走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and directly answer the question, using correct grammar and clear vocabulary. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No + brief reason), then add one or two supporting details with linking words. Avoid repetitions and incorrect collocations (e.g., 'work a lot' vs 'walk a lot'; 'take transportation' → 'use public transport').

範例: Yes, I walk a lot. I usually walk from the bus stop to my office every day, which takes about twenty minutes. Because I commute daily, walking has become part of my routine.

建議: Give a clear past-tense answer with one or two specific details. Use correct verbs and avoid unclear words. Start with 'Yes, when I was a child...' then add a specific activity and a reason or feeling. Use linking words like 'and' or 'so'.

範例: Yes, when I was a child my parents often took me to the park. We would play games on the grass and sometimes visit the nearby night market to buy snacks.

建議: Provide a clear opinion and support it with specific reasons. Use linking phrases such as 'because', 'for example', or 'as a result'. Avoid vague or repetitive phrases and ensure correct collocations (e.g., 'relieve stress', 'clear their minds').

範例: I think people walk in parks because it helps them relieve stress. For example, fresh air and green surroundings make it easier to relax, and walking can clear the mind after a busy day.

建議: Answer conditionally with a clear structure: 'If I had the chance, I would... because...'. Be specific about the location and give one or two concise reasons. Avoid filler words and repetition.

範例: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in the Japanese mountains because I enjoy hiking. I would like to spend several days climbing and enjoying the scenery to relax and stay fit.

建議: Give a specific recent example in the past tense. Begin with a clear past-tense sentence about where you walked recently, then add one detail about when or why. Avoid unclear phrases and ensure grammar is correct.

範例: Recently I walked from my home to the bus stop on my way to work. The walk takes about ten minutes and I usually do it every weekday.

× Yes, I work a lot every day because I need to take the transportation and go to go to work, so I always work for a long distance every day.

✓ Yes, I work a lot every day because I need to take public transportation to get to work, so I have a long commute every day.

Multiple issues: incorrect wording and awkward verb forms. 'take the transportation' is not natural; use 'take public transportation'. 'go to go to work' repeats 'go'; replace with 'get to work'. 'work for a long distance' is incorrect; use 'have a long commute'. Maintain simple present tense for habitual actions. Suggestion: simplify phrases and use collocations like 'take public transportation' and 'have a long commute'. Grammar Problem Type ID: 6

× Yes, when I was young my parents liked to took me attack me to the park and we like to relevance in the in the night market.

✓ Yes, when I was young my parents liked to take me to the park and we liked to visit the night market.

Errors: incorrect past tense and wrong verbs. 'liked to took' mixes present 'liked' with past 'took'; after 'liked to' use base verb 'take'. 'attack me' is incorrect word choice; likely 'take me'. 'we like to relevance' is ungrammatical; intended meaning is 'we liked to visit'. Keep past simple for habitual past actions. Suggestion: use 'liked to take' and 'liked to visit'. Grammar Problem Type ID: 5

× In my view, I seen because they can realize their stress when they're working in the in the park and they can enjoy learn the feelings and the clean clean their mind when they when they're working around in the park.

✓ In my view, I think they relieve stress when they are working, because being in the park helps them relax and clear their minds.

Multiple problems: wrong verb form 'seen' instead of 'think' or 'I have seen'; awkward phrasing 'realize their stress' — use 'relieve stress'. 'enjoy learn the feelings' is incorrect; use 'helps them relax' or 'enjoy being there'. 'clean clean their mind' should be 'clear their minds'. Use present simple for general opinions. Suggestion: use clear verbs like 'relieve', 'relax', 'clear', and avoid repetition. Grammar Problem Type ID: 6

× Well, if I have chance, I would like to go to the Japanese mountain, uh, because I like to go climbing and I hope I can have a long time to climb in the mountain and it make me I really want to go there in the future.

✓ Well, if I had the chance, I would like to go to the mountains in Japan because I enjoy climbing and hope to spend a long time climbing there; I really want to go in the future.

Errors: conditional mismatch—use past ('if I had the chance') with 'would like'. 'the Japanese mountain' is unnatural; use 'the mountains in Japan' or 'a mountain in Japan'. 'I like to go climbing' is acceptable but 'enjoy climbing' is smoother. 'it make me I really want' is ungrammatical; simplify to 'I really want to go'. Suggestion: use correct second conditional and smoother noun phrases. Grammar Problem Type ID: 7

× As I say, I worked for a long distance. Every weekday I often go to my office, so I need to have a pack of. I need to type a word to my first stop and go to the my office. So I usually go there.

✓ As I said, I work a long distance away. Every weekday I go to my office, so I need to take a bus. I get off at my first stop and then go to my office. So I usually go there.

Issues: tense inconsistency—'As I say' should be 'As I said' for referring back to earlier; 'I worked' is wrong tense; use 'I work' for current routine. 'I need to have a pack of' is meaningless—likely 'take a bus'. 'I need to type a word to my first stop' is incorrect; likely 'get off at my first stop'. 'go to the my office' has extra article 'the'. Use present simple for routines. Suggestion: maintain consistent tense, use clear verbs for commuting like 'take a bus' and 'get off at'. Grammar Problem Type ID: 6