钥匙— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be careful with grammar, word choice and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct singular/plural and verb forms, and avoid repeated or incorrect words (e.g., "kids" and "keys"). Add one brief supporting reason connected with a linking word. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

範例: No, I don't. My apartment has a fingerprint lock, so I rarely carry keys; this is very convenient because I can go out and return without worrying about losing them.

建議: Clarify meaning and fix mistakes: use correct words ("keys" not "kid"), correct tense and subject–verb agreement, and avoid listing too many items without structure. Provide a concise routine as supporting detail and use linking words like "because" or "so".

範例: No, I haven't. Because I rarely take keys and I'm quite organized, I always check my bag and my phone before I leave so I don't forget anything.

建議: Use correct tenses and articles, and organize the answer into a clear current statement plus a past example. Use linking words such as "however" and "for example" correctly. Keep sentences short and grammatically correct.

範例: No, I don't usually lock myself out. However, last year when I lived in a dormitory, we used a room card instead of keys and I sometimes forgot it, so I had to ask my resident tutor to let me in.

建議: Express your opinion directly, then give two concise, specific reasons with correct grammar and vocabulary. Avoid repetition ("security" twice) and use connectors like "because" and "for example."

範例: No, I don't think it's a good idea because I don't know my neighbours well and therefore wouldn't trust them. Also, if they are unreliable, leaving keys could create a security risk for my home.

× No I don't because my house have fingerprint lock so I do not need the kids to open the door.

✓ No, I don't because my house has a fingerprint lock, so I do not need keys to open the door.

'house have' is incorrect because 'house' is singular and requires 'has' (subject-verb agreement). 'fingerprint lock' needs an article 'a'. 'the kids' is wrong contextually and plural; the intended word is 'keys'. Also add commas for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'my house has a fingerprint lock' and 'keys' instead of 'the kids'.

× It is very convenient to go outside without bringing a key.

✓ It is very convenient to go outside without bringing any keys.

When speaking generally about not needing any of a countable item, use 'any' with the plural 'keys'. 'a key' suggests one specific key; 'any keys' fits the general idea. Suggestion: Use 'without bringing any keys' for general statements.

× No, I haven't because I seldom bring a kid to go outside and I'm very organized.

✓ No, I haven't because I seldom bring a key when I go outside and I'm very organized.

'bring a kid' is incorrect and changes meaning; likely intended 'bring a key'. 'bring a key' is singular and correct here. Also 'to go outside' is better as 'when I go outside'. Suggestion: Replace 'kid' with 'key' and use 'when I go outside'.

× Before I leave my house, I will check my purse, my phones and my back to make sure I brings all the things.

✓ Before I leave my house, I check my purse, my phone, and my bag to make sure I bring all my things.

Tense and agreement: use simple present 'I check' for habitual action rather than 'will check'. 'phones' should be singular 'phone' unless multiple phones; 'back' is incorrect word choice — 'bag'. 'brings' is wrong because subject 'I' requires 'bring'. 'all the things' is awkward; use 'all my things'. Suggestion: Use simple present for routines and match verb forms to subject.

× No I don't, however last year I live in dormitory, we use a room card to open the door instead of a keys and sometimes I lost that just forget it.

✓ No, I don't. However, last year I lived in a dormitory; we used a room card to open the door instead of keys, and sometimes I lost it because I just forgot.

Tense inconsistency: 'last year' requires past tense 'lived' and 'used'. 'a dormitory' needs an article. 'instead of a keys' mixes singular article with plural noun; use 'keys' without 'a'. 'sometimes I lost that just forget it' mixes past and present and is ungrammatical; correct to 'sometimes I lost it because I just forgot.' Suggestion: Keep past tense for past events and fix article/noun agreement.

× So I need to ask teacher to open my door.

✓ So I needed to ask the teacher to open my door.

Tense should match previous past context ('needed'). Also missing article 'the' before 'teacher'. Suggestion: Use 'the teacher' and past tense when describing past events.

× No I don't think it is a good idea. One of the reason is I don't know my neighbors well, so I cannot believe them.

✓ No, I don't think it is a good idea. One of the reasons is that I don't know my neighbors well, so I cannot trust them.

'One of the reason' should be 'One of the reasons' (plural). 'believe them' is awkward for trusting neighbors; use 'trust them'. Add 'that' after 'is' for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'reasons' and 'trust' to express reliability concerns.

× Another reason is that I'm not sure they are responsible or not, so it might cause some secure security risk.

✓ Another reason is that I'm not sure whether they are responsible, so it might cause a security risk.

Avoid 'or not' with 'whether' and remove redundant/incorrect words 'secure security'. Use 'a security risk' as the correct noun phrase. Suggestion: Use 'whether' and 'a security risk' for clearer expression.