走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct small grammar issues; start with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and use linking words for contrast. Also, use consistent number expressions and articles.

範例: Yes, I walk a lot because my job involves being on my feet all day. On busy days I walk about 15,000 to 20,000 steps, whereas on slower days I walk around 5,000 steps.

建議: Use past-tense consistently and avoid mixing present. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then add specific details with linking words (e.g., "also" or "often") and correct verb forms.

範例: Yes, I often went for walks as a child because there was a park near our home. My mother used to take me there at about 4 or 5 PM, and sometimes I played there with friends, which made those afternoons very memorable.

建議: Make the answer more natural and correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, remove stray words). Start with a clear opinion, then give two specific reasons using linking words like "because" and "for example."

範例: People like walking in parks because it is an easy form of exercise that helps them stay active without intense workouts. Also, parks offer pleasant scenery and plenty of space, which makes walking more relaxing and enjoyable.

建議: Provide a clear topic sentence then expand with specific details and a linking phrase. Mention particular types of scenery or locations to show vocabulary range.

範例: I would like to take a long walk in the countryside, far from the city. For example, a coastal path or a quiet mountain trail with scenic views and few people would be ideal.

建議: Keep tense consistent and start with a direct response. Use linking words like "but" appropriately and give a concise reason with a specific detail about the place.

範例: I haven't had time to walk recently, but when I do I go to a nearby open field. People often run or jog there, but I prefer it because the quiet atmosphere helps me clear my mind.

× During busy days I can walk up to 15 to 20,000 steps, while on slow days estimated is 5000 steps.

✓ During busy days I can walk up to 15,000 to 20,000 steps, while on slow days the estimate is 5,000 steps.

Numbers were formatted incorrectly and the passive phrase 'estimated is 5000 steps' is ungrammatical. Use '15,000 to 20,000' or '15 to 20 thousand' and 'the estimate is 5,000 steps' to form a correct noun phrase. Also include the definite article 'the' before 'estimate'. Suggestion: write large numbers with commas and use 'the estimate is' for clarity.

× Yes, there was a park nearby our home.

✓ Yes, there was a park near our home.

Use 'near' instead of 'nearby' when followed by a noun phrase like 'our home'. 'Nearby' is an adverb or adjective used differently; 'near' is the correct preposition here. This fixes preposition usage and improves naturalness.

× Sometimes I go there with my friends to play and it was a very fun and memorable moment for me.

✓ Sometimes I went there with my friends to play, and it was a very fun and memorable time for me.

The sentence mixes present ('I go') and past ('it was') tenses. Because the context is childhood ('When I was a child'), use past tense consistently: 'I went'. Also 'moment' is awkward here; use 'time' for experiences. Add a comma before 'and' to join clauses.

× I think walking in general is the best exercise for people who don't want to engage in strength activities but wants to maintain an A fairly active lifestyle.

✓ I think walking in general is the best exercise for people who don't want to engage in strength activities but want to maintain a fairly active lifestyle.

Subject-verb agreement and pronoun reference: 'people' is plural, so the verb should be 'want' not 'wants'. Also 'an A fairly active lifestyle' contains an incorrect article and stray capital 'A'; remove the article and capital letter to read 'a fairly active lifestyle' or simply 'fairly active lifestyle'. Suggestion: ensure verbs agree with their subjects and keep articles/capitalization consistent.

× It is best done in parks because of the view and large space.

✓ It is best done in parks because of the views and the large open spaces.

'View' and 'large space' sound unnatural in singular; plural 'views' and 'spaces' fit general statements. Add 'the' before 'large open spaces' for naturalness and include 'open' to clarify meaning. This improves noun choice and article use.

× I haven't had the time to go for a walk lately, but when I do I usually go to this open space near our house.

✓ I haven't had time to go for a walk lately, but when I do I usually go to the open space near our house.

Use 'time' without 'the' in this common expression: 'haven't had time'. 'This open space' is acceptable but 'the open space' is more natural when referring to a known place near the house. Tense and meaning remain consistent.

× People usually go there to run and jog, but for me I go there to clear my mind of some things.

✓ People usually go there to run or jog, but I go there to clear my mind of some things.

Style improvements: use 'run or jog' rather than 'run and jog' because people typically do one or the other. Remove the redundant pronoun 'for me' before 'I' to avoid repetition. This makes the sentence more concise and natural.