阅读— Part 1 評分報告

建議: まず、冒頭で質問に直接答えている点は良いですが、文法と流暢さを改善する必要があります。短い文が断片的になっているため、つなぎの語（for example, because, so, then）を使って文全体を滑らかにし、時制と主語の一致（例："I always asked"や"I used to ask"）を正しくします。冗長なフレーズ（"As my mom said" は不自然）を避け、具体的な詳細を一つ加えると内容が豊かになります。最長5文に収め、自然で効果的な英語に整えましょう。

範例: Yes, I love reading. I started enjoying books when I was about two or three because my mother used to read to me every night. At that age I couldn't read by myself, so she helped me with the stories and taught me new words. Because of those early experiences, I developed a lasting interest in books.

建議: 質問には答えていますが、内容に語彙ミス（"lead"→"read"）や文法の問題があり、論理のつながりも少し不自然です。理由を述べる際は、明確な接続詞（because, so, therefore）を適切に使い、具体的な利点を一つか二つ挙げると良いです。また、発音や語彙の正確さにも注意して自然な表現（"I prefer reading on-screen"）を使ってください。文は3文程度にまとめましょう。

範例: I prefer reading on a screen. Because I commute to school by bus, it's much more convenient to read on my phone or tablet. It's lighter to carry and I can quickly access many books and articles online.

建議: 良い対比構成ですが、表現をもう少し自然にして接続表現を改善すると更に良くなります。例えば、"When it comes to exams" と複数形にし、"there will be a possibility to make a mistake"は冗長なので"I might make mistakes"に簡潔化します。カジュアルな場面の表現はフォーマルな試験場面と対比させるために、具体例（雑誌やSNSなど）を加えると説得力が増します。文は2〜3文で簡潔に。

範例: I need to read very carefully during exams because a small misunderstanding can lead to mistakes. In contrast, when I'm reading for pleasure—like novels or online articles—I don't worry about every detail and just enjoy the content.

× As my mom said.

✓ As my mom said to me.

The original sentence is a fragment and lacks an object that clarifies the action. Adding 'to me' makes the meaning explicit and completes the thought. Use a completed clause when referencing reported speech (e.g. 'As my mom said to me, ...').

× When I was two or three years old, I started to read some books, but I didn't have any skills to read a text, so I always ask my mom to read it for me.

✓ When I was two or three years old, I started to read some books, but I didn't have the skills to read a text, so I always asked my mom to read it for me.

The sentence mixes past tense with present tense. 'Started' and 'didn't have' are past, so 'ask' should be changed to past form 'asked' to maintain consistent past narration. Also 'any skills' is awkward; 'the skills' or just 'skills' is more natural in this context.

× I think that was the first time I started to like reading.

✓ I think that was the first time I started to like reading.

No grammatical change required; sentence uses present reporting verb 'I think' with a past event 'was' which is acceptable. Keep as is.

× I prefer to lead something on the screen because when I go to the school I always take a bus.

✓ I prefer to read something on the screen because when I go to school I always take a bus.

'Lead' is a spelling error; the intended verb is 'read' (pronounced differently but spelled 'read'). Also the idiomatic phrase is 'go to school' without 'the' when speaking generally about attending school.

× Then if I just have a phone, I can read something on the phone.

✓ Then if I just have a phone, I can read something on it.

Repeating 'on the phone' is acceptable but using 'on it' is more natural and avoids unnecessary repetition. Also 'the phone' implies a specific phone; 'it' refers back to 'a phone'.

× Therefore it's really easy to carry.

✓ Therefore it's really easy to carry around.

The verb 'carry' usually needs a particle like 'around' or an object (e.g. 'carry with me') to sound natural when talking about portability. Adding 'around' completes the idea.

× When it comes to exam, I always have to read carefully what the question is asking about because there will be a possibility to make a mistake if I don't do it.

✓ When it comes to exams, I always have to read carefully what the question is asking because there is a possibility of making a mistake if I don't.

Use plural 'exams' for general situations. 'There will be a possibility to make a mistake' is unnatural; use 'there is a possibility of making a mistake'. Also 'what the question is asking about' is wordy; 'what the question is asking' is clearer. Remove redundant 'do it' at end and replace with 'don't' which is understood.

× But in the casual life I do not have to do it 'cause I can just enjoy.

✓ But in everyday life I don't have to do that because I can just enjoy myself.

'Casual life' is not a natural collocation; use 'everyday life'. Use the contraction 'don't' for natural speech and replace colloquial ''cause' with 'because'. Add reflexive pronoun 'myself' to complete 'enjoy myself' which is the correct verb pattern.