爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Reduce repetition and correct grammar; give a clear topic sentence and one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid long abstract phrases like "deepest nature" without explanation.

範例: Yes. My main hobby is singing. I enjoy performing in local choirs and recording covers at home because singing helps me relax and improves my confidence. For example, I sing in a community choir twice a week and sometimes post recordings online.

建議: Correct grammatical errors and be more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add specific examples and a brief linking phrase to explain why you enjoyed them.

範例: Yes, I had several hobbies as a child. I loved singing and drawing, and I often played hide-and-seek with neighborhood friends. Because these activities were social and creative, they made childhood fun and helped me develop confidence.

建議: Avoid vague, repeated expressions and tighten structure. Provide a clear topic sentence, a specific example of how you pursued the hobby, and one brief reason using a linking word.

範例: Yes, singing is a hobby I've kept since childhood. I joined my school choir when I was eight and later took casual voice lessons, so I improved my technique. As a result, singing remains my main creative outlet and stress-reliever.

建議: Fix grammar and word choice, and avoid unclear words like "extravagant" when not appropriate. Give one or two clear comparisons with linking words and specific examples of activities you do differently.

範例: Not really. Unlike my family, who prefer traditional hobbies, I focus on performing arts. For instance, my father watches and plays football, my sister takes dance classes, and my mother writes short stories, while I spend most weekends rehearsing songs and attending music workshops.

× I had many hobbies when I were a child.

✓ I had many hobbies when I was a child.

The subject 'I' requires the singular past form 'was' rather than 'were'. Use 'was' with singular subjects in simple past tense. Suggestion: remember 'I/he/she/it was' and 'we/you/they were'.

× I've always sang and I hope I'll always sing.

✓ I've always sung and I hope I'll always sing.

The present perfect auxiliary 'have' (I've) must be followed by the past participle 'sung', not the simple past 'sang'. Use 'I've always sung' to indicate an action continuing up to now. Suggestion: pair 'have/has' with past participle forms.

× I used to sing, dance, play, hide and seek, write, draw and I loved it.

✓ I used to sing, dance, play hide-and-seek, write, draw, and I loved it.

The phrase 'hide and seek' when used as a noun is commonly hyphenated 'hide-and-seek'. Also add commas to separate list items for clarity. Grammar category: past tense is correct but punctuation/word form needed. Suggestion: use hyphen for fixed phrase and commas between list items.

× What's my family members are much more traditional like.

✓ My family members are much more traditional.

The original sentence is ungrammatical. 'What's' is incorrect here. For present simple with plural subject 'family members', use 'are'. Remove 'like' at the end because it is unnecessary and ungrammatical in this context. Suggestion: state 'My family members are much more traditional.'

× I started to sing in the school choir and I've never stopped ever since.

✓ I started singing in the school choir and I've never stopped since then.

Use 'started singing' (gerund) or 'started to sing' — both possible; 'in the school choir' is fine. However 'never stopped ever since' is redundant: use 'I've never stopped since then' or 'I haven't stopped since.' Also prefer 'started singing' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: use 'started singing' and avoid redundant 'ever since'.

× What's my family members are much more traditional like.

✓ My family members are much more traditional.

This repeats earlier correction: 'What's' seems a mistaken contraction (perhaps 'what's' or 'while') and should be removed. Use correct pronoun/subject 'My family members' with verb 'are'. Suggestion: avoid incorrect contractions and ensure subject stands alone.

× My family and I don't necessarily share the same hobbies.

✓ My family and I don't necessarily share the same hobbies.

Sentence is grammatically correct. No change needed. Included here to indicate checked and acceptable. Suggestion: none.

× I'm much more extravagant in the choice of my favorite activities.

✓ I'm much more extravagant in my choice of favorite activities.

Use 'in my choice' rather than 'in the choice of my' for more natural English. Also 'favorite activities' does not need 'my' before 'favorite' when 'my choice' already shows possession. Suggestion: prefer 'in my choice of favorite activities' for natural word order.

× Singing has always been my favorite hobby and I'm sure it would be with me forever.

✓ Singing has always been my favorite hobby and I'm sure it will be with me forever.

The modal 'would' is inappropriate for a confident future prediction here; use 'will'. This is a future tense/modal usage correction. Suggestion: use 'will' for firm predictions about the future.