走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question directly, then give one or two specific supporting details. Use correct tense and avoid repetition. For example, say when and why you walk and give a typical duration or route.

範例: Yes, I walk a lot. I usually walk to my classes and back home every day, and after dinner I take a 20–30 minute walk around my neighborhood to relax.

建議: Use past tense and give a clear, specific memory. Begin with a direct past-tense topic sentence, then add one concrete example (who with, where, or why). Avoid unclear pronouns and run-on sentences.

範例: Yes, I often went for walks when I was a child. After finishing my homework, I usually walked with my parents in the local park to get fresh air and talk about our day.

建議: Give a clear reason and support it with specific details and linking words. Use accurate vocabulary (e.g., vegetation, wildlife, fresh air). Complete your sentence and avoid vague endings. Limit to two or three concise sentences.

範例: People like to walk in parks because they offer pleasant scenery and fresh air. Moreover, parks have trees, flowers and wildlife such as birds, which makes walking relaxing and enjoyable.

建議: This answer is good but can be improved by reducing fillers and adding a specific reason or activity. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give concrete details about why and what you would do during the walk.

範例: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk along the seashore. I love the open space and beautiful views, and I would enjoy listening to the waves and collecting shells along the beach.

建議: Use past tense for a recent event and be specific about location and routine. Answer directly, then give a brief reason or typical time. Remove hesitations and repetitions.

範例: Lately I walked in the residential area near my home. I often take an after-dinner walk there to help digestion and clear my mind.

× Yes, I work every day and for example, I went to school and go for class and I will walk, walk to there and every day I every day after dinner I would walk around.

✓ Yes, I work every day; for example, I went to school and went to classes, and I walk there. Every day after dinner I walk around.

The original mixes past, present and future tenses inconsistently ('went' past, 'go' present, 'will walk' future, 'would walk' conditional). Use consistent present tense for habitual actions (work, walk). Change 'go for class' to 'went to classes' or 'go to classes' and simplify repeated words. Use appropriate punctuation to separate ideas. Suggestions: Use present simple for habits (I work, I walk). If referring to past events, keep them in past tense consistently.

× Yes I do I and it often happens after they out of work and I finished my homework at the same time I am able to have work after dinner.

✓ Yes, I did. It often happened after they got off work, and after I finished my homework I was able to go out after dinner.

Problems include incorrect verb forms and word order. 'Do' should match past 'did' for 'Did you often...?' The phrase 'they out of work' lacks a verb; use 'they got off work'. 'I finished' is past; match sequence of events with past tense. 'Able to have work' is incorrect—use 'able to go out' or 'able to have time'. Suggestions: Match tense to question (past), use correct phrasal verbs ('get off work'), and choose appropriate verbs ('go out' for leaving home).

× I think it's because the in the parks we can appreciate the scenery and there are so many vegetations and the plants and also there are many birds or some pets and it's always very.

✓ I think it's because in parks we can appreciate the scenery; there is a lot of vegetation and many plants. Also, there are many birds and sometimes pets, and it's always pleasant.

Errors: unnecessary definite article 'the in the parks'; 'vegetations' is uncountable and should be 'vegetation' or 'a lot of vegetation'; incomplete sentence ending 'it's always very' needs an adjective (e.g., 'pleasant'). Use 'in parks' for general statements. Correct article and noun usage. Suggestions: Use 'in parks' for generalization, treat 'vegetation' as uncountable, and complete predicates with appropriate adjectives.

× If possible, I would like to take a long walk on the seashore. Uh, I love sea and I think it's very spacious and uh, the scenery is very beautiful. I enjoy it.

✓ If possible, I would like to take a long walk along the seashore. I love the sea; I think it's very expansive, and the scenery is beautiful. I would enjoy it.

Minor issues: 'on the seashore' is acceptable but 'along the seashore' is more natural. 'I love sea' needs an article: 'the sea'. 'It's very spacious' is awkward for sea; 'expansive' or 'spacious' can be used but 'expansive' fits better. 'I enjoy it' should be conditional 'I would enjoy it' to match 'would like'. Suggestions: Use articles with singular nouns ('the sea'), choose more natural adjectives for landscape, and keep conditional mood consistent.

× Just near my home in my residential areas. After dinner if I ate too much I will walk walk the take a walk at next my home. Just a moment.

✓ Just near my home in my residential area. After dinner, if I eat too much I will take a walk near my home.

Sentence fragments and mixed tenses: 'Just near my home in my residential areas' should be 'in my residential area' (singular). 'After dinner if I ate too much I will' mixes past 'ate' with future 'will'; use present 'eat' with 'will' for real future conditional. Remove repeated words and correct word order 'take a walk near my home'. Suggestions: Use consistent tense in conditional sentences (If I eat... I will...), avoid repetition, and use singular 'area' when referring to one's neighborhood.