走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two specific details. Avoid unclear words (e.g. “atoms”) and irrelevant repetition. Use simple linking words if adding details.

範例: Yes, I walk a lot. My job requires me to serve customers behind a counter, so I move around to help people and restock shelves during my shift.

建議: Answer directly then give one or two specific, grammatically correct details. Use past tense consistently for childhood. Avoid vague phrases and pronoun errors. Use a linking phrase like “because” or “so” correctly.

範例: Yes, I often went outside as a child. I used to walk with my best friend to explore the neighborhood because we loved playing games and discovering new places.

建議: Give a clear main idea then two specific reasons, using linking words for coherence. Avoid repetition and incorrect word choices (e.g. “work in the park” vs “walk in the park”). Keep to 2–3 sentences maximum.

範例: People like walking in parks because it lets them enjoy nature and fresh air. For example, after long hours in a noisy city, a walk in the park helps reduce stress and provides a quiet place to relax.

建議: Answer directly using a conditional sentence (would + verb). Provide a clear location and one specific reason. Fix grammar (e.g. “parks in big cities are easy to find”). Keep it concise and complete the sentence.

範例: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in a large city park because parks are easy to find and they offer quiet paths and green spaces to relax.

建議: Use the past tense for recent events and be specific about location and reason. Avoid confusing phrasing and repetition. State where you went, when, and why briefly (1–2 sentences).

範例: Recently I went for a short walk near my apartment after work. I had been standing for eight hours and needed some fresh air and a short break.

× Yes, I work a lot because my job requires me to serve people behind the counter, so I always move around to help people and restock the atoms.

✓ Yes, I work a lot because my job requires me to serve people behind the counter, so I always move around to help customers and restock the items.

The sentence uses incorrect word 'atoms' instead of 'items' (word choice error). Also 'people' and 'customers' is clearer in context; this is not a strict grammar rule but improves register and meaning. Suggestion: use precise vocabulary related to the job (customers, items).

× I remember I often went out with my best friend when I was a child and we tend to go outside because they are more exciting activities in the outside and we went for work as usually do.

✓ I remember I often went out with my best friend when I was a child and we used to go outside because there were more exciting activities outdoors and we went for walks as we usually did.

Mixed tense and incorrect verb forms: 'tend to go' (present) should be past habit 'used to go'; 'they are more exciting activities' incorrectly uses 'they' and plural agreement; use 'there were' to state existence in the past; 'in the outside' incorrect preposition, use 'outdoors'; 'went for work' is wrong phrase, 'went for walks' fits; 'as usually do' incorrect order and missing subject, use 'as we usually did'. Suggestion: keep past tense consistent for childhood memories and use 'used to' for repeated past actions, use 'there was/were' for existence, and correct prepositions 'outdoors'.

× Well, I think if you work in the park, you have the chance to explore the nature. Especially you work so long in the urban cities, you don't have the chance to breathe in the fresh air. So people tend to work in the park and then you have the chance to explore the nature and also.

✓ Well, I think if you go to a park, you have the chance to enjoy nature. Especially if you work long hours in urban areas, you don't have the chance to breathe fresh air. So people tend to go to parks to enjoy nature and relax.

Several issues: 'work in the park' misuses the verb; the conditional 'if you work' is odd—use 'if you go to a park'; 'explore the nature' is unidiomatic, use 'enjoy nature'; 'you work so long' should be 'you work long hours'; 'urban cities' redundant—use 'urban areas' or 'cities'; 'breathe in the fresh air' better as 'breathe fresh air'; last sentence fragments and repetition: restructure to 'go to parks to enjoy nature and relax'. Suggestion: use verbs and collocations that fit context (go to a park, enjoy nature, work long hours), avoid redundancy and complete sentences.

× Will I tend to take a long walk in the park because park in the big cities are everywhere it's very easy to find out, but in the.

✓ I would probably take a long walk in a park because parks in big cities are everywhere and very easy to find, but not in rural areas.

Wrong question form 'Will I tend' and awkward modal use; the question asked 'Where would you like...' so use conditional 'I would probably'. Agreement: 'park in the big cities are' should be 'parks in big cities are'; 'find out' is wrong collocation—use 'find'. Sentence is incomplete—finish the contrast 'but not in rural areas'. Suggestion: use 'would' for hypothetical, ensure subject-verb agreement and complete the comparative contrast.

× We'll probably near my apartment because my work is very busy. I often stand out for 8 hours. So the last time I I went for work in my apartment.

✓ I'd probably go for a walk near my apartment because my work is very busy. I often stand for eight hours. So the last time I went for a walk was near my apartment.

'We'll probably' is wrong modal/contracted form; use 'I'd probably' (I would) for hypothetical. 'near my apartment' needs a verb: 'go for a walk near my apartment'. 'I often stand out for 8 hours' uses 'stand out' incorrectly and numeral form—use 'stand for eight hours'. Last sentence has repetition 'I I' and incorrect 'went for work in my apartment'—correct to 'went for a walk was near my apartment'. Suggestion: use appropriate modals for hypotheticals, correct verb collocations ('stand for', 'go for a walk') and spell out small numbers in speech-based text if preferred.