走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, correct grammatical errors, and limit to 3–4 sentences. Use linking words to explain conditions and give a specific example (where/when/how long).

範例: Yes, I walk quite often in my spare time. It usually depends on the weather and my mood; for example, on sunny mornings I like to walk in the nearby park for about 30 minutes to enjoy the fresh air.

建議: Answer directly and use past tense consistently. Provide one clear reason and a brief example instead of repeating. Keep to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

範例: No, I didn't walk much as a child because I preferred playing active games with my friends. For example, we often spent afternoons playing football or hide-and-seek in the neighborhood rather than going for walks.

建議: Give a clearer, structured response with specific reasons. Use linking phrases (for example, because, moreover) and simple vocab correctly. Provide two concise reasons: health and pleasant environment, with a brief example.

範例: People like walking in parks because it's good for their health and offers a pleasant environment. For example, parks have fresh air and greenery, and many people find walking there less stressful than exercising at home or the gym.

建議: This answer is quite clear but can be tightened and made more natural. Use a stronger topic sentence, correct minor grammar (e.g., 'calm' not 'more calm'), and include a specific detail about duration or route to sound more convincing.

範例: I'd choose a large city park for a long walk because I enjoy the scenery and fresh air. For instance, I would walk for an hour along the lake paths early in the morning when it's calm and peaceful, which helps me relax and get good exercise.

建議: Be concise and clear. Use past simple correctly and avoid awkward phrasing like 'satisfied my demands.' Provide one or two specific details (when, how long, who with) and link them logically.

範例: Last week I walked in the playground near my university because it's very close to my apartment. I spent about 20 minutes walking there in the evening, which was convenient and helped me unwind.

× Yes, I always walk at my spare time.

✓ Yes, I always walk in my spare time.

The preposition 'at' is incorrect with 'spare time'. Use 'in' to indicate an activity that happens during a period of free time. Also 'my spare time' requires no article change. Suggestion: use 'in my spare time' for natural English.

× Actually, it depends on the weather and my mood in that moment.

✓ Actually, it depends on the weather and my mood at that moment.

Use the preposition 'at' with expressions like 'that moment' to refer to a specific point in time. 'In that moment' is possible in some contexts but 'at that moment' is the standard collocation here.

× If the climate is great and I am very happy today, so I would choose to walk at playground.

✓ If the weather is nice and I am in a good mood today, I would choose to walk in the park.

Replace 'climate' with 'weather' (more natural), 'very happy' with 'in a good mood', and remove the unnecessary conjunction 'so' after the conditional clause. Use 'in the park' instead of 'at playground' and include the article 'the'. For conditional sentences with a present hypothetical about today, 'would' is acceptable but omitting 'so' and using correct prepositions improves grammar and naturalness.

× No, actually when I was a child I prefer play lots of games with my friends rather than go outside to have a walk.

✓ No, actually when I was a child I preferred to play many games with my friends rather than go outside for a walk.

The sentence refers to past habits so use past tense 'preferred' instead of 'prefer'. Use the infinitive 'to play' after 'preferred'. 'Lots of' is informal; 'many' is more appropriate. Use 'for a walk' rather than 'to have a walk' for natural phrasing.

× It's more fun and there's a have a walk.

✓ It's more fun and going for a walk wasn't interesting to me.

Original phrase 'there's a have a walk' is ungrammatical. Rephrase to clearly convey meaning: contrast 'it's more fun' with 'going for a walk wasn't interesting to me'. Use past tense 'wasn't' to match context.

× It didn't have any attractive for any young kid.

✓ It wasn't attractive to me as a child.

Use the adjective 'attractive' with a linking verb, not 'have'. 'It didn't have any attractive' is incorrect. Also 'any young kid' is vague; align with speaker 'me as a child' for clarity and correct past reference.

× Umm.

✓ (pause)

'Umm' is a filler sound; in transcripts indicate a pause or remove it for clarity. No grammatical correction needed.

× Actually I think it's related to development of society more than people pay more attention to healthy life and compared with one the have work seems like more easier to exercise.

✓ Actually, I think it's related to social development: people pay more attention to a healthy lifestyle, and compared with when they are working, it is easier to exercise.

Reword to clear structure. Use 'social development' not 'development of society'. 'Pay attention to a healthy lifestyle' is correct phrase. 'Compared with one the have work' is ungrammatical; change to 'compared with when they are working'. Use 'easier' without 'more' before it.

× Actually I would choose a park for a long walk because I really enjoy the pretty scenery and fresh air.

✓ Actually, I would choose a park for a long walk because I really enjoy the pretty scenery and the fresh air.

Add the definite article 'the' before 'fresh air' to refer to the specific air in that park. Other parts are correct.

× I think walking in a park helps me relax and make me exercise feel.

✓ I think walking in a park helps me relax and makes me feel like I'm exercising.

Use subject-verb agreement: 'helps' and then 'makes' (third-person singular). Original 'make me exercise feel' is ungrammatical. Rephrase to 'makes me feel like I'm exercising' to convey intended meaning.

× I went for a walk in the playground which is located in my university last week and actually it's really near my apartment and is the only reason I concerned about is distance and it's satisfied my demands.

✓ I went for a walk on the playground at my university last week; it's really near my apartment, and the only reason I cared about it was the distance, which satisfied my needs.

Use past tense consistently: 'was' and 'cared'. Use 'on the playground' or 'in the playground' can vary; 'on the playground' is common. 'Located in my university' -> 'at my university'. Fix sentence structure by splitting into clauses and using relative clause 'which satisfied my needs'. Replace 'concerned about' with 'cared about' and 'satisfied my demands' with 'satisfied my needs' for natural English.