走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Clarifica y corrige repeticiones; usa una estructura más natural y fluida. Por ejemplo, comienza con una oración tema breve, añade un detalle específico con una palabra de enlace y evita repetir sonidos. También corrige el nombre del lugar si procede y emplea tiempos y artículos correctamente.

範例: Yes, I walk a lot. I usually walk about 10 kilometres each week, and I often go with my girlfriend, so we spend the afternoon exploring the Rambla in Montevideo.

建議: Mejora la gramática y la claridad: responde primero directamente, luego explica con detalles y conectores. Corrige tiempos verbales y la negación, y ofrece una razón concreta.

範例: No, I didn't walk much as a child. Instead, I played football and other sports, so I preferred team activities to long walks.

建議: Aclarar vocabulario y expresiones incorrectas; usa palabras más precisas y naturales. Comienza con una frase directa, luego da 1–2 razones específicas usando conectores como 'because' o 'for example'. Evita palabras confusas ('ambient', 'groaning').

範例: I think people like walking in parks because it allows them to relax and enjoy nature. For example, fresh air and greenery help reduce stress and improve mood.

建議: Corrige el tiempo condicional y mejora la fluidez: usa 'If I had the chance' y añade detalles específicos para enriquecer la respuesta. Mantén la respuesta breve y natural.

範例: If I had the chance, I would like to walk along the Great Wall of China because it's an amazing historic monument and offers stunning views of the countryside.

建議: Corrige errores de vocabulario y gramática: usa el nombre correcto 'Rambla', emplea pasado simple consistente y números con plural si necesario. Usa conectores para enlazar ideas.

範例: Recently I walked to the Rambla in Montevideo, which is about five kilometres from my home. I went with my girlfriend because she enjoys walking with me.

× I usually walk around 10 kilometers.

✓ I usually walk around 10 kilometers.

No correction needed. The sentence correctly uses the plural 'kilometers' for a quantity greater than one.

× I I often go with my girlfriend and we spend the afternoon at the Rambler in Montevideo.

✓ I often go with my girlfriend and we spend the afternoon at the Rambla in Montevideo.

There was a duplicated pronoun 'I I' and an incorrect place name 'Rambler'. Remove the duplicate and use the correct noun 'Rambla' (the waterfront promenade). Suggestion: read sentences aloud to detect accidental repetition and verify proper nouns.

× No I didn't when I was a child.

✓ No, I didn't when I was a child.

Add a comma after 'No' for clarity. The tense 'didn't' correctly indicates past negative. Suggestion: include punctuation to improve readability.

× I usually play football and other sports so I use not going to walk outside.

✓ I usually played football and other sports, so I didn't use to go for walks outside.

The student is referring to childhood habitual actions, so past habit 'used to' should be used. Original has incorrect word order and missing 'used to'. Use 'didn't use to' or 'didn't used to' (correct: 'didn't use to') to express past habits. Suggestion: for past habitual actions, use 'used to' (positive) and 'didn't use to' (negative).

× Well, I think it is because you can connect with the ambient, with the atmosphere and you can also do groaning, which is the connection with Earth.

✓ Well, I think it is because you can connect with the environment and the atmosphere, and you can also do grounding, which is the connection with the Earth.

'Ambient' is incorrect in this context; 'environment' is the correct noun. 'Do groaning' is incorrect; the intended word is 'grounding'. Also add 'the' before 'Earth'. Suggestion: choose accurate vocabulary and collocations ('connect with the environment', 'do grounding').

× If I have the chance, I would like to walk around the Chinese wall because it is a magnificent structure and really symbolic for all humanity.

✓ If I had the chance, I would like to walk along the Great Wall of China because it is a magnificent structure and very symbolic for all humanity.

A hypothetical conditional about an unreal present/future requires the past tense in the if-clause: 'If I had the chance'. Also use the conventional name 'the Great Wall of China' and 'walk along' rather than 'walk around'. 'Really symbolic' is acceptable but 'very symbolic' is more natural. Suggestion: use second conditional ('If I had..., I would...') for unlikely or hypothetical situations.

× Lately I walked to rambling Montevideo, which is around 5 kilometer from my home.

✓ Lately I walked to the Rambla in Montevideo, which is around 5 kilometers from my home.

Use the correct place name 'Rambla' and include the article 'the' before it. 'Rambling Montevideo' is incorrect. Also use plural 'kilometers' and capitalize proper nouns. Suggestion: check proper nouns and use plural for measurements greater than one.

× I went with my girlfriend, she likes walking with me.

✓ I went with my girlfriend; she likes walking with me.

This is a comma splice: two independent clauses joined by a comma. Replace the comma with a semicolon or make two sentences. Suggestion: use a period or semicolon, or add a coordinating conjunction ('and').