走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Сформулируйте ответ более естественно и грамматически корректно: избегайте повтора слов, используйте короткое утверждение, затем одно-два уточняющих предложения с причинами. Исправьте ошибки в использовании времен и предлогов (например, “say me” → “tell me”, “walk too lot” → “walk a lot”), и сократите заполнители вроде «uh».

範例: Yes, I walk a lot. I usually walk to my classes and training sessions because I prefer not to use a bus or car. My friends often tell me I walk more than most people.

建議: Сделайте ответ компактнее и последовательнее: начните с прямого утверждения о прошлом (use past tense), затем добавьте одно конкретное обстоятельство или пример. Избегайте повторов («like to go outside», «spend time outside») и неверных форм глаголов (например, «love play» → «loved playing»).

範例: Yes, I often went outside as a child. I loved playing on the street with my friends and usually returned home in the evening.

建議: Дайте чёткое мнение, затем приведите конкретные причины с логической связкой. Уберите лишние заикания и неверные словосочетания (напр. «supports to recharging» → «helps recharge»). Используйте связки: «because», «so», «for example».

範例: People like walking in parks because it helps them relax and recharge. For example, after sitting indoors all day, a walk in a park provides fresh air and gentle exercise.

建議: Сформулируйте условное предложение правильно и используйте более формальный лексический выбор вместо «wanna». Дайте одну-две причины, почему именно это место привлекает вас, и используйте корректные сочетания слов (например, «on the beach» not «in a beach areas»).

範例: If I had the chance, I would like to take a long walk on the beach because I want to see the sea. Walking by the sea feels refreshing and peaceful to me.

建議: Используйте прошедшее время последовательно («went», «had») и сократите повторения («conversation»). Начните с короткого ответа, затем добавьте одну-две детали о том, с кем вы были и о чём говорили. Уберите звуки заполнения «uh».

範例: Recently I went for a walk around my neighborhood. I walked with my friends and we chatted about recent events in our lives.

× Yes, I think I walk a lot because people around me always say me that I walk too lot.

✓ Yes, I think I walk a lot because people around me always tell me that I walk too much.

The verb 'say' is incorrectly used with the indirect object 'me'; English uses 'tell' for 'tell someone something'. 'Say me' is ungrammatical. Also 'too lot' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'too much' for uncountable actions. Suggestion: use 'tell me' and 'too much'. ID: 12

× Uh, and I walk when I go to the study to trainings, uh, and I try to not use the bus or car.

✓ I walk when I go to study or to training, and I try not to use the bus or car.

Redundant 'the' before 'study' and awkward 'to trainings'. Use 'go to study' or 'go to the study' depending on meaning; here 'go to study' (to study) is appropriate. Use singular uncountable 'training' or 'training sessions'. 'Try to not use' is less natural than 'try not to use'. Suggestion: remove unnecessary articles and correct word forms. ID: 10

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

✓ Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

This question is already grammatically correct in past tense; no correction needed. It uses the past simple auxiliary 'did' appropriately. ID: 5

× Of course, when I was a child, I liked to go outside because I like to spend time outside and I love play with my friends on the street and I arrive, uh, at home at evenings after.

✓ Of course, when I was a child, I liked to go outside because I liked to spend time outdoors and I loved playing with my friends in the street, and I arrived home in the evenings afterwards.

Tense inconsistency: mixing past ('was', 'liked') with present ('like', 'love') is incorrect. Use past tense throughout for past habits. 'Love play' should be 'loved playing' (verb + -ing). 'On the street' is acceptable but 'in the street' is more natural. 'At evenings after' should be 'in the evenings afterwards'. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense and use gerund after verbs of liking. ID: 12

× I think because of that, uh, walking in a park supports to recharging and relaxing, umm, after, umm, sitting in the warm place.

✓ I think that walking in a park helps you recharge and relax after sitting in a warm place.

The phrase 'because of that' is awkward here; use 'I think that'. 'Supports to recharging' is incorrect collocation; use 'helps (you) recharge'. 'Recharging' should be 'recharge' as a base verb after 'help' or 'helps you'. 'Sitting in the warm place' is unnatural; use 'sitting in a warm place'. Suggestion: use correct verb collocations and articles. ID: 11},{