走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Говорите более грамотно и гладко: используйте правильные времена и предлоги, избегайте повтора «go by foot» (лучше «walk») и лишних междометий. Дайте одно‑два конкретных преимущества (например, время в дороге, здоровье) и свяжите их связками (because, so). Ограничьте ответ 2–3 предложениями и избегайте слов-паразитов.

範例: Yes, I walk a lot because I usually walk to university. I prefer walking to taking buses because it helps me relax and gives me a little daily exercise.

建議: Используйте правильные времена и формы глаголов (прошедшее: "did"/"went"). Уберите ненужные звуки и сделайте ответ более точным: назовите место и опишите, что вы делали там. Используйте связки (when, where, and) для плавности. Не более 3 предложений.

範例: Yes, I often went for walks with my mother when I was a child. We used to stroll along Lenina Street and visit a nearby national park with many trees and playgrounds.

建議: Сформулируйте мысль чётко: начните с общей причины, затем приведите конкретные детали. Исправьте грамматику ("can go for a walk"), используйте связки (for example, because, so) и дайте одно-два конкретных примера пользы прогулок в парках.

範例: People like walking in parks because it helps them relax and reduce stress. For example, fresh air and greenery can calm your mind, and walking with a friend can improve your mood.

建議: Используйте правильные артикли и предлоги ("a rainy forest", "in Norway"). Будьте конкретны: опишите, почему этот выбор вам нравится (пейзаж, погода, тишина). Ограничьте до 2–3 предложений и применяйте связки (because, so that).

範例: I would like to take a long walk in a rainy forest in Norway because I love the peaceful atmosphere and the sound of rain among the trees. It would be very relaxing after a long walk.

建議: Используйте правильное время (прошедшее: "I went"), исправьте лексику и порядок слов. Уберите фрагментированные фразы и опишите одно-два конкретных наблюдения (что вы увидели, почему понравилось). Сформулируйте 2–3 связных предложения без лишних слов-паразитов.

範例: I recently went for a walk to the city center called Mega. I enjoyed views of Astana's modern buildings and the clean, tree-lined streets.

× Yes, I do because I go to my university by foot.

✓ Yes, I do because I go to my university on foot.

Use of preposition: 'by foot' is incorrect in English; the correct phrase is 'on foot'. Replace 'by' with 'on' to form the idiom 'on foot'.

× I don't like buses because when I go by foot I can be calm and relax, uh, feel comfort and maybe do some tiny exercise.

✓ I don't like buses because when I go on foot I can be calm and relaxed, feel comfortable and maybe do some light exercise.

Multiple issues: 'by foot' should be 'on foot' (preposition). 'relax' needs past participle 'relaxed' or adjective to describe state. 'feel comfort' is incorrect; use adjective 'comfortable' after 'feel'. 'tiny exercise' sounds unnatural; use 'light exercise'.

× Of course I do. Uh, when I was a child, my mom and I always going for work to our walking street named Lenina where we can go to our National Park, uh, with lot of trees and, uh.

✓ Of course I did. When I was a child, my mom and I always went for walks to our walking street called Lenina, where we could go to our National Park with a lot of trees.

Tense and verb form: the question asked about past habits so use past tense 'did' instead of 'do'. 'always going' is incorrect; use past habitual 'always went' or 'always used to go'. 'for work' is wrong contextually; use 'for walks'. 'named' can be 'called'. 'we can' should be past ability 'we could'. Add 'a' in 'a lot of trees'.

× I think it's like the basic thing, if you feel nervous or angry you just can going for work alone or with someone to become calm.

✓ I think it's a basic thing: if you feel nervous or angry, you can just go for a walk alone or with someone to become calm.

Incorrect gerund after modal: after 'can' use base verb 'go', not 'going'. 'for work' is wrong; use 'for a walk'. Word order: 'just can going' -> 'can just go'. Also use 'a basic thing' or better 'a basic method'.

× I'd like to pick an rainy forest, maybe in the Norway, with a lovely atmosphere where I can be relaxed and calm after a long distance of walking.

✓ I'd like to choose a rainy forest, maybe in Norway, with a lovely atmosphere where I can relax and feel calm after a long walk.

Articles and word choice: 'an rainy' should be 'a rainy' (vowel sound rule) but 'choose' fits better than 'pick'. 'in the Norway' should be 'in Norway' (no article with country names). 'be relaxed and calm' better as 'relax and feel calm'. 'a long distance of walking' is unnatural; use 'a long walk'.

× I'll go for work to the city center named Mega. I can enjoy the view of our city Astana with a beautiful buildings. Enter clean streets.

✓ I went for a walk to the city centre called Mega recently. I could enjoy the view of our city, Astana, with beautiful buildings and clean streets.

Context: question asked 'Where did you go for a walk lately?' so use past tense. 'I'll go' (future) is incorrect; use past 'I went' or 'I went recently'. 'for work' wrong; use 'for a walk'. 'city center' spelling 'centre' acceptable but keep consistent. 'a beautiful buildings' wrong article and number; use 'beautiful buildings' or 'beautiful building'. 'Enter clean streets' is fragment; combine into 'and clean streets'.