钥匙— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two brief, specific details. Use correct plural/singular forms and simple linking words to improve coherence.

範例: Yes, I usually carry three keys. Two are for my house — one for the front door and one for the back — and the third key is for my shop, which I open every morning.

建議: Use past tense consistently and avoid fillers. Give a clear sequence (what happened, what you did, and what you learned) with linking words like 'so' or 'therefore'.

範例: Yes, I once lost my bike key and felt very nervous. I called my dad and he brought a spare key, so I could continue. From that experience, I became more responsible and now always double-check my belongings before leaving.

建議: Avoid hesitation sounds and be direct. Use simple present tense for habits and correct phrasing (e.g., 'I rarely lose my keys'). Provide a short reason or routine to support the statement, using a linking word like 'because' or 'so'.

範例: No, I rarely lock myself out because I always keep my keys in my pocket. For example, I check I have them before I leave the house, so I don't forget them.

建議: Be more precise and formal in phrasing. Start with a clear opinion, then contrast conditions using linking words like 'however' and 'unless'. Avoid vague terms like 'good'/'bad' without brief reasons.

範例: It depends on how trustworthy your neighbour is. If they are reliable, leaving a spare key with them can be convenient; however, unless you trust them, it is safer to keep the key yourself or use a secure lockbox.

× Yes I do, I bring 3 keys with me every time.

✓ Yes, I do. I bring three keys with me every time.

Use a comma after 'Yes' and a period to separate sentences; write numbers in words for clarity in speech transcripts. This corrects punctuation and style rather than grammatical number, but keeps plural 'keys' consistent with 'three'.

× The 1st 2 is far from my, the 1st 2 are from my house, one with the back door and one for the front door and also the other one is from my shop.

✓ The first two are far from me. The first two are for my house: one for the back door and one for the front door, and the other one is for my shop.

Use 'first two' (words) and plural verb 'are' to agree with plural subject. Replace incorrect pronoun 'my' with 'me' or 'from me'; clarify 'for my house' and use 'for' with doors. Split into clearer sentences to fix sentence-structure errors.

× I have to open the shop where I walked.

✓ I have to open the shop where I work.

'Where I walked' is incorrect because 'walked' (past action) doesn't convey usual workplace. Use 'work' to indicate location of employment. Also use present simple for habitual actions.

× Yeah, I once lost my bike key and was very nervous by the time umm, I have to call my dad to brought me a spare key and that's make me become a more responsible person who will watch out for my personal belongings.

✓ Yeah, I once lost my bike key and was very nervous at the time. I had to call my dad to bring me a spare key, and that made me become a more responsible person who watches out for my personal belongings.

Use 'at the time' not 'by the time'. Use past perfect/simple consistent past: 'had to call' and 'bring' (base form after 'had to') or 'called' and 'brought' as past; corrected to 'had to call' and 'bring' or changed to 'called'/'brought'. Also change 'that's make' to past 'that made' and 'will watch' to present 'watches' to describe a habitual result.

× Mm-hmm. Uh, I have to say that I'd rarely lost my key except for the one that, uh, I talked to you before.

✓ Mm-hmm. Uh, I have to say that I rarely lose my key except for the one I told you about before.

Use present tense 'I rarely lose' to describe a habitual action. 'I'd rarely lost' mixes conditional/auxiliary with past participle incorrectly. Use 'told you about before' for the correct collocation instead of 'talked to you before'.

× I always put it in my pocket and make sure that I take it me all the time I go out.

✓ I always put it in my pocket and make sure that I take it with me every time I go out.

Add preposition 'with' in 'take it with me' and use 'every time' instead of 'all the time' for clarity. This fixes incorrect preposition use and word order.

× I think that may depend on whether you have a good neighbor or not.

✓ I think that may depend on whether you have a good neighbor or not.

Sentence is correct grammatically; no change needed. It uses modal 'may' appropriately and correct preposition 'on' earlier implied; kept as-is.

× If you have a good neighbor, then yeah, you may ask them to keep the key for you.

✓ If you have a good neighbor, then yes, you can ask them to keep the key for you.

Replace informal 'yeah' with 'yes' for formality and use 'can' to indicate ability/permission more naturally than 'may' in this context. Sentence structure otherwise correct.

× However, in the case you have a bad neighbor, you should bring it your own.

✓ However, if you have a bad neighbor, you should bring it yourself.

Use 'if' for conditional clause. Replace 'bring it your own' (incorrect word order and possessive) with reflexive 'yourself' to indicate you should carry the key personally.