走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and use correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons. Avoid repetition and verb form errors (parents, public bus). Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' correctly.

範例: Yes, I walk a lot. My parents don’t own a car, so I usually walk or take the public bus, which means I walk long distances every day.

建議: Provide a clear past-tense topic sentence and add one specific detail. Reduce fillers ('uh') and use linking words like 'and' or 'so' to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I often walked outside as a child. My grandparents used to take me to the park, where I played with other children and joined simple games like tag.

建議: Give a structured answer: state main reasons, then explain briefly with specific details. Correct word choices (less crowded, peaceful) and use linking words like 'because' and 'for example'. Avoid vague phrases.

範例: People like walking in parks because they are peaceful and less crowded than streets. For example, parks have wide paths and greenery, which makes walking comfortable and relaxing.

建議: Be specific and concise. Use correct tense and reduce hesitations. State your choice clearly, give one or two reasons (distance, cultural significance) and use linking words like 'because' or 'also'. Correct vocabulary (often, kilometers).

範例: I would like to walk to Ambaji Temple because many locals make a pilgrimage on foot. It is about 100–150 kilometres away, so the journey would be a meaningful long walk and a cultural experience.

建議: Answer briefly and accurately. Use past tense and give a clear amount with a reason or detail. Avoid fillers and approximate ranges—choose a single estimate if possible.

範例: Recently I walked from my home to my college, which is about 10 kilometres. I prefer walking when the weather is nice and it saves bus fare.

× Yes, I walk a lot because my parent doesn't give me any vehicle so I want to travel by walking or I have to take a bus, a public bus so I have to walk a lot.

✓ Yes, I walk a lot because my parents don't give me any vehicle, so I travel by walking or take the public bus, which means I have to walk a lot.

The sentence uses the singular 'parent' but implies both or at least one of the parents in general; use 'parents' for natural English. 'Doesn't' should be 'don't' to agree with the plural subject (subject-verb agreement). The sentence is long and awkward; combine clauses and use 'take the public bus' for clarity. Use commas to separate ideas and a relative clause 'which means' to explain consequence. Grammar problem type ID:12

× Yes, when I was a child, my grandparents took me in the park so I can play with, uh, children.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, my grandparents took me to the park so I could play with other children.

The time frame is past ('when I was a child'), so the modal/verb should be in past form: 'can' is present; use 'could'. Also use the correct preposition 'to the park' rather than 'in the park' for the verb 'took'. Add 'other' before 'children' for clarity and remove filler words. Grammar problem type ID:5

× Because people find park very interesting and more convenient.

✓ Because people find parks very interesting and convenient.

'Park' should be plural or use 'the park' depending on context; 'parks' is natural when speaking generally. 'More convenient' is comparative without a comparison; use the positive 'convenient'. Remove 'more' when not comparing to anything specific. Grammar problem type ID:13

× Easy to walk in the park like no hustle, no more public in the park, they can walk easily.

✓ It is easy to walk in the park because there is no hustle and few other people, so they can walk easily.

Sentence fragments are corrected to a full sentence with subject and verb. 'No more public in the park' is ungrammatical; use 'few other people' or 'not many people'. Use connectors 'because' and 'so' to show cause and effect. Replace informal 'hustle' with 'hustle' is acceptable but ensure grammar around it. Grammar problem type ID:12

× Umm, I will surely go to, uh, Ambaji temple because in my area, people often live going, like, people oftenly go, uh, by walking to that, uh, temple, uh, it's like 100 to 150 kilometer from my home. So surely I will go to the temple.

✓ I would definitely go to Ambaji Temple because people in my area often walk to that temple; it is about 100 to 150 kilometers from my home, so I would certainly go.

The question is conditional ('Where would you like to take a long walk if you had the chance?'), so use 'would' not 'will'. 'Oftenly' is not a word; use 'often'. 'People often live going' is ungrammatical and removed. Use 'kilometers' plural and commas to break the sentence into clearer clauses. Grammar problem type ID:7

× Uh, I remember, uh, I walked to like from my home to college around 10 to 15 kilometres.

✓ I remember walking from my home to college, which is about 10 to 15 kilometres.

Use the gerund 'walking' after 'remember' when recalling the action as a past experience in summary form. Remove filler 'like' and reorder for clarity. Use 'which is about' to state the distance and 'kilometres' plural. Grammar problem type ID:5