走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and natural: avoid filler words ("Umm") and conflicting phrases ("at least almost"). Give a clear topic sentence and one brief supporting detail. Use linking words only if needed.

範例: Yes, I walk a lot — usually close to 10,000 steps a day. I also like to go for an evening stroll to relax after work.

建議: Clarify and correct odd phrasing ("all the nations" is unclear). Use a topic sentence then one or two specific supporting details. Replace repeated words like "usually" with varied vocabulary.

範例: Yes, I did. My parents often took me for walks after school in the evenings, and we would explore nearby streets and parks together.

建議: Make the answer more natural and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two concise, connected reasons using a linking phrase.

範例: People enjoy walking in parks because they are safer than busy streets and offer pleasant scenery; for example, I like hearing birds and seeing trees and flowers.

建議: Avoid run-on sentences and vague endings ("which help me"). Use a topic sentence then specific supporting details (distance, sights, reasons). Use a linking word to connect ideas.

範例: I'd like to walk for several hours in Chatuchak Park near my home because it's very large — I could walk five kilometres while enjoying its trees, flower beds and peaceful paths.

建議: Correct grammar ("one of the universities"), remove redundancy ("also" and "as well"), and be specific about why playing the game helped (e.g. made it more fun or motivated walking). Keep to two or three short sentences.

範例: Recently my partner and I walked around a university campus near our home in the evening. There were many people exercising, and we played a Pokémon game to make the walk more fun and keep us motivated.

× Of course I walk at least almost 10,000 steps a day.

✓ Of course I walk at least almost 10,000 steps a day.

No change needed for plurality; '10,000 steps' is correctly plural. However, word order could be improved ('at least almost' is awkward), but this is not a listed grammar problem type so it is left unchanged.

× Umm, sometimes I also go out for a walk.

✓ Umm, sometimes I also go out for a walk.

Sentence is grammatically correct; 'go out for a walk' uses correct verb forms. No change required as it does not meet any listed error types.

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

✓ Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

Question uses correct past simple auxiliary 'did' with base verb 'go' for past habitual action. No correction needed.

× Yes, I did. I usually went for a walk when I was a child, accompanied by my parents.

✓ Yes, I did. I usually went for a walk when I was a child, accompanied by my parents.

Past tense is correctly used for habitual past action. No change required.

× They usually took me for a walk after school in the evening and we would explore all the nations.

✓ They usually took me for a walk after school in the evening and we would explore all the neighborhoods.

The original uses 'nations' which is incorrect in context. This is a word choice/quantifier error: 'all the nations' suggests countries rather than local areas. 'Neighborhoods' or 'areas' fits the context of evening walks. This matches 'Incorrect use of quantifiers' because the quantifier 'all the' with 'nations' is inappropriate here.

× I personally like walking in parks because I don't have to be worried about getting hit by cars and while walking I can enjoy the views of the park, the animals chirping in the park.

✓ I personally like walking in parks because I don't have to worry about getting hit by cars, and while walking I can enjoy the park's views and the animals chirping.

Multiple issues: 'have to be worried' is awkward; correct phrase is 'have to worry' (verb form). Also repetition 'in the park' is redundant. The main listed error addressed is 'Incorrect use of the definite article' because repeating 'the park' and using 'the animals' is acceptable but clumsy; condensing to 'the park's views' avoids unnecessary articles. The explanation advises reducing repetition and using natural verb patterns.

× I would love to take a long walk in the Chatuchak Park which is near where I live.

✓ I would love to take a long walk in Chatuchak Park, which is near where I live.

Minor article and punctuation issue: 'the Chatuchak Park' is unnecessary if the park's name already includes 'Park'; use 'Chatuchak Park' without 'the'. This fits 'Future tense issue' only in that 'would' is a conditional modal — but the correction targets article usage tied to naming. Suggestion: omit 'the' before proper park names.

× The park is huge, I can walk there for 5 kilometers and I can enjoy the scenery, the trees, the flowers which help me.

✓ The park is huge; I can walk there for 5 kilometers and enjoy the scenery, the trees, and the flowers, which help me relax.

Original has run-on sentence and an unclear clause 'which help me.' This is primarily a 'Present tense issue' because present simple is used correctly, but clarity requires adding a verb ('relax') after 'help me'. Also add punctuation and conjunction 'and' for a natural list. Suggestion: complete the relative clause and fix sentence flow.

× Recently I went for a walk in one of a universities near where I live with my partner.

✓ Recently I went for a walk in one of the universities near where I live with my partner.

Incorrect article with plural noun: use 'one of the universities' not 'one of a universities'. This is a singular/plural and article error. Use 'the' with 'one of' plus plural noun.

× I went back in the evening and there were so many people walking and running at that time.

✓ I went back in the evening, and there were so many people walking and running at that time.

Sentence is grammatically correct in past tense; only minor punctuation added. No tense correction needed. Kept as past simple for recounting events.

× We also played a Pokémon game while walking as well which help us.

✓ We also played a Pokémon game while walking, which helped us.

The verb 'help' should be in past tense 'helped' to agree with the past narration ('played'). This matches 'Verb + -ing form' category insofar as the clause contains 'walking' (correct), but the main issue is past tense agreement: use 'helped'. Also remove redundant 'as well' and add comma before the relative clause.