走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 注意减少重复词（如“are are”）并控制句子长度，先用一句主题句直接回答，然后用一到两句补充具体细节和原因，使用连接词使句子更连贯。可以用更地道的表达如“go for a walk”或“take a stroll”。

範例: Yes, I do. I usually go for a walk in the park near my home after dinner because the fresh air and lovely scenery help me relax.

建議: 避免口语填充词（如“you know”）和冗余表达（如“always abundant”），并将原因表达得更具体。开头明确回答，随后用一两条具体细节支持，并用连接词如“because”或“so”保持逻辑。

範例: Yes, I did. My grandparents often took me for morning walks because the sunlight energised us, and walking was a simple way to stay healthy.

建議: 避免重复（如两次“because”）并简化表达，使用更自然的搭配（例如“appreciate nature”或“relax their minds”）。回答可先给出主要原因，再用1-2个具体影响或例子支持。

範例: I think the main reason is the scenery: parks let people appreciate nature and relax, which helps reduce stress after a busy day.

建議: 回答应更简洁直接，避免冗长句子和语法错误（如“give me a familiar sense of the nature”）。可先直接回答地点，然后简要说明原因并用连接词衔接。

範例: I would choose a park. I enjoy sunlight and fresh air there, and long walks in parks make me feel calm and close to nature.

建議: 避免用不完整句子开头（不要用“Because”单独开句），并修正重复（“to have to have”）。先直接回答最近去哪儿，然后说明原因或频率，句子不超过五句。

範例: I haven't had much time recently because my school bag is heavy, but when I can I walk in the nearby park to relax.

× I usually take a walk after dinner in a park which is near my home because the fresh air and the beautiful scenery here are are really appealing to me.

✓ I usually take a walk after dinner in a park near my home because the fresh air and the beautiful scenery here are really appealing to me.

句中重复使用了“are are”，为打字或重复错误；另外“in a park which is near my home”较冗长，改为“in a park near my home”更自然流畅。被标为被动语态错误的目的是在列表中匹配最接近的类型，但实际问题为重复与从句冗长。建议：注意避免重复输入，使用简洁的修饰结构（如名词+补充短语）。

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

✓ Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

该句时态与问句形式正确（过去时）且无需修改。保留原句。

× My grandparents always took me around when I was a child, especially in the mornings because the sunlight is always abundant and it is a good way to just to strengthen my body, you know?

✓ My grandparents always took me around when I was a child, especially in the mornings because the sunlight was always abundant and it was a good way to strengthen my body.

原句前半为过去时（took, was），但后半“the sunlight is always abundant”与“it is a good way”使用现在时，与上下文时态不一致。将其改为过去时“was”与“was”以保持时态一致；此外删除多余的“to”使“to strengthen”正确。建议：叙述过去经历时全文保持过去时态，注意多余词汇的删除。

× Well, I think the beautiful scenery that the park has is always the primary reason because because it can foster people's appreciation to the natural, to the beautiful natural views and also it makes a great impact on people's relaxation of mind.

✓ Well, I think the park's beautiful scenery is the main reason because it can foster people's appreciation of nature and beautiful views, and it greatly helps people relax.

原句存在重复“because because”、冗长并且搭配不当。“appreciation to the natural”应改为“appreciation of nature”；“relaxation of mind”结构笨拙，改为“help people relax”更地道。建议：避免重复词，使用固定搭配（appreciation of），简化表达。

× As you know that I always enjoy the sunlight and the fresh air in the park, so maybe I will choose to take a long walk in the park because it always give me a familiar sense of the nature.

✓ As you know, I always enjoy the sunlight and the fresh air in the park, so maybe I will choose to take a long walk in the park because it always gives me a familiar sense of nature.

原句有几个问题：1) “As you know that”搭配不当，改为“As you know,”；2) 主动现在时“it always give”与主语不一致，应为“gives”；3) “the nature”不需要定冠词，改为“nature”。建议：注意固定搭配，主谓一致，以及不可数名词前冠词的使用。

× Because my school book is always heavy so I didn't have enough time to take a walk nowadays.

✓ Because my school books are always heavy, I don't have enough time to take a walk nowadays.

原句混用了现在时副词“nowadays”和过去时“didn't have”。应与“nowadays”一致使用现在时，且“school book”应为复数“school books”以表示常态的多本书。建议：时间副词决定时态一致性，并注意单复数。

× But I usually go to the park which is near my home to have to have relaxations.

✓ But I usually go to the park near my home to relax.

原句重复“to have to have”，且“relaxations”用于此处不自然。应使用动词不定式“to relax”或名词“to have a rest”。建议：避免重复，使用自然搭配（to relax / to have a rest）。