走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Fix verb tense and article/noun errors (e.g., "working outside" → "walking outside"; "in weekend" → "on weekends").

範例: Yes, I do. I usually go for walks on weekends because I enjoy the fresh air and the scenery. For example, if the weather is nice I walk along the riverside for an hour to relax and clear my mind.

建議: Use consistent past tense when talking about childhood and avoid confusing comparisons. Give one clear reason and a concise contrast using linking words (e.g., "because", "but"). Correct grammatical mistakes ("I have more free time than at that time" → "I had more free time then").

範例: Yes, I did. I walked outside much more often as a child because I had more free time, but now I am busier with studies and work so I only walk on weekends.

建議: Provide clearer, natural phrasing and correct grammar. Use linking words to list reasons (e.g., "first," "second") and be specific (explain how parks are safer and more pleasant). Fix singular/plural and preposition errors.

範例: I think there are two main reasons. First, parks are safer and less crowded, so people do not need to worry about traffic. Second, parks usually have nicer scenery and quieter surroundings compared with the busy city.

建議: Complete your answer and use correct structures: conditional + reason. Avoid fragments; correct vocabulary and grammar ("large greenery" → "lots of greenery"; "it can fresh the air" → "it has fresher air"). Add a brief personal detail to make it specific.

範例: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in a forest because I love tall trees and lots of greenery. I think the air would be fresher there, and since I grew up by the sea I'm curious to experience a dense forest.

建議: Use correct past-time expressions and tenses. Say "last Christmas" (no "in") and keep tenses consistent when explaining the recent past. Be concise and link ideas with words like "but" or "because."

範例: The last time I went for a walk was last Christmas when I went back to China and strolled along the seaside with my younger sister. But recently I have been very busy with my studies and IELTS preparation, so I have not had time to walk.

× I really enjoy working outside in my free time just for breathing the fresh air and watching beautiful scenery.

✓ I really enjoy working outside in my free time just to breathe the fresh air and watch the beautiful scenery.

Using 'for' + -ing here is unnatural after 'enjoy' and the purpose phrase. Use 'to' + base verb ('to breathe', 'to watch') to express purpose or preference. Also add 'the' before 'beautiful scenery' to refer to specific scenery seen while walking.

× It will make me feel really relaxed.

✓ It makes me feel really relaxed.

When speaking about a habitual or general effect (walking makes you relaxed), use the simple present rather than 'will'. 'Will' implies a single future event; simple present is correct for general truths or habitual effects.

× For example, I always go out in weekend if the weather is good.

✓ For example, I always go out on weekends if the weather is good.

English uses 'on weekends' (plural) or 'at the weekend' depending on variety; 'in weekend' is incorrect preposition. Use 'on' with 'weekend' and pluralize for habitual action: 'on weekends'.

× Yes I did. I did it more frequently when I was young because I have more free time than at that time.

✓ Yes, I did. I did it more frequently when I was young because I had more free time then.

The sentence mixes past and present tenses. When referring to past time ('when I was young'), use past tense throughout: 'had' and 'then' (or 'at that time'). Also add comma after 'Yes' for clarity.

× However, when I'm growing up I'm busy with lots of work and studies so I hardly go outside instead of in the weekend.

✓ However, as I grew up I became busy with a lot of work and study, so I hardly go outside except on weekends.

The original mixes present progressive with past idea. If contrasting childhood and now, use past for the change ('as I grew up' and 'became busy') and then present for current habit ('I hardly go outside'). 'Instead of in the weekend' is incorrect; use 'except on weekends'. Also use 'a lot of work' or 'a lot of studying' and singular 'study' or 'studies' depending on meaning.

× I think there are two reasons for people like to walk in a park.

✓ I think there are two reasons why people like to walk in a park.

Missing conjunction 'why' to introduce the reason clause. 'Reasons for people like' is ungrammatical; use 'reasons why people like' or 'reasons for people to like'.

× One of the reason is they do not need to consider above the traffic lights.

✓ One of the reasons is that they do not need to worry about traffic lights.

Use plural 'reasons' after 'one of the'. Also 'consider above the traffic lights' is incorrect phrasing. Use 'worry about' or 'pay attention to traffic lights'. Omit 'above' and add 'that' to introduce the clause.

× Another reason is the scenery in the park are better than the scenery in the city.

✓ Another reason is that the scenery in the park is better than the scenery in the city.

Subject 'the scenery' is singular (uncountable), so use 'is' not 'are'. Also add 'that' to introduce the clause and optionally omit repeated 'the scenery' for conciseness: 'the scenery in the park is better than in the city.'

× I would like to go to a forest because I want to see the tall trees and large greenery.

✓ I would like to go to a forest because I want to see the tall trees and extensive greenery.

'Large greenery' is unnatural; use adjectives like 'extensive' or 'lush' with 'greenery'. This is an adjective choice issue to make the phrase natural. Grammar is otherwise fine.

× It will make me feel really relaxed because it can fresh the air and also I'm grown up in a coastal city so I'm curious about the forest because I.

✓ It would make me feel really relaxed because it can freshen the air, and also I grew up in a coastal city so I'm curious about the forest.

Multiple errors: use conditional 'would' to match hypothetical 'I would like to go'. 'Fresh the air' is wrong; verb is 'freshen' or 'it would freshen the air' or better 'it would provide fresh air'. 'I'm grown up' should be 'I grew up'. Remove trailing 'because I.' which is incomplete. Combine with proper clauses and tenses.

× Oh, it's been a long time. It was in last Christmas.

✓ Oh, it's been a long time. It was last Christmas.

Use 'last Christmas' without 'in'. 'In last Christmas' is incorrect because 'last' already specifies the time; 'in' is unnecessary.

× I went back to China and walked along the seaside with my young sister.

✓ I went back to China and walked along the seaside with my younger sister.

'Young sister' is awkward in English when comparing ages; use 'younger sister' to indicate relative age. Grammar otherwise fine.

× However, these days I'm really busy with my study, especially the IELTS test, so I didn't have time to go for a walk.

✓ However, these days I'm really busy with my studies, especially preparing for the IELTS test, so I don't have time to go for a walk.

Mixed tenses: 'these days' signals present habitual situation, so use present tense 'don't have'. Use plural 'studies' or 'my studying'. Also 'especially the IELTS test' is clearer as 'especially preparing for the IELTS test.' 'Didn't have' refers to past and conflicts with 'these days'.