阅读— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 답변의 내용은 명확하지만 반복과 문법 오류가 있어 자연스러움이 떨어집니다. 예를 들어 'news article articles'의 중복을 고치고, 문장을 더 간결하게 구성하세요. 주제문(Yes, I like reading.) 뒤에 고유한 이유를 하나 또는 두 개로 제한하고 연결어로 흐름을 부드럽게 하세요. 또한 시제와 소유 표현(여기서는 'even though I live in Canada')을 정확하게 사용하세요.

範例: Yes, I enjoy reading, especially news articles because they are clear and informative. Although I live in Canada now, I still follow news from Korea to keep up with events there.

建議: 대체로 자연스러운 답변이지만 표현이 약간 장황하고 반복(‘cell phone’, ‘news articles’, ‘read’)이 있습니다. 하나의 명확한 이유를 주제문으로 말한 뒤, 연결어(so, therefore, because)를 사용해 간결히 설명하세요. 어색한 구문('new updated articles')은 'latest updates'나 'the latest articles'로 바꿔 쓰세요.

範例: I prefer reading news on a screen because my phone is always with me, so I can quickly unlock it and check the latest updates anytime.

建議: 문장이 길고 중복과 말더듬('read the but')이 있어 이해가 힘듭니다. 질문에 맞춰 '언제'를 두 부분으로 나누어 명확히 답하세요. 예: 교육 관련 뉴스는 왜 자세히 읽는지(이유와 구체적 예 포함), 연예 뉴스는 왜 대강 읽는지. 연결어(for example, because, whereas)를 사용해 논리적 흐름을 만드세요.

範例: I read education news carefully because, as a former teacher and a parent of two, I need to understand policy changes and teaching methods in detail. In contrast, I skim entertainment news since it's mainly for quick updates and amusement.

建議: 답변은 적절하지만 반복(‘certified teacher in Korea’ 등)과 길이가 조금 길어 자연스럽지 않습니다. 간단한 주제문으로 시작하고, 이유를 한두 문장으로 구체화하세요. 또한 'verify the facts' 대신 'check the facts'처럼 더 자연스러운 표현을 고려하세요.

範例: It depends on the topic. For educational news I prefer detailed reading because, as a former teacher and a parent, I need to check the facts and fully understand any policy or method changes.

× I was a certified teacher in Korea and I usually enjoy reading news article articles because they are clear and full of useful information.

✓ I was a certified teacher in Korea and I usually enjoy reading news articles because they are clear and full of useful information.

The noun 'article articles' includes a duplicated word and incorrect plural form. Use the plural 'articles' to match 'news' (countable plural). Remove the duplicated word. Suggestion: 'news articles'.

× Even though I am living in Canada, I usually check the news in Korea.

✓ Even though I live in Canada, I usually check the news in Korea.

The progressive form 'am living' implies a temporary action; 'live' (simple present) better expresses a permanent or regular situation. Use simple present for habitual actions: 'I live in Canada' and 'I usually check'.

× I prefer reading news on a screen because I always have my cell phone and if I want to read the news articles, I can just unlock my cell phone easily and read the new updated articles right away.

✓ I prefer reading news on a screen because I always have my cell phone and if I want to read news articles, I can just unlock my phone and read the newly updated articles right away.

Use 'news articles' without the article 'the' when speaking generally. 'Cell phone' can be shortened to 'phone' to avoid repetition. 'New updated' is redundant; use 'newly updated' or 'recently updated'. Also remove unnecessary repetition for clarity.

× I need to read it carefully when I read the education news, because I was a certified teacher in Korea and now I have two children, so I want to keep up the policies and teaching methods, but I read the but when I read the entertainment news, I skim them.

✓ I need to read education news carefully because I was a certified teacher in Korea and now I have two children, so I want to keep up with policies and teaching methods; but when I read entertainment news, I skim it.

Problems: 'read it carefully' unclear—use 'read education news carefully'. Add preposition 'with' after 'keep up'. Remove duplicated 'the but'. 'Entertainment news' is uncountable here, so use singular pronoun 'it' rather than 'them'. Use a semicolon or conjunction to connect clauses.

× It depends on what kind of news I read. If I read the educational news, I want to read it in detail because I was a certified teacher in Korea and now I have two children, so I want to verify the facts and understand them.

✓ It depends on what kind of news I read. If I read educational news, I want to read it in detail because I was a certified teacher in Korea and now I have two children, so I want to verify the facts and understand them.

'The educational news' is awkward; use 'educational news' without 'the' when speaking generally. Otherwise sentence is correct. Ensure pronoun 'them' refers to 'the facts'—this is acceptable.