'. When expressing duration from past to present use present perfect: 'has been my favorite hobby since...'. 'since I was a little' is ungrammatical; use 'since I was little' or 'since I was a child'. Also missing article 'a' in 'I'm a big fan'. Suggested improvement: use present perfect for actions/states continuing to present, match singular/plural, and include necessary articles.

× My family, all members of my family, loves uh sports. Both watching and playing, for example, my father like baseball.

✓ My family, all members of my family, love sports. Both watching and playing; for example, my father likes baseball.

'Family' can be treated as a plural concept here; because you clarify 'all members of my family', the verb should be plural 'love' not 'loves'. Also 'sports' does not need 'uh'. In the second clause 'my father like baseball' needs third person singular 'likes' (subject-verb agreement). Suggested improvement: decide whether 'family' is singular or plural in context and ensure verb agreement; use 'likes' with he/she/it subjects and remove filler sounds in formal speech.