走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答要更连贯，避免断句和语法错误。开头直接回答后用一到两个支持句说明原因，使用连接词（e.g. because, so, which）并注意时态和词汇选择（e.g. 'clearing my mind'而不是 'claim my mind'）。尽量保持在3-4个完整句子内。

範例: Yes, I walk a lot, especially in the evenings. I find walking helps clear my mind because it gives me time to think calmly. For example, after work I usually walk for thirty minutes to relax and plan the next day.

建議: 回答要用过去时并保持句子完整。先用主题句回答，再用一两句具体细节回忆（谁、何时、做什么），避免口语填充词（e.g. 'Oh', 'like') 和重复。保持连贯，可用连接词如 'when'、'because'。

範例: Yes, I often walked outside with my mother when I was a child. We would stroll to the park after school and talk about my day and school activities. Those walks are a fond memory because they brought us closer.

建議: 回答较清晰但要注意语法和大小写（不要随意大写单词），並用连接词使句子更流畅。可以补充具体细节或例子说明好处（例如新鲜空气、安静的环境、运动）。保持2-3句以内。

範例: People like walking in parks because parks offer a chance to get closer to nature, especially in big cities. In addition, parks provide a quiet escape from the daily hustle and bustle and a place to exercise or relax.

建議: 回答要更连贯並避免断断续续的句子。先直接回答，然后说明原因并给出具体细节（例如想看海景、听海浪声、放松身心）。合并短句并使用连接词如 'because'、'so'。

範例: I would like to take a long walk by the seaside if I had the chance. I enjoy the sound of the waves and the fresh sea air, and walking on the beach helps me relax and feel refreshed.

建議: 回答要用正确时态（过去式）并保持句子完整。先直接回答地点和时间，再补充一两句具体细节（同行者、做了什么、感受）。避免口头填充词如 'Well'、'Okay' 过多使用。

範例: Last weekend I went for a walk with my best friend at Beihai Park in Beijing. We walked along the river and enjoyed the sunset together in the evening, which was very relaxing.

× I especially prefer taking a walk around. Because, Wanting outside, especially at. Evening. Gives me the opportunity to claim my mind and figure things through.

✓ I especially prefer taking a walk around in the evening because being outside gives me the opportunity to clear my mind and think things through.

句子断裂且语序混乱；有不完整的从句和错误的词形（Wanting → being outside；claim my mind → clear my mind）。建议将相关片段合并为完整句并使用合适的动名词/短语："in the evening" 放在地点/时间位置，"being outside" 作主语短语，"clear my mind" 为常用搭配。

× I'm taking a walk outside with my mom. Was. Oh. It was a good memory for me.

✓ I used to take walks outside with my mom. It was a good memory for me.

原句时态和片段不连贯。该句讲过去常做的事情应使用过去习惯表达（used to / past simple）。将碎片合并并用过去时表达更自然："used to take walks" 或 "I often walked."

× We usually talk about literally everything, like what I, what activities? I had a school.

✓ We usually talked about literally everything, like the activities I did at school.

原句问句与陈述句混杂，结构不完整且词序错误（"what I, what activities? I had a school"）。应将信息合并为一完整从句：过去谈论的内容用过去时，"activities I did at school" 表达清楚在学校的活动。

× Because Parks offer an opportunity for people to get close to nature, especially in the big cities like Beijing or Shanghai.

✓ Because parks offer opportunities for people to get close to nature, especially in big cities like Beijing or Shanghai.

名词复数不需要首字母大写；"parks" 用复数泛指，后面用复数名词 "opportunities" 更自然；在泛指的城市概念中不需要定冠词 "the big cities" 可改为 "big cities"。此外首字母大小写应规范。

× Also, Taking a walk in parks is an escape from the daily hustle and bus.

✓ Also, taking a walk in parks is an escape from the daily hustle and bustle.

单词拼写错误："bus" 应为 "bustle"（或并常用搭配 "hustle and bustle"）。动名词用法正确，但注意固定搭配为 "hustle and bustle"。

× Yeah. I would. I like to take a long walk by the seaside. If I had a chance. Because they are. There is no sea. To the city where I live. So I really want to. Enjoy sunshine and gentle breeze.

✓ I would like to take a long walk by the seaside if I had the chance, because there is no sea in the city where I live, so I really want to enjoy the sunshine and the gentle breeze.

原句被许多短断句拆分，导致逻辑和时态混乱。要合并成完整复合句：条件句用过去式 "if I had the chance" 表达假设，主句用情态动词 "would like"，并修正表达（"there is no sea in the city where I live"，"enjoy the sunshine and the gentle breeze"）。

× Well, lately I went for a walk with my bestie last weekend. We went to the. Beihai Park in Beijing. Okay, we walk along the. River and enjoy the sunset together. It was. In the evening.

✓ Well, last weekend I went for a walk with my best friend. We went to Beihai Park in Beijing. We walked along the river and enjoyed the sunset together in the evening.

时态和句子完整性问题：描述过去发生的事应全部用过去时（walked, enjoyed）。另外口语缩略或断句应合并为完整句，"bestie" 可改为更正式的 "best friend"。将"lately"与具体时间冲突，改为 "last weekend" 即可。