走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one brief reason and an example. Avoid repeating the same idea. Use correct grammar (e.g., 'I rarely walk' not 'I seldom walk' twice; 'busy schedule' singular).

範例: I enjoy walking, but I rarely walk these days because of my busy schedule. For example, I usually work late and don’t have time to go out for a walk in the evening.

建議: Use past tense consistently and avoid awkward phrasing. Begin with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then add a specific detail or memory and one reason. Use linking words (for example, because, and).

範例: Yes, I often went for walks when I was a child because I loved exploring with my friends. For example, we would walk to the nearby park after school to play and stay active.

建議: Make the response more precise and grammatically correct. State one or two clear reasons and support with a brief example or reference. Avoid vague phrases like 'it's good to.'

範例: People like walking in parks mainly because it is pleasant and relaxing, and it helps them stay healthy. For example, a park’s fresh air and green space make exercise more enjoyable, and studies show regular walking improves fitness.

建議: Answer directly with a complete sentence and avoid sentence fragments. Use conditional past structure correctly and give a clear reason and who you would go with. Repair grammar and finish ideas.

範例: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk by hiking up a mountain because I enjoy the fresh air and the views. I would go with a close friend or family member so we could share the experience.

建議: Be direct and use correct tense: the question asks about recent past, so use past simple or present perfect. Keep it concise and give a brief reason and a possible plan. Avoid repeating 'as' and improve word choice (e.g., 'marital duties' → 'family responsibilities').

範例: I haven’t been on a walk recently because my family and work responsibilities have kept me very busy. If I find time next weekend, I plan to go to the park for an hour to relax.

× I love to walk, however, I seldom walk nowadays because of my busy schedules.

✓ I love to walk; however, I seldom walk nowadays because of my busy schedule.

'Schedules' is plural but context implies a single overall timetable or busy life, so 'schedule' is more natural. Also replace comma splice with semicolon to join independent clauses correctly. Suggested improvement: use 'schedule' for general busy life and join clauses properly.

× I seldom find time to be able to walk around as my exercise.

✓ I seldom find time to walk around for exercise.

Use the base form 'to walk' after 'find time to'. 'To be able to walk' is wordy and awkward. Also 'for exercise' is the correct phrase. Simplify and use infinitive after 'find time'.

× I often go outside to have a walk when I was a child because I love walking especially with my friends.

✓ I often went outside to have a walk when I was a child because I loved walking, especially with my friends.

Mixes present tense 'go'/'love' with past time marker 'when I was a child'. Move verbs to past tense 'went' and 'loved' for consistency. Add comma before 'especially'.

× I find it enjoyable the same time it serves keeps me healthy.

✓ I found it enjoyable, and at the same time it kept me healthy.

Original is ungrammatical and tense-inconsistent. Use past tense 'found' and 'kept' to match childhood context, add conjunction 'and' and phrase 'at the same time' for clarity.

× I believe people like to walk in parks because they find it enjoyable as well as many people wants to be healthy.

✓ I believe people like to walk in parks because they find it enjoyable and many people want to be healthy.

Redundant 'as well as' followed by plural subject requires plural verb 'want'. Use 'and' to connect clauses and correct verb form 'want' for plural 'people'.

× As per research, walking is considered as one of the best exercise and it's good to.

✓ According to research, walking is considered one of the best exercises, and it is good for you.

Use 'according to' instead of 'as per'. Remove unnecessary 'as' after 'considered'. 'Exercise' should be plural 'exercises' in this usage. Finish clause with 'good for you' rather than 'good to'.

× I like to take a long walk if I had a chance, like in climbing mountains.

✓ I would like to take a long walk if I had the chance, for example climbing mountains.

Conditional sentence about hypothetical situation requires 'would like' and 'if I had the chance' is correct; 'like in climbing mountains' is awkward — use 'for example' or 'such as' and maintain verb forms.

× Seeing beautiful views at the top.

✓ I would enjoy seeing the beautiful views at the top.

Original is a fragment without a main verb. Turn it into a full sentence with subject and verb 'I would enjoy seeing' to express intention clearly.

× I'm spending it with my.

✓ I would spend it with my family.

Original is incomplete and ends with possessive 'my' lacking a noun. Use 'my family' and correct tense 'would spend' to match conditional mood.

× No, I don't have a chance to go for a walk lately because of marriage duties and responsibilities as an employee as well as as a father to my family.

✓ No, I haven't had a chance to go for a walk lately because of marriage duties and responsibilities as an employee and as a father to my family.

Use present perfect 'haven't had' with 'lately' to indicate recent time. Remove duplicate 'as' and keep parallel structure 'as an employee and as a father'.

× But if I can find a time, I love to go for walking.

✓ But if I can find time, I would love to go for a walk.

After 'go' the noun 'a walk' is required rather than 'walking' here. Also conditional 'if I can find time' implies future possibility — 'would love' fits politely. Remove extra article before 'time'.