走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 문법과 어휘 선택이 부정확하고 문장이 불완전합니다. 의미 전달을 위해 동사의 시제와 형태를 바로잡고, 장소와 이유를 명확히 설명하세요. 답변은 주제 문장 + 1~2개의 구체적 이유/예시로 구성하고, 접속사(so, because, when, especially)를 자연스럽게 사용해 보세요.

範例: Yes, I walk quite often, especially along the coastline. I started walking there when I was a university student because I enjoyed the fresh air and the peaceful views, so it became a habit.

建議: 중복과 단어 선택 오류가 있습니다. 'work' 대신 'walk' 또는 'play'를 사용하고, 어린 시절의 습관을 시제와 함께 명확히 설명하세요. 한두 문장으로 이유나 구체적 장소(예: nearby hill, park)를 덧붙이면 좋습니다.

範例: Yes, I often walked around my town when I was a child. For example, I usually climbed the nearby hill with my friends because it was a fun place to play and we could see the whole town.

建議: 아이디어는 적절하지만 표현이 어색합니다. 'quality of air' 대신 'fresh air' 또는 'clean air'를 쓰고 'easy to walk around'로 고치세요. 이유를 하나 더 추가하고 연결어를 사용해 문장을 자연스럽게 만드세요.

範例: People like to walk in parks because the air is usually fresher and cleaner than in busy streets. Also, parks have easy paths and pleasant scenery, so walking there feels relaxing.

建議: 조건문 시제와 장소 설명이 혼동되어 있습니다. 'If I had the chance'로 가정법을 쓰고, 이유를 구체적으로 설명하세요. 또한 'worked that road'는 부적절하므로 'walked' 또는 'traveled'로 바꾸세요.

範例: If I had the chance, I would like to take a long walk along the Bhutan coastline road. I remember walking parts of it when I was a university student, and I want to explore more because the scenery seemed amazing.

建議: 시제 혼용과 어휘 오류가 있습니다. 'lately I have been going to the gym'처럼 현재완료 진행형을 사용하고, 'treadmill' 또는 'exercise machine'으로 구체화하세요. 이유는 간결하게 정리하세요.

範例: Lately I have been going to the gym because it has been too cold to walk outside in Korea. I usually use the treadmill or other exercise machines to keep up my walking routine.

× Yes, I woke up woke a lot, especially coastline.

✓ Yes, I walked a lot, especially along the coastline.

The student used 'woke up' incorrectly instead of the past tense of 'walk'. Use 'walked' for past actions. Also add 'along the coastline' to be idiomatic. Suggestion: use correct past tense verbs and appropriate prepositions (e.g., 'walked along the coastline').

× Because trying Rd. when I was a university student.

✓ Because I used to walk that road when I was a university student.

The original fragment lacks a subject and finite verb. Use 'I used to' to indicate habitual past actions. Suggestion: form full sentences with subject + past tense verb for past habits.

× Also I like working for Hearst.

✓ Also, I like working for Hearst.

This sentence is acceptable with present tense 'like'. Add a comma for clarity. If the student intended past, use 'I liked working'. Suggestion: ensure tense matches intended meaning.

× Yes, I I really like work around my town for traveling, especially when I was young younger umm.

✓ Yes, I really liked walking around my town when I was younger, especially for traveling.

Mix of present and past is inconsistent. For past habitual actions use past tense 'liked' and 'was younger'. Replace 'work' with 'walking' or 'walk' to match meaning. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and choose correct verb form.

× I usually go on town mountain.

✓ I usually go to the town mountain.

Preposition choice is incorrect; use 'go to' a place. 'Town mountain' is odd but keep as given. If describing activity, use 'I usually go hiking on the town mountain.' Suggestion: use correct prepositions and add gerund for activities.

× Because I believe that park has umm, quite nice quality of air and easy to work around.

✓ Because I believe that the park has quite nice air quality and is easy to walk around.

Missing definite article 'the' before 'park'. 'Quality of air' should be 'air quality'. 'Easy to work around' should be 'easy to walk around'. Also need linking verb 'is'. Suggestion: use articles correctly and collocations like 'air quality' and correct verbs for activities.

× If I have a chance I would like, I would like to go uh, Bhutan Coastline Rd. because uh, when I was a university student, I often worked that road for.

✓ If I had the chance, I would like to go to Bhutan Coastline Road because when I was a university student I often worked on that road.

Conditional sentence mixing present and conditional incorrectly. For hypothetical use 'If I had the chance' + 'would like'. Use 'go to' for destinations and 'worked on that road' for past activity. Suggestion: use second conditional for hypothetical situations and correct prepositions ('to', 'on').

× Umm lately I I'm going to gym because nowadays Korea is so cold for us outside working.

✓ Lately I'm going to the gym because nowadays Korea is so cold to work outside.

Remove redundant 'I'. Use article 'the gym'. 'Cold for us outside working' is awkward; use 'cold to work outside' or 'too cold to work outside'. Suggestion: avoid redundancy and use appropriate infinitive structures ('too cold to...').

× So I use learning machine for work.

✓ So I use exercise machines for my workouts.

'Learning machine' is incorrect vocabulary; likely means 'exercise machine' or 'gym machine'. Also 'for work' is odd; use 'for my workouts' or 'to exercise'. Suggestion: choose correct nouns and collocations and match purpose expressions.