走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the answer more natural and concise, use correct tense and clearer linking words, avoid repetition and filler. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details (frequency, purpose, location). Correct grammar (e.g., "recently" with present perfect or use "these days").

範例: Yes, I walk a lot these days. I usually walk for about 30–45 minutes every morning because it keeps me fit and helps my mental well-being. Also, there is a forest near my home where I can enjoy nature and think quietly.

建議: Provide a direct, well-structured response with fewer fillers and correct tense. Mention specific reasons briefly and use linking words to show sequence (for example: "because", "after that"). Limit to two or three sentences and give a clear comparison to now.

範例: No, I didn't walk much as a child because I had a lot of homework and piano practice. After school I usually stayed home to study, whereas now I have more free time to go out and walk.

建議: Keep the answer focused and use precise vocabulary and linking words. Avoid vague phrases like "etcetera"; give two clear reasons and a brief example. Watch grammar ("clear your mind" should be "clear their mind").

範例: People like walking in parks because the peaceful surroundings help them relax and clear their minds. In addition, parks offer pleasant scenery like trees and lawns, and many people also walk their dogs and meet neighbors there.

建議: Give a clear main idea and use cohesive linking words to contrast the two scenarios. Use accurate collocations ("go for a long walk in the mountains") and avoid vague phrases like "certain mountain". Keep it concise with two sentences.

範例: It depends on the situation. If I'm on holiday near the mountains, I'd go for a long hike to enjoy the scenery and solitude; otherwise I usually walk in local parks or around the city when I'm busy.

建議: Use full sentences and correct past tense; avoid fillers like "uh" and be specific about timing and location. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., "I went to a lakeside park last weekend") and add one specific reason why you chose that place.

範例: Last weekend I went for a walk by a lakeside park near my home. The peaceful setting helped me relax and think about some work-related issues without distractions.

× Yes, I walk a lot recently because it's easier to practice our body and beneficial for our mental health, not like other sports.

✓ Recently, I have been walking a lot because it's an easy way to exercise my body and it is beneficial for my mental health, unlike other sports.

Present perfect continuous or present perfect (have been walking) is used for actions that started in the past and continue to the present; 'walk a lot recently' with simple present is incorrect (matches problem type 6: Present tense issue). 'Practice our body' is incorrect word choice and pronoun; use 'exercise my body' (problem type 12: Incorrect use of pronouns and 13: Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs). 'Not like other sports' should be 'unlike other sports' (problem type 11: Incorrect use of prepositions/phrases). Suggestions: Use present perfect continuous for ongoing recent actions, use 'exercise' for physical activity, keep pronouns consistent with 'I/my', and use 'unlike' for contrast.

× You don't need to arrange a bunch of people or spend any money.

✓ You don't need to organize a group of people or spend any money.

'Arrange a bunch of people' is informal and awkward; 'organize a group of people' is clearer (problem type 13: Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs/word choice). No tense error. Suggest using 'organize' and 'group' for clarity.

× And there is a forest close to my home.

✓ There is a forest near my home.

'Close to my home' is understandable but 'near my home' is more natural (problem type 13: Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs). No tense issue. Suggest using 'near' for location.

× It's very easy for me to ponder on things by walking.

✓ It's very easy for me to think about things while walking.

'Ponder on' is nonstandard; the correct verb-object is 'ponder' or 'think about' (problem type 13: Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs/word choice). 'By walking' is less natural than 'while walking' to indicate simultaneous action (problem type 20: Incorrect adverb placement/phrase choice). Suggest using 'think about' or 'ponder' and 'while walking'.

× Actually, no, I didn't go outside that much when I was a child because there was always, umm, substantial amount of homework and, uh, I had to stay at home to finish all of them.

✓ Actually, no, I didn't go outside that much when I was a child because there was always a substantial amount of homework, and I had to stay at home to finish it.

The sentence uses past tense correctly for childhood (fine), but 'substantial amount of homework' needs the article 'a' (problem type 22: Article errors). Also 'all of them' is unnatural for 'homework' (uncountable); use 'it' (problem type 12: Incorrect use of pronouns). Suggest adding 'a' before 'substantial amount' and replacing 'all of them' with 'it'.

