走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence. Avoid repetition and filler words. Use linking words to add one specific supporting detail (when, where, why). Also correct basic word choice (walk vs work) and pronunciation for clarity.

範例: Yes, I walk quite often. For example, I like taking brisk walks in the park at sunrise because the fresh air helps me relax and start the day positively.

建議: Answer directly with a simple past or past habitual statement. Reduce hesitations and give one or two specific reasons or examples explaining your childhood habit. Use linking words (however, because, so) to make it coherent.

範例: When I was a child, I rarely went for walks because I usually preferred staying at home. Moreover, most children in my neighborhood spent time on their phones instead of playing outside.

建議: Start with a clear opinion and then give two specific reasons linked logically. Avoid confusing verbs (work vs walk) and improve sentence structure. Use linking words like because, and, or for example.

範例: People like walking in parks because the environment is peaceful and the fresh air is healthy. For example, many go there early in the morning to exercise, walk their dogs, and enjoy time with family.

建議: Give a clear, specific location and one reason why. Keep it to one topic sentence plus one supporting detail. Use correct vocabulary (choose, spring) and linking words (because, for example).

範例: I would choose to take a long walk in a quiet park or near a natural spring because these places are peaceful and help me relax. For example, walking by water always calms me and clears my mind.

建議: Answer directly in the past tense with a short specific example (place and time). Avoid excessive hesitations and clarify meaning (walk vs work). If you didn't walk recently, say so and explain briefly why. Use linking words like because or so.

範例: I haven't gone for a long walk recently because I'm a student and have been busy with classes and assignments. However, I usually walk to campus between classes when I have a short break.

× Yes, I think I like I like work work.

✓ Yes, I think I like walking.

The student repeated words and used the noun 'work' incorrectly to express the activity of walking. The intended meaning is an activity/habit, which requires the gerund (verb + -ing). Use 'walking' to indicate the action they enjoy. Remove repetitions for clarity.

× Umm work can make you feel com comfortable.

✓ Walking can make you feel comfortable.

The sentence used 'com comfortable' (typo/repetition) and 'work' instead of 'walking'. Use the correct noun/gerund 'walking' and the adjective 'comfortable'. Ensure no duplicated fragments.

× For example in the sunrise you can work in in the park to see.

✓ For example, at sunrise you can walk in the park and enjoy the view.

The original has repetition ('in in'), incorrect preposition 'in the sunrise' and awkward structure 'to see'. Use 'at sunrise' for time, 'walk in the park' for the activity, and 'enjoy the view' as the intended result. Add commas for clarity.

× Uh, let me think in my memory, I, uh, when I was a child, I sometimes, I usually prefer to stay at home.

✓ Uh, let me think. From my memory, when I was a child I usually preferred to stay at home.

The sentence mixes past and present tense: 'when I was a child' requires past tense throughout. Change 'prefer' to past form 'preferred' and simplify repeated fillers for clarity.

× Uh, you know, in this area, uh, people, people always have a phone to spend time the child.

✓ Uh, you know, in this area people often use phones to occupy their children.

The original has unclear phrasing 'have a phone to spend time the child'. Use correct verb 'use' and phrasing 'occupy their children' to convey that parents use phones to keep children busy. Also remove repeated words.

× Uh, let me think, I guess people, people lovely to, to work in parks in 6:00 or 8:00 AM, They can take care of their parents, dogs, eat, make people feel comfortable.

✓ Uh, let me think. I guess people love to walk in parks at 6:00 or 8:00 AM. They can take care of their parents and dogs, eat, and feel comfortable.

Errors: 'lovely to' should be 'love to' (verb choice), 'work' should be 'walk', wrong preposition 'in 6:00' should be 'at 6:00', and list punctuation/structure issues. Correct verb forms and list with conjunctions. Use lowercase after comma unless new sentence.

× Everywhere I think if I or like to walk I guess I can choice a park or a little springs.

✓ Everywhere, I think. If I like to walk, I would choose a park or a small spring.

Problems: missing punctuation, awkward conditional phrasing, incorrect verb 'choice' (noun) instead of 'choose', and plural 'springs' mismatched with 'a little'. Use conditional structure 'If I like to walk, I would choose...' and correct verbs and nouns.

× Umm I think whatever. I always can make me feel relaxed.

✓ Umm I think anywhere. It always makes me feel relaxed.

'Whatever' is vague; 'anywhere' fits context. 'I always can make me feel relaxed' misuses pronouns and modal order. The subject is 'it' (the place) and verb should be 'makes' (present). Use present simple for general truth.

× Where did you go for a walk lately?

✓ Where have you gone for a walk lately?

Question uses 'lately' (recent period), which typically pairs with present perfect in English. Use 'have you gone' instead of simple past 'did you go' to ask about recent activity.

× Uh, let me remember, umm, I'm a student, so I a lot of time, I spend a lot of time for my classes and the works, umm, so I don't have time to work if you, if you want to.

✓ Uh, let me remember. I'm a student, so I spend a lot of time on my classes and my work, and I don't have time to walk now.

Original has missing verbs ('I a lot of time'), incorrect preposition 'for my classes' should be 'on my classes' or 'in my classes', 'the works' should be 'my work', and the ending 'so I don't have time to work if you, if you want to' is unclear. Context suggests they mean 'don't have time to walk now.' Rephrase for clarity and correct prepositions and nouns.