走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two specific supporting details using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect word order.

範例: Yes, I walk quite often. I usually walk to the nearby park every evening to relax after work, and I go with my child so we can enjoy fresh air together.

建議: Give a clear past-tense answer with a simple topic sentence, then add one or two specific details about where and how often you walked. Use past simple consistently and avoid filler words.

範例: Yes, I often went for walks when I was a child. I would cycle or walk around my neighborhood and visit the nearby park almost every day with my friends.

建議: Answer directly with a clear reason, then support it with specific benefits and a linking word. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., 'relax', 'stay fit') and avoid repetition.

範例: People like walking in parks because it helps them relax and stay healthy. For example, fresh air and green spaces reduce stress and make it easier to exercise regularly.

建議: State your preference clearly, then give specific reasons using linking words. Use correct nouns (e.g., 'national park', 'wildlife', 'plants') and smoother sentence structure.

範例: If I had the chance, I would walk in a national park or a forest because being surrounded by nature helps me relax and improves my health, and I would enjoy spotting wildlife and different plants.

建議: Use correct past tense and concise sentences: state when and where you went, how long you walked, and one specific detail about the experience. Avoid repetition.

範例: Last weekend I went to the nearby park and walked for about 15 minutes with my family. I felt relaxed and enjoyed watching other families and children playing.

× Guess I walk that I can a lot that I go to the park for walking in order to rest after a long day.

✓ I guess I walk a lot; I go to the park to walk and rest after a long day.

The original sentence uses incorrect tense forms and word order. Use 'I guess' to indicate opinion (present tense), 'I walk a lot' for habitual action, and 'I go to the park to walk and rest' for purpose. Combine clauses clearly and remove redundant words. Use simple present for habitual actions and 'to' + base verb for purpose.

× This is it's a vital way to clear my mind and relax me.

✓ It is a vital way to clear my mind and relax me.

The phrase 'This is it's' mixes two pronouns incorrectly. Use a single subject 'It is' or 'This is'. Also 'relax me' is acceptable but 'help me relax' is more natural. Keep pronouns consistent and avoid repetition.

× So I go with my child every day.

✓ So I go with my child every day.

The original sentence is acceptable but keep simple present for habitual action. No change needed other than confirming tense consistency with surrounding sentences.

× I used to go for a walk every day that I when I was a child that I remember I go to the nearby park in or maybe around or maybe sport or maybe riding with my bicycle around with my neighborhood.

✓ I used to go for a walk every day when I was a child. I remember going to the nearby park or riding my bicycle around the neighborhood.

The original mixes tenses and has redundant filler words. Use 'used to' + base verb for habitual past actions. Use the gerund 'going' after 'remember' for past recollection. Remove unnecessary repetitions and choose concise, natural phrasing.

× This is a great way to.

✓ This is a great way to relax and have fun.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks an object or verb phrase after 'to'. Complete the infinitive phrase with appropriate verbs to convey the intended meaning.

× Of course, because that it is the the the people think this great way to join them as well as to become unwind and become fit and healthy.

✓ Of course, because people think it is a great way to relax and stay fit and healthy.

The original repeats words and misplaces pronouns ('that it is the the the people think'). Use 'people think it is' and choose correct verb forms: 'relax' rather than 'become unwind'. Use parallel structure 'stay fit and healthy'.

× This is the way the working help them to stay fit, so they prefer to go to the.

✓ This is the way working helps them stay fit, so they prefer to go there.

The phrase needs subject-verb agreement: 'working helps' (singular noun 'working' or 'exercise' helps). 'go to the' is incomplete; use 'go there' or 'go to the park'. Ensure verb agreement and complete the destination.

× If I could, if I could choice and then anywhere I would like to do take a walk in the international park or maybe forests.

✓ If I could choose anywhere, I would like to take a walk in an international park or maybe a forest.

Use 'choose' (verb) not 'choice' (noun). The conditional 'If I could choose anywhere, I would ...' is the correct structure. Use articles 'an international park' and 'a forest'. Remove extra words and correct word order.

× Being surrounded by nature, it's great way to get healthy and relax and well as it's it's fantastic way to spotting enamel or maybe a plant.

✓ Being surrounded by nature is a great way to get healthy and relax, and it is also a fantastic way to spot animals or plants.

The sentence misuses pronouns and has typos: 'it's great way' needs an article ('a great way'), 'it's it's' duplicated, and 'spotting enamel' is incorrect ('animals' and 'plants' intended). Use parallel clauses and correct verb forms: 'to spot animals or plants'.

× In the weekend last last weekend I go to the nearby park, I get for a walk about for about 15 minutes with my family.

✓ Last weekend I went to the nearby park; I went for a walk of about 15 minutes with my family.

Use simple past 'went' for completed actions in the past. 'In the weekend' is incorrect; use 'Last weekend'. Correct 'go' to 'went' and use 'went for a walk' or 'took a walk'.

× I get relaxed and I enjoy really enjoy when watching the families with their children playing as well as.

✓ I felt relaxed and really enjoyed watching families with their children playing.

Because the event occurred in the past ('last weekend'), use past tense: 'felt relaxed' and 'enjoyed'. Remove duplicate 'enjoy' and complete the sentence by removing trailing 'as well as'.