走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise, reduce hesitations and correct small errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Also use accurate collocations (e.g. “a short walk before bed” not “before the bed”) and avoid filler sounds.

範例: Yes, I walk quite often, especially in the mornings. For example, I take a 30-minute walk each morning to energize myself, and I also do a short walk before bed because it helps me relax and sleep better.

建議: Answer directly with a clear past-tense topic sentence and give one or two specific reasons. Avoid repetitions and hesitations. Use correct grammar (e.g. “When I was a child, I did not like walking” and “I was afraid of traffic”).

範例: No, I did not often go for walks when I was a child because I was afraid of traffic on the roads. As a result, my parents usually took me to safe places like parks instead of letting me walk alone.

建議: Give a clear general reason, then add a specific detail or example linked with a connecting word. Reduce hesitations and improve phrasing (e.g. “social meeting place” → “social gathering” or “relaxing environment”).

範例: People often walk in parks because parks offer a relaxing environment and a chance to meet others. For example, families, joggers and elderly people can all socialise and exercise there, which makes parks popular for walks.

建議: Start with a direct topic sentence naming the place, then give 1–2 specific reasons and a linking word. Avoid tense errors and long hesitations. Use descriptive vocabulary (e.g. “scenic views”, “lush greenery”, “quiet trails”).

範例: I would like to take a long walk in Kalamakudi because it has scenic views and lush greenery. I used to walk there as a teenager, especially in the evenings, and I enjoyed the quiet trails and fresh air.

建議: Answer directly in past tense for a recent action, then add one specific detail and a linking word. Correct collocations (e.g. “go for a walk”, “short walk”) and avoid filler words. Keep it within 1–3 sentences.

範例: Lately I went for a walk along the beach promenade in the evening. I prefer short walks at night, usually just 20 minutes before bed because they help me unwind.

× I love walking a lot, especially in the mornings and also uh, I tried to walk uh, before the bed, uh, a short uh, walk which gives me more refreshing and umm, keeps the body more relaxed.

✓ I love walking a lot, especially in the mornings, and I try to walk a short time before bed, which refreshes me and keeps my body more relaxed.

The original mixes past tense 'tried' with a general habit and uses awkward forms 'before the bed' and 'gives me more refreshing.' Use the present simple 'try' for habitual actions. Use 'before bed' (no article) and 'refreshes me' (correct verb form) and 'keeps my body more relaxed' for clarity and correct participle usage. Grammar problem type ID: 10

× When I was child, I'm so, uh, dislike to go for walks too much because I'm, uh, I am not the, I'm not like walking, uh, on the roads especially I am so afraid of the vehicles, the traffic, uh, so I.

✓ When I was a child, I disliked going for walks because I did not like walking on roads; I was very afraid of vehicles and traffic.

Missing article 'a' before 'child' and incorrect mixing of present 'I'm' with past meaning. Use past simple 'disliked' for past habit and gerund 'going.' Pronoun and verb forms corrected for coherence. Remove redundant fillers and finish the sentence logically. Grammar problem type ID: 12

× People go often walking or in parks because, uh, it is like, more like a social gathering, uh, place, uh, where different kinds of age groups of people are, uh, uh, comes, come for a.

✓ People often walk in parks because they are social gathering places where people of different age groups come together.

Word order 'go often walking' is incorrect; use 'often walk.' 'Different kinds of age groups of people' is redundant; simplify to 'people of different age groups.' Correct verb 'come' not 'comes.' Ensure plural agreement with 'places.' This fixes quantifier and quantity phrasing. Grammar problem type ID: 14

× Umm, there is a place called Kalamakudi which I really love to walk there, especially in the evenings.

✓ Umm, there is a place called Kalamakudi where I really love to walk, especially in the evenings.

Using 'which...there' is redundant and wrong preposition; use relative adverb 'where' instead of 'which...there.' This corrects the prepositional/reference structure. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× Umm, I used to walk there when I was, uh, a teenage, uh, the, because of its, uh, view, the greenery, the Lex, the.

✓ I used to walk there when I was a teenager because of its views and greenery.

Use noun 'teenager' not adjective 'teenage.' 'Used to' correctly indicates past habit; simplify 'view' to plural 'views.' Remove unclear word 'Lex.' This corrects tense usage and word choice. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× Uh, on the beach side or uh, uh, or walkways. Uh, I prefer go for walks, especially during the, uh, night time.

✓ I walk on the beach or on walkways. I prefer to go for walks, especially at night.

Use 'on the beach' or 'on walkways.' 'Prefer go' is missing 'to' before infinitive: 'prefer to go.' Use 'at night' rather than 'during the night time.' Fixes preposition and infinitive usage. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× Uh, I always prefer short work, uh, right before the bed. Uh, I don't like too much time for work.

✓ I always prefer a short walk right before bed. I don't like walking for too long.

'Work' is a wrong word; should be 'walk.' Add article 'a' before 'short walk.' Use 'before bed' (no 'the') and change 'too much time for work' to 'walking for too long' to convey duration correctly and use correct -ing form after 'like.' Grammar problem type ID: 8}]}}oston