× After the homework, I still need to practice the piano, et cetera.

✓ After finishing my homework, I still needed to practice the piano, etc.

Tense mismatch: the speaker refers to past routines as a child, so present 'need' is incorrect; use past 'needed' (problem type 6: Present tense issue). 'After the homework' is awkward; 'after finishing my homework' is clearer (problem type 26: Sentence structure errors). Suggest using past tense and clearer phrasing for sequence.

× Umm, not like now I'm quite, uh, free.

✓ I wasn't like that; now I'm quite free.

This is a sentence structure and tense clarity issue. To contrast past and present, use 'I wasn't like that; now I'm quite free.' (problem type 26: Sentence structure errors). Suggest explicitly contrasting past state with present state and use full clauses.

× I think parks are quite tranquil and make you calm.

✓ I think parks are quite tranquil and make you feel calm.

'Make you calm' is understandable but normally 'make you feel calm' is more natural (problem type 13: Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs). Suggest adding 'feel' to indicate the resulting state.

× It's good to walk while clear your mind within a wonderful environment with green trees, grass, etcetera.

✓ It's good to walk to clear your mind in a beautiful environment with green trees and grass.

'While clear your mind' is ungrammatical; use 'to clear your mind' or 'while clearing your mind' (problem type 8: Verb + -ing form or 10: Verb in the present participle form). 'Within a wonderful environment' is awkward; 'in a beautiful environment' is more natural (problem type 13). Suggest using the infinitive 'to clear' and 'in a beautiful environment'.

× Maybe some other people like to walk their dogs in parks and socialize a little bit with other pet.

✓ Maybe some people like to walk their dogs in parks and socialize a little bit with other pet owners.

'Other pet' is incorrect; you need a noun 'owners' to indicate people with pets (problem type 12: Incorrect use of pronouns/nouns). 'Some other people' is redundant; 'some people' is fine. Suggest using 'pet owners'.

× Well, it depends. If I have a long holiday near certain mountain, I like to take a long walk in the natural environment without any disturbance.

✓ Well, it depends. If I have a long holiday near a certain mountain, I would like to take a long walk in a natural environment without any disturbance.

Conditional and modality: for a hypothetical situation, use 'would like' rather than 'like' (problem type 7: Future tense issue/conditional). Also 'near certain mountain' needs an article 'a certain mountain' (problem type 22: Article errors). Suggest using 'would like' and add 'a' before 'certain mountain'.

× However, if I still have lots of work, I just take some walks near the parks or even in the cities close to my home.

✓ However, if I still have lots of work, I just take short walks near the park or even in the city close to my home.

Tense and habitual present is okay, but 'I just take some walks' is awkward; 'I just take short walks' is more natural (problem type 13). 'Near the parks' and 'in the cities' should be singular 'near the park' and 'in the city' when referring to the area near the speaker's home (problem type 1: Singular and plural issue). Suggest using 'short walks', and prefer singular 'park' and 'city' for the local area.

× Recently uh, went for a walk near a lakeside view not far from, uh, my home, uh, where I can ponder on the recent work and issues.

✓ Recently, I went for a walk by a lakeside not far from my home, where I could think about recent work and issues.

Missing subject 'I' in the original ('went for a walk' lacks subject) — sentence without a verb subject (problem type 23: Sentence without a verb/subject). 'Lakeside view' is awkward; 'by a lakeside' is natural (problem type 13). For past event, use past 'could' or 'was able to' rather than present 'can' (problem type 5: Past tense issue). 'Ponder on' should be 'think about' (problem type 13). Suggest adding subject 'I', use past tense consistently, and choose natural phrases like 'by a lakeside'.

× Umm, it's easier to relax without any disturbance.

✓ It was easier to relax without any disturbances.

Tense consistency: the speaker is describing a recent past walk, so use past tense 'was' instead of present 'is' (problem type 6: Present tense issue). 'Disturbance' can be plural 'disturbances' but singular is also acceptable; plural sounds more natural here (problem type 13). Suggest keeping tense consistent with surrounding sentences and use 'disturbances' if referring to multiple interruptions.