阅读— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Reduce filler words (uh) and correct word choice (use "history books" or "historical books").

範例: Yes, I enjoy reading, especially history books. For example, I own hundreds of volumes on world history and religious history, which help me understand how past events shaped our society and beliefs.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence, then provide one or two concise, specific reasons linked with a linking word. Avoid repeating the same idea. Use precise vocabulary like "better for my eyes" or "less eye strain."

範例: I prefer reading on paper because it causes less eye strain than screens. In addition, paper books are easier to focus on for long periods, which helps me concentrate better.

建議: Provide a clear contrast using linking words (e.g., "when... but when..."). Be specific about what "reading carefully" means and avoid vague phrases. Reduce hesitation and correct grammar ("during my exams," "I don't concentrate as much on history books unless they interest me").

範例: I read very carefully during exam periods because I need to memorise key facts and terminology from the syllabus. However, when I read history books for pleasure, I usually skim parts I find less interesting and focus only on chapters that catch my attention.

建議: Start with a direct topic sentence, then explain the conditions with linking words. Use correct phrasing ("it depends on the type of book") and give a brief example to illustrate. Keep it within 2–3 sentences and avoid minor grammar errors.

範例: It depends on the book: if the topic interests me, I read it in detail and sometimes reread passages for clarity. Conversely, if the book doesn't appeal to me, I usually scan chapters to find the main points.

× Yes, I love reading, especially the historic, historical books.

✓ Yes, I love reading, especially historic and historical books.

The student used a comma and duplicate adjectives awkwardly. Use coordinate adjectives correctly without unnecessary commas and avoid repeating similar adjectives. 'Historic' and 'historical' are both valid but have different meanings: 'historic' for important events, 'historical' for relating to history. If both are intended, join with 'and'. Also remove the extra comma to make the phrase natural.

× Uh, I have almost, I would say hundreds of books in my, uh, bookshelves at my home.

✓ Uh, I have almost, I would say, hundreds of books on my bookshelf at home.

Use singular 'bookshelf' when referring to one unit and preposition 'on' for items placed on a shelf. If there are multiple shelves use 'bookshelves'. Also remove unnecessary commas and 'at my home' to 'at home' for natural phrasing.

× So it helps me to get more and more knowledge about the history of our, uh, world and uh, history of our religion.

✓ So it helps me gain more and more knowledge about the history of our world and the history of our religion.

Use 'gain' rather than 'to get' for collocation with 'knowledge'. Remove unnecessary commas. Use the definite article 'the' before 'history of our religion' for specificity. Preposition 'about' is not necessary when using 'knowledge about' followed by 'the history of...'; using 'about' is acceptable but here 'knowledge about the history' is redundant; simpler: 'knowledge about the history' or 'knowledge of the history'.

× I always prefer to read on paper because it is more healthy to our eyesight, uh, and because watching screen or reading online or reading ebooks is not much healthy for our eyes.

✓ I always prefer to read on paper because it is healthier for our eyesight, and because watching screens or reading online or reading e-books is not very healthy for our eyes.

Use comparative 'healthier' instead of 'more healthy'. Use preposition 'for' with 'eyesight'. Pluralize 'screen' to 'screens' when speaking generally. Use 'very' rather than 'much' with adjectives. Use hyphen in 'e-books' or keep 'ebooks' as single word; keep consistency. Replace redundant phrases for clarity.

× So I always prefer reading on paper.

✓ So I always prefer reading on paper.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable. 'Prefer reading' is valid. No change needed. (Included only for completeness; no grammar correction required.)

× Uh, I think I read more carefully while my exams because at that time I need to remember everything, every word from the books, from my syllabus.

✓ Uh, I think I read more carefully during my exams because at that time I need to remember everything, every word from the books and from my syllabus.

Use 'during' rather than 'while' for periods like 'my exams'. Keep present tense 'need' to indicate habitual or general truth. Remove redundant commas and use 'and' to connect 'books' and 'syllabus'.

× And while reading the historic books, I do not pay much concentration, uh, on reading, uh, like the, I do not need.

✓ And when reading historical books, I don't concentrate much on the details because I don't need to.

Use 'when' for clarity and 'historical' for describing books about history. 'Pay much concentration on' is awkward; use 'concentrate much' or 'don't concentrate much on'. Simplify clause 'like the, I do not need' to 'because I don't need to'. Use contraction 'don't' for natural speech if matching transcript tone.

× Actually it depends what type of books I'm reading.

✓ Actually it depends on what type of books I'm reading.

Include preposition 'on' after 'depends'. The rest is correct present continuous to describe ongoing preference.

× If I like the book, I read it more carefully, even I read the lines 2-3 times.

✓ If I like a book, I read it more carefully; I even read some lines two or three times.

Use 'a book' for general statements not a specific book. Place 'even' before the verb phrase 'I even read' and use 'some lines' or 'certain lines' for naturalness. Write numbers in words in formal writing and use 'two or three' instead of '2-3'.

× But when the book is not of my interest, I always try to scan.

✓ But when a book does not interest me, I always try to skim it.

Use natural English expression 'does not interest me' instead of 'is not of my interest'. 'Scan' is understandable but 'skim' is the more common verb for quick reading. Add object 'it' after 'skim'.