走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: ปรับไวยากรณ์และโครงสร้างประโยคให้ชัดเจน พยายามตอบตรงคำถามด้วยประโยคหัวข้อแล้วตามด้วยรายละเอียดสั้นๆ ใช้คำเชื่อมเมื่อจำเป็น เช่น เพราะ (because) หรือ ดังนั้น (so) และหลีกเลี่ยงความซ้ำซ้อน ตัวอย่างที่ควรแก้: "I love walking along my day" → "I walk a lot during the day" และ "my job have to work or to another department" → อธิบายสาเหตุอย่างชัดเจน เช่น เพราะต้องไปพบลูกค้าหรือย้ายระหว่างแผนก

範例: Yes, I walk a lot. I usually walk during the day because my job requires me to move between different departments, so I often go on short walks between meetings.

建議: แก้ไวยากรณ์รูปอดีต (use past tense) และลบคำพูดเติมที่ไม่จำเป็น เช่น "uh" เริ่มด้วยประโยคหัวข้อแล้วให้รายละเอียดเพิ่ม เช่น ความถี่และความรู้สึก ใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อความลื่นไหล เช่น "because" หรือ "so"

範例: Yes, I often walked when I was a child. I had to walk to school every weekday, so I grew to enjoy walking and it became a habit.

建議: ปรับไวยากรณ์และใช้คำศัพท์ที่เหมาะสม เช่น "make" → "makes" และ "refresh atmosphere" → "refreshed feeling" ตอบเป็นประโยคเต็มอย่างน้อยหนึ่งประโยคหัวข้อ แล้วตามด้วยเหตุผลที่ชัดเจนและตัวอย่างสั้นๆ ใช้คำเชื่อมเช่น "because" และ "and"

範例: People like walking in parks because it makes them feel more energetic and relaxed. The clean surroundings and fresh air help them clear their minds and exercise at the same time.

建議: แก้ความไม่ชัดเจนและไวยากรณ์ ควรใช้รูปเงื่อนไขที่ถูกต้อง (If I had the chance) และคำศัพท์ที่เหมาะสม ("take a long walk", "seaside", "scenery") ลดคำเติมเสียงและจัดระเบียบความคิดเป็นประโยคหัวข้อแล้วตามด้วยเหตุผลหรือภาพประกอบที่ชัดเจน

範例: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk along a beach near Bangkok or on a scenic coastal path. The beautiful view and calming waves would make me feel happy and relaxed.

建議: ใช้อดีตกาลเมื่อพูดถึงเหตุการณ์ล่าสุดและแก้ประโยคที่ไม่สมบูรณ์ เริ่มด้วยประโยคหัวข้อแล้วตามด้วยรายละเอียดเช่นใครไปด้วย ทำไมถึงเลือกที่นั้น และความถี่ของการไป พูดให้ชัดเจนว่าพูดถึงสถานที่ใดและลบคำที่ไม่เกี่ยวข้อง

範例: Recently, I went for a walk in a nearby park with my family. We enjoy walking there because it's close to our house, convenient, and a friendly place where we often meet neighbours.

× Absolutely, I love walking along my day because my job have to work or to another department.

✓ Absolutely, I love walking during my day because my job requires me to work in different departments.

The verb must agree with the singular subject 'my job'; use 'requires' (third person singular). 'Along my day' is unnatural; use 'during my day'. Also 'have to work or to another department' is incorrect; use 'requires me to work in different departments' to express the intended meaning. Suggestion: Practice matching subjects with correct verb forms and use natural prepositional phrases like 'during my day' or 'throughout the day'.

× When I was a kid, I have to walk, uh, to go to schools. It's uh, every weekdays. So I love of walking.

✓ When I was a kid, I had to walk to go to school. It was every weekday. So I loved walking.

The sentence refers to past habits, so use past tense 'had to' instead of present 'have to'. 'To schools' should be singular 'to school' for the general idea of attending school. 'Every weekdays' is plural mismatch; use 'every weekday' or 'on weekdays'. 'So I love of walking' is ungrammatical; in past context use 'I loved walking' and omit 'of'. Suggestion: Use past tense for past routines and remember fixed expressions: 'go to school', 'every weekday'.

× Because it make them feel more energetic. It's a great have a clean surrounding around a park. Walking at this place make people have a refresh atmosphere.

✓ Because it makes them feel more energetic. Parks have clean surroundings. Walking in a park gives people a refreshed feeling.

Pronoun 'it' refers to general activity but the verb needs third person singular 'makes'. 'It's a great have a clean surrounding around a park' mixes structures; change to 'Parks have clean surroundings' or 'It is great to have a clean surrounding'. 'Walking at this place make people have a refresh atmosphere' has subject-verb agreement and word choice issues: use 'Walking in a park gives people a refreshed feeling'. Suggestion: Ensure verb agrees with its pronoun and choose natural collocations: 'make someone feel', 'clean surroundings', 'give a refreshed feeling'.

× If you have, if I have a chance, I will take a long walking at the beach near Bangkok or maybe a Shambree because it's have a beautiful view along the biz. Maybe it's made me feel happy and uh, make the wish.

✓ If I had the chance, I would take a long walk on the beach near Bangkok or maybe at Samui because it has a beautiful view along the bay. It would make me feel happy and fulfilled.

Mixed conditional forms: question asks about hypothetical preference, so use the second conditional 'If I had... I would...'. 'Take a long walking' should be 'take a long walk'. 'Beach near Bangkok or maybe a Shambree' unclear — 'Samui' or similar; I used 'Samui' and 'bay' instead of 'biz'. 'It's have' incorrect subject-verb agreement; use 'it has'. 'Maybe it's made me feel happy and uh, make the wish' is awkward; use 'It would make me feel happy and fulfilled'. Suggestion: Practice conditional forms (if + past, would + base) and use correct noun forms: 'a long walk'.

× There are probably park near my house. My family and I enjoy walking at this place because it's easy to go there and it's have an A no we know each other along the person.

✓ There is probably a park near my house. My family and I enjoy walking there because it is easy to get to and we know the other people there.

Use singular 'There is' with 'a park'. Add article 'a' before 'park'. 'Walking at this place' is awkward; 'walking there' is natural. 'It's have an A no we know each other along the person' is unclear and ungrammatical: change to 'we know the other people there'. Also use 'easy to get to' for accessibility. Suggestion: Use correct existential 'There is/are' with matching number, include articles, and use simple prepositions like 'there' and 'get to'.