走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Correct grammar and be concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Fix articles, verb forms and word choice (e.g., “I have a lot of weight” → “I’m overweight”; “recommend” → “recommended”; “more healthier” → “healthier”). Avoid repeating the same idea.

範例: Yes, I walk a lot because my doctor recommended I walk 10,000 steps every day as I’m slightly overweight. For example, I use a pedometer and usually walk in the morning and evening, which has helped me feel more energetic and sleep better.

建議: Use past tense for past habits and correct grammar. Begin with a direct topic sentence (e.g., “No, I didn’t”), then briefly explain reasons with specific details and linking words. Fix subject-verb agreement and word choice (e.g., “strict parents”, “high crime rate”, “I only walked near my house”).

範例: No, I didn’t. My parents were very strict and wouldn’t let me go out alone, and we lived in a neighbourhood with a high crime rate, so I mostly just walked near our house.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence and support it with coherent reasons using linking words. Avoid unclear phrases like “grounding” without brief explanation, and correct mistakes (“by our food” → “by our feet”). Be specific about benefits (e.g., fresh air, scenery, exercise).

範例: I think people walk in parks because it’s calming and offers fresh air and nature. For example, walking on grass with bare feet (grounding) can be relaxing, and the combination of gentle exercise and greenery helps reduce stress and improve mood.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence and expand with specific imagery and reasons using linking words. Correct word choice and pronunciation-related spellings in writing (“of sore” → “of course”; “row” → “road” or “seaside”). Keep it concise and coherent.

範例: I would like to take a long walk along the beach. Walking by the sea, watching the waves and feeling the breeze would be very relaxing and help me clear my mind.

建議: Use past simple for a finished period and correct phrasing. Start with a direct answer, then give specific reasons and link them. Improve verb forms and vocabulary (“I felt tired”, “I did some housework”).

範例: I haven’t been for a walk in the past few weeks because I felt very tired and have been busy doing housework. I hope to start walking again once my schedule is less busy.

× Yes I do, that is because I have a very weight so my doctor recommend me to walk 10,000 steps every day.

✓ Yes, I do. That is because I am very overweight, so my doctor recommended that I walk 10,000 steps every day.

Errors: missing commas, incorrect article and noun phrase 'a very weight' should be 'very overweight' (adjective), verb tense and structure 'recommend me to walk' is incorrect; use 'recommended that I walk' or 'recommended I walk'. Suggestions: add commas after introductory words, use correct adjective 'overweight' without an article, and use past tense 'recommended' with a that-clause or 'recommended I walk'.

× I try it and it makes me more healthier.

✓ I try to do it and it makes me healthier.

Errors: verb pattern 'try it' is unclear—use 'try to do it' or 'try it out'; 'more healthier' is incorrect because 'healthier' already is comparative, 'more' is redundant. Suggestions: use 'try to' before verbs and avoid double comparatives.

× It makes me healthier.

✓ It makes me healthier.

This sentence is correct as written; it uses the present tense appropriately to describe a general effect. No change needed.

× No I don't 'cause I have a strict parents, I am not eligible to go anywhere without my parent and I used to live in a city with a high criminals so basically I just walking outside my house.

✓ No, I didn't, because I had strict parents. I was not allowed to go anywhere without my parents, and I used to live in a city with high crime, so basically I just walked outside my house.

Errors: tense inconsistency—question asked about childhood, so past tense required. 'I don't' -> 'I didn't'; 'a strict parents' incorrect article and number; use 'strict parents'. 'I am not eligible' wrong collocation—use 'I was not allowed'. 'my parent' -> 'my parents'. 'a city with a high criminals' should be 'a city with high crime' (uncountable). 'I just walking' missing auxiliary and wrong tense—use 'I just walked'. Suggestions: match past tense for past habits, correct noun forms, and use proper collocations like 'allowed' and 'high crime'.

× In my opinion because it is calming and when you walk in the park you can do a grounding which is healthier for you.

✓ In my opinion, it is calming, and when you walk in the park you can do grounding, which is healthier for you.

Errors: unnecessary 'because' after 'In my opinion' (causes sentence fragment), punctuation needed. 'a grounding' — 'grounding' is generally used as an uncountable noun; no article. Suggestions: remove 'because', add commas, and treat 'grounding' as uncountable.

× So when we touch grass by our food it can give us a lot of energy and it could heal our.

✓ So when we touch grass with our feet it can give us a lot of energy and it can help heal us.

Errors: 'by our food' incorrect word 'food' vs 'feet' (typo). 'it could heal our.' incomplete object—'our' needs a noun. Use 'help heal us' or 'heal our bodies'. Also mix of modal verbs: use 'can' consistently. Suggestions: correct typo to 'feet', complete the object, and keep modal usage consistent.

× I prefer to have a long walk in a row that is. Of sore the beach.

✓ I would prefer to take a long walk by the sea, of course the beach.

Errors: 'in a row that is' unclear and ungrammatical. 'Of sore' is a misspelling of 'of course'. Preposition 'in' should be 'by' or 'on' the beach. Suggestions: use 'would prefer to take a long walk' for hypothetical preference and correct spelling to 'of course' and use appropriate preposition.

× When you're walking you can see the waves come.

✓ When you walk, you can see the waves come in.

Errors: mixture of contractions and generic present—'you're walking' is acceptable but 'when you walk' is simpler. Add preposition 'in' after 'come' to complete the phrasal meaning 'waves come in'. Suggestions: use simple present for general statements and include necessary particles.

× It makes you relax.

✓ It helps you relax.

Errors: 'makes you relax' is understandable but less natural; 'helps you relax' is idiomatic. Suggestions: use 'help' + object + base verb for effects.

× I didn't go for walk in the past few weeks because I feel so tiring.

✓ I haven't gone for a walk in the past few weeks because I have been feeling very tired.

Errors: tense mismatch—'in the past few weeks' typically takes present perfect 'haven't gone'. 'go for walk' needs an article: 'go for a walk'. 'I feel so tiring' wrong use: 'tiring' describes something that causes tiredness; use 'I have been feeling very tired' or 'I feel very tired'. Suggestions: use present perfect for recent period, include articles, and use 'tired' for personal state.

× I did some jobs inside of my house so that's why.

✓ I did some work inside my house, so that's why.

Errors: 'did some jobs' is unnatural—use 'did some work' or 'did some chores'. 'inside of my house' prefer 'inside my house'. 'so that's why' is a fragment but acceptable colloquially; consider 'so that's why I didn't.' Suggestions: use natural collocations 'did some work' or 'did some household chores', and remove unnecessary 'of'.