走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make your answer more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh), correct verb forms and repeat words, and add one specific detail or habit. Use a linking phrase to explain why you don’t walk much.

範例: Not really. I don’t walk much because I work in an office and I sit at my desk most of the day. Consequently, I only walk during short breaks or when I go to the nearby shop after work.

建議: Use correct past forms and be more concise. Begin with a clear direct answer, then give two specific examples of activities and a brief linking phrase to show contrast with now.

範例: Yes, I did. I used to run across the fields and play football with my friends, and I often rode my bicycle around the neighbourhood. Compared with now, I was much more active as a child.

建議: Good content and coherence; improve precision and reduce repetition. Start with a concise topic sentence, then give two specific reasons with linking words. Use precise vocabulary (e.g. ‘peaceful’, ‘green space’).

範例: People enjoy walking in parks because they offer a peaceful, green environment. For example, the air is fresher and there is no traffic, so walkers can relax and exercise safely.

建議: Fix small mistakes and make the answer more fluent. Start with a clear conditional sentence, avoid hesitation, and add one vivid detail about the countryside to make it more specific.

範例: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in the countryside near my hometown because I grew up there. The roads are quiet, there are wide fields and apple orchards, and the fresh air helps me relax.

建議: Be precise and use correct tense. Start with a direct answer about the recent past or present, avoid unclear phrases like 'Soon as I have files', and give a specific recent time and place if possible. If you haven't walked recently, say when you last did and why.

範例: I haven't walked recently because I’ve been very busy with work. The last time I went for a walk was about two years ago when I visited a local park near my office and spent about 30 minutes walking around the lake.

× Well, actually I don't, even though I know it is good to walk once in awhile because, uh, my work, I work in an office and my my work requires me to sit in a desk most of the time.

✓ Well, actually I don't, even though I know it is good to walk once in a while because my work requires me to sit at a desk most of the time.

Use of 'in awhile' is incorrect — correct form is 'in a while' (two words). 'Sit in a desk' is incorrect preposition; the correct collocation is 'sit at a desk'. Also remove repeated words ('my my work') and redundant clause 'I work in an office' for conciseness. Suggestion: say 'my work requires me to sit at a desk'.

× Well, as far as I can remember, when I was a child, I used to running down the field.

✓ Well, as far as I can remember, when I was a child, I used to run down the field.

After 'used to' you must use the base form of the verb, not the -ing form. 'Used to' expresses habitual actions in the past, so use 'run' not 'running'. Suggestion: practice 'used to' + base verb (I used to play, I used to go).

× So yes, I walk and run a lot when I was a kid.

✓ So yes, I walked and ran a lot when I was a kid.

The time expression 'when I was a kid' places the action in the past, so verbs should be in past tense ('walked', 'ran') not present simple. Suggestion: match verb tense to time frame: past actions -> past tense.

× The air in the park is always fresh and clean and there's no traffic, so you could run, you could walk when wherever you want.

✓ The air in the park is always fresh and clean and there's no traffic, so you can run or walk wherever you want.

Modal consistency and pronoun usage: 'could' suggests ability but here general statement fits 'can'. 'when wherever you want' is ungrammatical; use 'wherever you want'. Also use 'or' to link alternatives. Suggestion: use 'can' for general ability and 'wherever' as one word.

× Well, uh, if I had a chance to take a long work, I would be in the countryside in my hometown because I grew up in the countryside.

✓ Well, uh, if I had a chance to take a long walk, I would go to the countryside in my hometown because I grew up there.

Incorrect noun 'work' should be 'walk'. Conditional clause is second conditional: 'if I had a chance... I would go' — use 'would go' not 'would be in'. Also 'in my hometown' is awkward with 'countryside'; use 'go to the countryside in my hometown' or 'go to my hometown in the countryside' and replace repeated 'in the countryside' with 'there'. Suggestion: correct noun and use 'go' for action.

× I haven't. As I mentioned before, I haven't had any chance to take a walk.

✓ I haven't. As I mentioned before, I haven't had any chance to take a walk recently.

The response 'I haven't.' alone is vague but not strictly wrong. The second sentence is grammatical but adding time marker 'recently' clarifies 'lately'. Suggestion: use 'recently' or 'lately' to match the question 'Where did you go for a walk lately?'. Note: 'haven't had any chance' is present perfect negative and fits the context.

× Soon as I have files, I remember I went to a park maybe a couple years ago to take a walk.

✓ As soon as I had time, I remember I went to a park maybe a couple of years ago to take a walk.

'Soon as I have files' is ungrammatical and likely intended 'as soon as I had time' or 'when I had time'. Use past tense 'had' to match 'I went' and use 'a couple of years ago' with 'of' after 'couple'. Also 'files' is incorrect word choice; use 'time'. Suggestion: use correct collocation 'a couple of years ago' and match tenses.