走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct minor grammar, and avoid redundancy. Mention a brief reason and a linking word. For example, say you rarely walk, give one clear reason (climate), and then state your usual alternatives.

範例: Not really. I rarely walk because Guangzhou is hot and humid, so I usually take public transport or ride a scooter to get around.

建議: Clarify vocabulary and grammar: use ‘walk’ instead of ‘work’, use past tense consistently, and add a linking phrase to explain habit. Give a specific detail (who with or what route).

範例: Yes, I often went for walks as a child because we lived near the mountains. For instance, my family and I would walk together after dinner every day, and it soon became a habit.

建議: Organize your answer: give a clear topic sentence then two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid vague words like 'pockets of stuff' and reduce filler words. Use precise expressions such as 'facilities' and 'no traffic'.

範例: People like walking in parks because they are safe and relaxing. For example, parks have good facilities for all ages, and people do not need to worry about traffic, so they can walk peacefully.

建議: Use a clear location phrase and correct grammar (e.g. 'around my house' or 'near my hometown'). Give one concrete image or reason and use linking words. Avoid plural mistakes and be concise.

範例: I'd like to take a long walk near my childhood home because the area is full of beautiful natural scenery, and walking there would remind me of my childhood.

建議: Make the answer direct and grammatical: state when and where, give a clear reason, and avoid unclear phrases like 'enjoy period'. Keep it to two sentences max and use linking words if needed.

範例: Lately I only took a short walk to the bus station every morning because it's the easiest route. I enjoy that short walk as a chance to get fresh air before work.

× I prefer to take in transportation or ride scooter to my destinations.

✓ I prefer to take public transportation or ride a scooter to my destinations.

Replace 'take in transportation' with 'take public transportation' for correct collocation; add article 'a' before 'scooter'. Use 'public transportation' to mean buses/trains; 'ride a scooter' is standard.

× Yes, I love work when I was a child because we lived around the mountains so we do enjoy having work after dinner every day. It became a habit for.

✓ Yes, I loved working when I was a child because we lived near the mountains, so we enjoyed having a walk after dinner every day. It became a habit for us.

Tense consistency: 'when I was a child' requires past tense 'loved'. Use gerund 'working' if meaning 'doing work' but context suggests 'walking', so use 'loved walking' or 'loved working' accordingly; changed 'around the mountains' to 'near the mountains'. 'Do enjoy' should be past 'enjoyed'. Added 'a' in 'having a walk' and completed 'for us'.

× Well, I've seen pockets of stuff and of suitable for all age. For example, umm, people don't need to umm worry about traffic situation.

✓ Well, I've seen pockets of open space that are suitable for all ages. For example, people don't need to worry about traffic.

Clarity and correct adjective/noun forms: 'pockets of stuff' is vague; 'open space' fits parks. 'of suitable for all age' incorrect structure—use 'suitable for all ages'. Omit extra 'umm's and 'traffic situation' simplify to 'traffic'.

× I would like to take a long walk along with my house because they're all a beautiful nature scenery and it brings me back to my childhood.

✓ I would like to take a long walk near my house because there is beautiful natural scenery and it reminds me of my childhood.

Use 'near my house' not 'along with my house'. 'They're all a beautiful nature scenery' incorrect—use 'there is beautiful natural scenery'. 'Brings me back to my childhood' is acceptable but 'reminds me of my childhood' is more natural.

× Recently I only went a small walk to the bus station because of is the nearest way to get the station and I really enjoy period every morning.

✓ Recently I only went for a short walk to the bus station because it is the nearest way to get there, and I really enjoy it every morning.

Use 'went for a short walk' (correct collocation). 'Because of is the nearest way' is ungrammatical—use 'because it is the nearest way to get there'. Maintain tense: 'recently I only went' past fits but 'I really enjoy it every morning' present simple is fine for habitual enjoyment; ensure pronoun 'it' refers to the walk.