走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clear, concise and correct grammar. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct vocabulary errors (e.g., 'commute on foot', 'gives'), avoid redundancy, and keep within 3–4 sentences. Add one specific detail and a linking word.

範例: Yes, I do walk quite a lot during the week. I usually walk from my home to the bus stop in the morning and then stroll to a nearby restaurant after class, which gives me a little daily exercise. Because of this, walking helps me clear my head and feel more focused for the day.

建議: Begin with a direct statement, correct tense consistency and vocabulary mistakes ('I enjoyed long walks' or 'I enjoyed those walks'), remove filler words, and give one specific supporting detail linked logically.

範例: Yes, I did. When I was a child my mother often took me to the park after dinner for a short walk to get fresh air and exercise. Those walks helped me relax and gave us a chance to talk as a family.

建議: Answer directly and correct key errors ('walk in parks', 'help', 'after a long day', 'are easily accessible'). Use linking words (for example, 'also' or 'because') and give a specific reason or example rather than vague statements.

範例: I think people like to walk in parks because they are peaceful and full of greenery, which helps them relax after a long day. Also, parks are usually easily accessible in cities, so it is convenient for everyone to take a short walk during their break.

建議: This answer is generally clear and relevant. Slightly improve coherence by linking ideas smoothly and correcting small phrasing ('If I had the chance'). Keep it within three concise sentences and add one concrete image or detail.

範例: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in the mountains. My family often goes hiking, so I love the fresh air and beautiful scenery there; this time I would go alone to enjoy some quiet time and watch the sunrise over the peaks.

建議: Start with a direct answer and fix verb tense and word choice ('I walked', 'I shopped', 'I walked around', 'I was very tired'). Avoid repetition and shorten to 2–3 coherent sentences with a specific detail (what you bought or why it was worth it).

範例: I went to the Eaton Centre last weekend to buy warm clothes for an upcoming ski trip. I walked around the department stores for about two hours and felt very tired afterwards, but it was worth it because I found a good jacket and warm gloves.

× 'I commute on food to the bus stop in the morning and then walk to the nearby restaurant after class.'

✓ 'I commute by foot to the bus stop in the morning and then walk to the nearby restaurant after class.'

'on food' is incorrect; the correct prepositional phrase for traveling by walking is 'by foot' or 'on foot'. Use 'by foot' or better 'on foot' to indicate mode of travel. Suggestion: say "I commute on foot".

× 'I believe that walking give me a little exercise and help me clear my head.'

✓ 'I believe that walking gives me a little exercise and helps me clear my head.'

'walking' is a singular gerund subject, so verbs must take third-person singular form ('gives', 'helps'). Ensure subject-verb agreement: gerund subjects use singular verb forms.

× 'Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?'

✓ 'Did you often go outside for a walk when you were a child?'

'to have a walk' is non-idiomatic in this context. Use 'for a walk' when talking about going outside to walk. The tense 'Did you... when you were a child' is fine; only prepositional phrase is corrected.

× 'Umm, I enjoy lost works because that helped me relax and spend time with my family.'

✓ 'Umm, I enjoyed long walks because they helped me relax and spend time with my family.'

'enjoy' should be past 'enjoyed' to match 'when I was a child'; 'lost works' is likely a mis-typing of 'long walks'; 'that' is incorrect referring to plural 'walks', so use 'they'. Ensure tense consistency and correct nouns.

× 'Well, I think people like to work in parks because they are peaceful and full of greenery which help us relax and after the long day.'

✓ 'Well, I think people like to walk in parks because they are peaceful and full of greenery, which helps us relax after a long day.'

Several issues: 'work' is wrong word choice — should be 'walk'; clause punctuation needed; 'which' refers to singular idea 'being peaceful and green' so 'helps' is correct; remove extraneous 'the' before 'long day'. Also place adverbial phrase 'after a long day' at the end.

× 'Parks should also easily accessible in cities so it's convey is convenient for everyone to take a short walk.'

✓ 'Parks should also be easily accessible in cities so it is convenient for everyone to take a short walk.'

Missing auxiliary verb 'be' after 'should'; 'it's convey is convenient' is ungrammatical — intended meaning is 'it is convenient'. Remove 'convey'. Use 'it is convenient' to express convenience.

× 'Well, I went to the Eaton Centre last weekend because I needed to buy some warm clothes for my ski trip and I work around the department store for maybe 2 hours.'

✓ 'Well, I went to the Eaton Centre last weekend because I needed to buy some warm clothes for my ski trip, and I walked around the department store for maybe two hours.'

Mixing present 'work' with past context. Use past tense 'walked' to match 'went' and 'needed'. Also write numbers in words in formal speech: 'two hours'.

× 'It's very tired, but I think it's it's very it was worth.'

✓ 'It was very tiring, but I think it was worth it.'

'tired' describes people, not situations; use 'tiring' to describe the activity. Original also has repetition and wrong word order; correct phrasing is 'it was worth it' to express value of effort.