钥匙— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct with a clear topic sentence, correct grammatical errors, use linking words and concise supporting details. Start with a simple statement about how many keys you carry, then briefly list what they are using linking words (for example, “I carry five keys: one for..., two for..., and one for...”). Avoid asking rhetorical questions to the examiner and keep to 2–4 sentences.

範例: I usually carry five keys. One is for my apartment door, two are for the security gate outside, one is for the building’s main gate, and the last one is for the vehicle I use. These extras help me feel secure when I’m away from home.

建議: Open with a direct answer, then provide a brief, coherent story with linking words and correct tense consistency. Avoid repetition and filler. Keep it to 2–3 sentences, and add one specific detail about what happened and the result.

範例: Yes, I have. In the first week of college I lost my keys and felt very worried. I called my dad and he came to campus to let me into my room, which saved me from being stranded.

建議: Give a clear, concise topic sentence (yes/no and frequency), then explain with a reason using linking words. Avoid repetition and unfinished sentences. Use present tense for habits and give a specific frequency (e.g. rarely, once a year).

範例: I rarely lock myself out. I make a habit of putting my keys in the same pocket of my bag, so they are as reliable as my phone and I rarely forget them.

建議: Start with a clear opinion, then give two concise, specific reasons linked logically. Avoid filler, repetition and ambiguous phrases like “trust them blindly.” Mention a precaution (e.g. choose a trustworthy neighbor) to show balanced thinking.

範例: Yes, I think it can be a good idea to leave a spare key with a trusted neighbor. This helps if you ever forget or lose your keys, but you should only do this if you trust them and agree on when they will use the key.

× It depends how many keys is too many keys for you?

✓ It depends how many keys are too many for you.

Subject 'how many keys' is plural, so verb should be 'are' (plural) not 'is'. Also remove repeated 'keys' at end for conciseness. Suggestion: treat 'how many' phrases as plural when referring to countable nouns and match plural verbs.

× Because I carry 5 keys with me.

✓ Because I carry 5 keys with me.

Sentence is grammatically correct for plural noun 'keys' with numeral '5'. No change needed. (Included only for completeness.)

× One is for my main door, 2 are for my channel gate that keeps my main door safe, one for the main gate and one is for whatever vehicle I came I use.

✓ One is for my main door, two are for my channel gate that keeps my main door safe, one is for the main gate, and one is for whichever vehicle I use.

Mixed issues: use consistent verb 'is/are' for singular/plural and spell out numbers for style. The fragment 'whatever vehicle I came I use' is ungrammatical; replace with 'whichever vehicle I use'. Ensure each item has a verb if needed and use commas and 'and' to join items properly.

× And the next thing I know I had lost my lost my keys.

✓ And the next thing I knew, I had lost my keys.

Sequence of events requires 'knew' (simple past) rather than 'know'. Also remove duplicated 'lost' and include past perfect 'had lost' to show the keys were lost before the later action (calling his dad). Suggestion: use 'knew' for past perception and 'had' + past participle for earlier past events.

× I called my dad and he came and then he helped.

✓ I called my dad, and he came and helped me.

Original is mostly correct but sounds slightly informal. Add object 'me' after 'helped' to clarify who was helped. Use commas to separate clauses. Tense (simple past) is appropriate.

× I mean, I have forgotten the keys and locked myself out, but I can't say I do it often because.

✓ I mean, I have forgotten my keys and locked myself out, but I can't say I do it often.

Use 'my keys' (possessive) instead of 'the keys' for personal items. Remove trailing 'because' without completion. Present perfect 'have forgotten' correctly indicates past experiences relevant now; keep it. Also delete extra comma before 'but'.

× I get back, I get back home all the time and it's like carrying a phone.

✓ I get back home all the time, and it's like carrying a phone.

Remove duplicated phrase 'I get back'. Use comma before conjunction 'and'. Present simple 'get back' is acceptable to describe habitual action. Ensure sentence flows without repetition.

× If I'm carrying my key the way I carry my phone, it's there all the time inside my bag because since the day was.

✓ If I'm carrying my key the way I carry my phone, it's there all the time inside my bag because I have done so since that day.

Original ends with an incomplete clause 'because since the day was.' Replace with complete time expression 'because I have done so since that day.' Use present perfect 'have done' to indicate action started in the past and continues to present. Also ensure the subordinate clause is complete.

× Oh definitely. Uh, it's a good idea to keep leave your keys with with your neighbor because sometimes you forget to carry your keys and then you have a spare with your neighbor.

✓ Oh definitely. It's a good idea to leave your keys with your neighbor because sometimes you forget to carry them and then you have a spare with your neighbor.

Remove conflicting verbs 'keep leave' — use 'leave'. Remove duplicated 'with'. Use pronoun 'them' to avoid repetition. Modal/modal-like phrasing not needed here; primary issue is word choice and redundancy.

× Also, if they are your neighbor, you trust them blindly, why would they And, and can.

✓ Also, if they are your neighbor and you trust them, why would they do anything to harm you?

Original is fragmented and contains unclear clauses 'why would they And, and can.' Replace with a clear conditional rhetorical question. Use consistent pronouns and a complete verb phrase 'do anything to harm you' to express the intended idea.

× So yeah, uh, keeping your case with the neighbor, it's fine.

✓ So yeah, keeping your keys with the neighbor is fine.

Replace 'case' with 'keys' (likely intended word). Remove extra comma and filler 'uh'. Use a clear subject-verb structure 'keeping your keys with the neighbor is fine.' This fixes the sentence fragment and awkward punctuation.