阅读— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (umm) and grammatical errors, and limit to 2–3 sentences. Use linking words to connect past habit and current preference.

範例: Yes, I enjoy reading, especially romance, adventure, and mystery novels. I used to prefer physical books when I was young, but nowadays I prefer reading on apps because it’s more convenient and portable.

建議: Good content and clear reasons — remove hesitation words and slightly combine sentences to sound more fluent. Add a concise linking phrase to improve coherence.

範例: I prefer reading on a screen because a single app lets me carry thousands of titles, which is far more convenient. For instance, I often read during my commute to work, so having books on my phone saves space and time.

建議: Avoid repetition and grammatical mistakes (possessive and verb forms). Give one clear topic sentence then specific supporting details with linking words. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

範例: As a teacher, I need to read students’ essays very carefully because I assess their grammar, vocabulary, and sentence structure. However, I don’t read informal messages or short notes in detail unless they contain important instructions.

建議: Be more structured: state a clear preference, then use a linking word to acknowledge the exception. Remove hesitations and finish incomplete clauses.

範例: I generally prefer scanning because it allows me to get the main ideas quickly. However, when I deal with important documents, I read in detail so I don’t miss any crucial information.

× I enjoy reading, especially those umm romance and adventurous or mystery novels.

✓ I enjoy reading, especially romance, adventure, or mystery novels.

'Those' is unnecessary and awkward before genres; adjectives should be parallel and 'adventurous' (an adjective describing a person) is not the correct genre form. Use 'adventure' to match 'romance' and 'mystery' as noun genres and list them in parallel. Also remove filler 'umm'.

× I read a physical book when I was young but now I more prefer to read on online apps.

✓ I read physical books when I was young, but now I prefer to read on online apps.

Pluralize 'book' to match general past habit ('books') and remove 'more' since 'prefer' already expresses preference. Place comma before 'but' and use correct word order: 'prefer to read on online apps.'

× I can read it anywhere I want.

✓ I can read them anywhere I want.

The pronoun should agree with the plural antecedent 'titles' or 'books.' 'It' suggests a singular item, so change to 'them.' This is subject/pronoun agreement in present context.

× For example, when I travel to work, I can read the book on screen on the journey to work.

✓ For example, when I travel to work, I can read books on the screen during the journey.

Avoid repeating 'to work.' Use 'books' (plural) to match general case, 'on the screen' is a clearer prepositional phrase, and 'during the journey' is a more natural expression than 'on the journey to work.'

× Personally, I'm a teacher so I have to grade students work.

✓ Personally, I'm a teacher, so I have to grade students' work.

Missing possessive apostrophe in 'students' to indicate work belonging to students. Also add a comma before 'so' to separate clauses.

× When I read through their essays, I have to read in detail because I need to grade them based on their grammar, vocabulary and also sentence structure.

✓ When I read through their essays, I have to read in detail because I need to grade them based on their grammar, vocabulary, and sentence structure.

The list needs proper parallelism and punctuation: 'and also' is unnecessary; use commas and parallel noun phrases. No participle error, but fixed coordination to match list formatting rules per allowed types.

× And therefore when I grades something, when I read something on work, I have to read in detail.

✓ Therefore, when I grade something at work, I have to read in detail.

'Grades' is incorrect for the subject 'I' — use 'grade.' 'When I read something on work' is unidiomatic; use 'at work.' Remove redundant phrases and add a comma after 'Therefore.'

× Definitely. I prefer scanning because I can read through, uh, a passage faster, but sometimes.

✓ Definitely. I prefer scanning because I can read through a passage faster, but sometimes I use detailed reading.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'but sometimes.' Complete the contrast clause for clarity. Remove filler 'uh' and extraneous comma after 'through.' Maintain conjunction 'but' with a full clause.

× But most of the time when we read through some important documents, we have to do it in detail so that we won't miss out any important information.

✓ But most of the time, when we read important documents, we have to do so in detail so that we don't miss any important information.

Use 'do so' to avoid vague 'do it,' remove 'through' (unnecessary), and change 'won't' to 'don't' to match the general present-tense statement. Also remove 'out' in 'miss out any'—the correct phrase is 'miss any.' Added comma after 'most of the time.'